Vandana Parashar

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1. .
   rush hour the train station cornea by cornea

   Alan Summers
   Second Prize,
   The Australian Haiku Society Spring Haiga Kukai: Non-Seasonal, 2017
   judge Ron Moss

   Feature/Interview: Tete-a-Tete: Alan Summers
   Wise Owl literary journal (April 2022)

   article:
   whiptail monoku series:
   Reading One-Line Haiku with Kat and Robin: Blurring the Boundaries
   (March 2023)

2. shadow is spinning
   I count it second after second
   waiting minutes

3. morning light
   piece by piece
   filling in the sky

4. twilight
   the part of her I see
   the part of her I sense

   Alan S. Bridges
   The Heron’s Nest XXII, March 2022

5. blue sky
   question and answer
   blue stream

   .

   feather by feather,
   nests are borne, born. he sweeps
   the path to her door

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   apple tree blossoms
   wake up. the kitchen tap leaks
   drop… by drop… by drop…

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6. Looking to the repetition examples! :-)

   Here’s that had three repetitions rather than just two:

   house clearance
   room by room by room
   my mother disappears

   Alan Summers

   Winner, Touchstone Award 2016 (The Haiku Foundation)
   Shortlisted: Museum of Haiku Literature, Tokyo, Japan
   First Publication Credit: Blithe Spirit 26.1 (March 2016)

   Anthology Credits:
   The Signature Haiku Anthology ed. Robert Epstein (Middle Island Press 2020)

   2018 Haiku Canada Members’ Anthology / L’anthologie 2018 des membres de Haïku Canada ed. Marco Fraticelli and Philomene Kocher

   old song: The Red Moon Anthology of English-Language Haiku 2017
   ed. Jim Kacian/Red Moon Press Editorial Staff

   Per Diem ed. Dave Read (The Haiku Foundation Friday 28th June 2019)
   Per Diem ed. Anna Maris Per Diem (The Haiku Foundation October 2019)

   Signature Haiku ed. Robert Epstein (Middle Island Press 2020):
   _______________________
   ALAN’S COMMENTARY
   _______________________

   “My mother died long after my father, and so her influence was even stronger. I felt that the repetition of “room” was necessary. The process to prepare the house for sale was emotional, and also heartbreaking, it was closing something in me.” –Alan Summers

   vidage de maison
   pièce après pièce après pièce
   ma mère disparaît

   French translation by Serge Tomé
   Tempslibres – free times haiku database
   Analyse de la structure d’un haïku
   by Serge Tomé
   https://www.tempslibres.org/tl/tlphp/dbhk03.php?id=8018&lg=f

   Touchstone Award Winner 2016 Judges’ commentary:
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   “When I read haiku, I’m looking for an unexpected view on the well-known. I’m curious to learn about an open secret (after Robert Spiess). I’m looking for a simple (but not banal) and lucid language that expresses something extraordinary within the ordinary, something which I never read before in that way as well as something that is of beauty beyond time. ‘house clearance’ represents the pure power of haiku. Layers of meaning ascending from deeper layers of the mind (‘room by room by room’) in relation to existential truth (‘my mother disappears’). Perhaps one finds a human contradiction: memories can only get preserved vividly after “clearance.”
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   “An emotional and vivid image that brings sadness at first reading while effectively pointing out that taking away the physical doesn’t remove the memory.”

   Judges:

   Diane Wakoski
   Renée Owen
   Michele Root-Bernstein
   Gary Hotham
   Ron C. Moss
   Dietmar Tauchner

7. Thank you. I had just reprinted this poem when I read the post.

   blue sky and trees
   on the birch tree branch
   blue jay

   Poems From Oostburg, Wisconsin
   https://ellenolinger.com/

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