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The Renku Sessions: Way of the Wind – Week 9

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I am John Stevenson and I will be your guide for a twenty-stanza, nijûin, renku.

Coming to this point in a renku feels to me like suddenly coming to a long stretch of open highway after navigating a narrow and winding mountain road. This is our chance to step on the accelerator and give it some gas!

You have come through with a wonderful range of possibilities. My report could almost consist of just listing everything that was offered. Cutting it down to a more manageable set of verses, here are some I particularly enjoyed:

 

whiskey neat sloshing
on crumpled pages

                                    Betty Shropshire

 

one glob of ink
cockles the paper

                                    Carol Jones

 

landing in the drunk tank
after failing the walk-and-turn

                                    Laurie Greer

 

talk of ending
the senate filibuster

                                    Chris Patchel

 

his sketches find
a place on the wall

                                    Nancy Brady

 

she throws the compass overboard
for always pointing north

                                    Keith Evetts

 

cage free chickens must
drive themselves to market

                                    Michael Henry Lee

 

sumi-e cliffs inked
with a wobbly brush

                                    Marietta McGregor

 

even as we argue
new planets are born

                                    Marietta McGregor

 

an empty frame
now ready to be filled

                                    Tracy Davidson

 

apropos of
“A Confederacy of Dunces”

                                    Betty Shropshire

 

a few strokes in charcoal
and the portrait’s done

                                    Ellen Compton

 

elbows touch in greeting
at the summit

                                    Keith Evetts

 

between sky and sea
the colors of the freight train parade

                                    Angiola Inglese

 

penciling in
a doctor’s appointment

                                    Pauline O’Carolan

 

another bounced cheque
in today’s mail

                                    Barbara A. Taylor

 

unappreciated caricature
thrown in the trash

                                    Debbie Feller

 

beads of rain
glistening on a wire

                                    Michelle Beyers

 

someone once said
it takes a train to cry

                                    Lorin Ford

 

While these and others would have served our needs, there were a few that were especially attractive to me:

 

anxiety relieved
by popping bubble-wrap

                                    Andrew Shimield

I will probably not select another verse from Andrew in this renku but he continues to make good suggestions. Named emotions is a vast topic area and comes along very nicely after the subdued, implied emotion of the previous love verse.

 

what to do
with all the iron filings

                                    Laurie Greer

As I’m sure Laurie also knows, I probably won’t use another verse from her in this renku. But, as she also knows, I’m glad to see her continue to play along. And I want to highlight her verse for the comic twist it gives to the “attraction” of verse seven.

 

actors told
to stick to the script

                                    Carol Jones

Theater is an attractive topic and the constraints of scripted theater pairs nicely with the vows of a long marriage. (I don’t know how many of you know it, but I have been performing a kind of improvisational theater for the past thirty years)

 

a bike retrofitted
with shock absorbers

                                    Maxianne Berger

Probably not a bicycle built for two!

 

Monterey mermaid
knitting a seaweed sweater

                                    Dan Campbell

And Dan knows that he will probably not have another verse included in this renku; especially not when the verse before last was his own. But I’m delighted that he continues to play and the sheer goofiness of this verse is exactly right for this middle section.

 

Here is what I have selected as our eighth verse:

 

queuing up to enter
the Escher exhibit

                        Carol Judkins

This introduces the topics of art, museum and a large gathering of people. The juxtaposition of a line (an orderly line?) with an artist noted for deceptively presented perspectives is interesting. I imagine a line in which one thinks the entry door is drawing near, only to discover that a trick of perspective has, instead, put one at the end of the line.

 

Here is what we have, so far:

 

Way of the Wind

 

green barley—
we follow the way
of the wind

                        Lorin Ford

 

kids playing pooh sticks
with plum blossoms

                        Linda Weir

 

the long day opens
with a chime of pots
on the kitchen island

                        Laurie Greer

 

a coin in the cap
of a street busker

                        Andrew Shimield

 

summer moon
low on the hips
of the horizon

                        princess k

 

mosquitoes know that my wife
has sweeter blood

                        Dan Campbell

 

still drawn to him
after all the bumps
along the line

                        Wendy C. Bialek

 

queuing up to enter
the Escher exhibit

                        Carol Judkins

 

 

 

We will now continue with non-seasonal verses.  No kigo should be included and no images that have their own places in a renku – no moon, no love, no blossoms. Let us continue to focus on broadening the topic areas with subject matter not previously touched upon.

 

The requirements for verse nine will be as follows:

  • A three-line verse of seventeen syllables or less
  • With no seasonal image (no kigo)
  • Without a grammatical break
  • Linking in some way to verse eight (and in no obvious way to previous verses)

 

For this renku, we will be using this site (http://www.2hweb.net/haikai/renku/500ESWd.html) as the source for our season words and images. We should also check it when writing non-seasonal verses in order to be sure we have not used a kigo without intending to.

 

I will be reviewing your offers until midnight on Monday, June 28 (New York time). On Thursday, July 1 there will be a new post in which I will announce my selection of the ninth verse, comment on some of the other offers, and issue instructions for writing verse ten.

Good work, everyone,

John

 

 

 

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This Post Has 84 Comments

  1. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins

    ***
    I pause
    the monochromatic scale
    of your thoughts

    ***
    mingling in the stairs
    and fashionably late
    for the buffet
    ***
    slow start
    a squeegee kid
    shows me the directions
    ***
    dude
    mistaking me for
    his dear dead dad

  2. our canoe
    scrapes gravel bars
    in gentle currents
    ************************
    at the hay barn in
    sprawling in the shade,
    pups suckle
    *************************
    through bottom land,
    the creek meanders,
    eroding soil

    pups suckle

  3. all his drawing
    to be wet by water
    tumbled down sudden
    ***
    2) return from mall
    by a sudden
    phone call

    **
    all his exercise
    only for trip
    and fall
    **
    from empty jar
    crow’s beak
    empty mound

  4. .
    .
    queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit
    .
    Carol Judkins
    .
    .
    what’s in a mane?
    it falls in waves
    around the ears
    .
    what’s in a mane?
    bristling against the snarls
    and a gnashing of teeth
    .
    what’s in a mane?
    a score
    to settle
    .
    what’s in a mane?
    the fine art of
    fingering
    .
    what’s in a mane?
    three long hanks
    cross-examined
    .
    what’s in a mane?
    the confidence of
    commitment
    .
    .

  5. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins
    *
    in the park
    chess players watch
    spinning totems
    *
    the debate team stuck
    on defining
    democratic voting
    *

    1. or, without any people:

      voting rights
      painted
      into a corner
      *
      spinning tops
      on every table
      in the park
      *

  6. newly taped posters
    inhale and exhale
    on the dorm wall

    6/27/2021 by wendy © bialek

    patterns growing
    out of itself and
    off the page

    6/27/2021 by wendy © bialek

    1. changes:

      a pattern has grown
      out of the page
      and out of itself

      6/27/2021 by wendy © bialek

  7. Congrats Carol! Perhaps inspiration will come, but not feeling it at the moment, so probably sit this one out and enjoy reading the submitted verses.

  8. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins
    .
    labyrinths
    multiply in the other
    hemisphere

  9. how the room spins
    after that
    spontaanikäymisolut*
    – Betty Shropshire

    *Noun
    spontaanikäymisolut

    spontaneous fermentation beer, wild yeast beer (beer fermented using spontaneous fermentation caused by “wild” yeast)

  10. in and yang
    in the faded colors
    of a tattoo
    ***
    typos
    in a book of poetry
    badly printed
    ***
    the heat of Florence
    blushes the cheeks
    of David’s admirers
    ***
    approaching the sea
    at a walking pace
    a klaxon concert

  11. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins

    the elevator
    arrives on the ground floor
    with an empty cage
    —–
    the echoes
    of pandemonic laughter
    in the vestibule

  12. congrats, Carol, and thanks John for your comments,

    grinning all the way
    on a stairway
    to heaven

    *

    stuck in the maze
    I beg you to show me
    which way out

    *

    Delta Virus
    ever multiplying, sweeps
    through our lives

  13. Congratulations to Carol! Thank you, John, for the mention.

    Verse 1:

    they fled
    the city lockdown
    but took the virus with them

    Verse 2:

    just dinner
    inside the cafe
    and virus the result

    Verse 3:

    at the country show
    he won first prize
    for his embroidery

    Verse 4:

    mask refusal
    displays
    more than expression

    Verse 5:

    there was
    a free for all
    in the toilet paper aisle

  14. congrats to Carol, and thanks, John, for pausing at mine .. am ensconced in a project so might sit out this week, although I realize it gets more and more difficult .. best to all who are toughing it through ☺

  15. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit
    .
    Carol Judkins
    .
    back to the library
    with the keys
    to other worlds

  16. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins
    .
    the metamorphosis
    of all the frogs
    in the pond
    .
    the chaos of being lost
    in the maze
    of her nightmare
    .
    Nancy Brady, 2021

  17. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit
    .
    Carol Judkins
    .
    something extra
    left in the baker’s
    bag of loaves

    1. Too soon for a person, I think, so here’s an edited version:
      .
      someting extra
      left in the bag
      of bakery loaves

  18. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins

    Russian dolls
    look through
    a stack of reveries

    —————————————-
    (I considered:
    spiralling into
    Fibonacci daydreams
    each in the other

    and
    fractal curves
    of the new Guggenheim
    in the cumulus

    …but thought: after we have just had Escher, John isn’t going to want another named person, right?)

    1. Right, Keith! We’ll want at least a couple more verses before including another proper noun. Ideally, more than a couple.

  19. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins

    plenty of time
    to look for UFOs
    above the skyscrapers

  20. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins

    mass vaccination
    rolled out
    across the country

  21. Yay Carol! Thank you for giving us such a fun verse to write to!

    spiral slide hides
    the surprise of someone
    too scared to go down

  22. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit
    *
    making of quilling
    a matter
    for fractals
    *
    Wanted this to be quilting, but afraid that’s a winter kigo. But the paper craft should still work.

  23. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins

    gladiators stabled
    on a different level
    to wildlife

  24. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins

    lights camera action
    as we stride into
    the auditorium

  25. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins

    his Janus face
    worn only
    for effect

  26. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins

    the only thing
    melting today
    is my makeup

  27. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins

    we go round
    and round loving
    the spin we’re in

  28. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit
    – Carol Judkins

    floored by
    another pundit’s
    nothingburger
    – Betty Shropshire

  29. Congratulations Carol and I enjoyed reading about your improv theater experience John!
    *
    A wintry wind
    chose his final
    resting place

    Old roosters
    cough more
    than crow

    Only castles count
    the seconds
    between waves

    I’ve touched
    the top of a fallen
    redwood tree

    Only in the city
    do you stop to watch
    a dog pee

  30. she exits
    through the gift shop
    with unpaid gifts
    *
    another set of prints
    helping police
    with their enquiries
    *
    his perspective
    altered
    by the doctor’s news
    *
    she still struggles
    to make sense
    of the shrink’s ink blots

  31. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins
    ***

    ah …
    this is very reasonable
    for prestigious works

    Nani Mariani

  32. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins
    ****
    if
    i brought candy
    will be entertained

    Nani Mariani

  33. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins

    how the rain
    makes me skip
    over clouds

    6/25/2021 by wendy © bialek

  34. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins

    what the
    queen of diamonds
    morphed to be

    6/25/2021 by wendy © bialek

  35. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins

    aesthetes recoil
    from a sine wave
    concertina’d in a spring

  36. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit
                            Carol Judkins

    strokes of genius
    in the robot’s algorithm
    masterpiece
    *

    quantum leaps
    down the black holes
    of conspiracy theories

    Congratulations Carol, and thank you John, I enjoyed all the commentary.

  37. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit
    *
    the rejiggered codes
    for Crispr versions
    of ourselves
    *

  38. Congratulations, Carol. Now that’s an interesting line-up. 🙂 The polite queue waiting to enter Escher’s universe will probably find what appears to be a similar queue in one of the exhibition pieces .
    .
    queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins

    couch potatoes
    glued to one more episode
    of Upstairs Downstairs

    .

  39. knowing then
    what we know now
    we’re still not quite sure
    **************************
    it’s harder
    getting work now
    as an illustrated man
    ***************************
    the right hand
    never knows what
    the left hand is doing
    *****************************
    her entire
    trip abroad restricted
    to quarantine
    ****************************
    the unwatched pot
    boils furiously
    over

  40. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins

    transformed
    by a world placed
    inside out

    6/24/2021 by wendy © bialek

  41. all fine picks and fun commentary john.

    congrats carol j. for a great following and turn to the escher art !

    queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins

  42. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit
    – Carol Judkins

    framed
    and judged guilty
    was just a nightmare
    – Betty Shropshire

    1. perhaps a bit better:

      to be framed
      and judged guilty
      was just a nightmare
      – Betty Shropshire

  43. queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins

    the days I spent
    stacking eggboxes
    to pay for college

    1. ….or, if we don’t want the first person, simply:

      the days spent
      stacking eggboxes
      to pay for college

  44. So = another intriguing twist! Well done, Carol.

    queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins

    do you think
    they discovered chaos theory
    by chance

  45. Thank you, John, for your helpful comments and for pausing on mine. Congratulations, Carol.

    daydreaming
    as I eye
    ascending triangles

    Michelle Beyers
    Copyright © 6/24/21

  46. Congratulations, Carol Judkins. A very nice choice, John, and thankyou for pausing on some of my verses. Enjoyed reading your comments. Seems you’re a bit of a, dark horse.

  47. Congratulations, Carol! A brilliant follow-up to Wendy’s. And thanks, John, for the comments and notice.
    *
    queuing up to enter
    the Escher exhibit

    Carol Judkins
    *
    every inch
    the perfect
    master of ceremonies
    *

  48. congratulations a Carol Judkins for the chosen verse, thanks a John Stevenson for having named mine too

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