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The Renku Sessions: Way of the Wind – Week 6

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I am John Stevenson and I will be your guide for a twenty-stanza, nijûin, renku.

A brief posting this week.

At this point in our renku, we are looking for a very pronounced departure from where we have been in the opening section.

We also have to check all the boxes: a winter or summer kigo from the list we’re using, a moon or moonlight image, three lines without a grammatical break, no obvious linkage to prior verses. Here are some verses that managed all of this.

 

this winter moon
as pale as the moons
of winters past

                             Lorin Ford

 

waning quarter moon
gives what it can
to the winter city

                             Jonathan Alderfer

 

moonlight
splashes
in the waterfall

                             Carol Jones

 

mother always says
an upended moon
brings winter showers

                             Marietta McGregor

 

 

that pesky mosquito
ought to be fuller than
tonight’s moon

                             Berry Shropshire

 

only the moon
saw him burn the notes
in the fireplace

                             Pauline O’Carolan

 

footprints
of a run in the snow
the moon

                             Margherita Petriccione

 

the moon’s
magic caught
in a weir

                             Wendy C. Bialek

 

the cat’s eyes
fixed on moths
dancing in moonlight

                             Liz Ann Winkler

 

 

And here is what I have selected as our fifth verse:

 

summer moon
low on the hips
of the horizon

                             princess k

The casual dress of summer is projected upon the landscape. This is the verse that is charged with getting the party started. Our next two will be our first pair of love verses. I have mixed feelings about such a strong setup but can’t resist this offer. Since we are naming a season, we will forego that method of meeting the seasonal requirement for future verses.

 

Here is what we have, so far:

 

Way of the Wind

 

green barley—
we follow the way
of the wind

                        Lorin Ford

 

kids playing pooh sticks
with plum blossoms

                        Linda Weir

 

the long day opens
with a chime of pots
the kitchen island

                        Laurie Greer

 

a coin in the cap
of a street busker

                        Andrew Shimield

 

summer moon
low on the hips
of the horizon

                        princess k

 

We are now approaching our first pair of love verses. The love verses in a renku are about love between adult human beings. So, love of pets, ice cream, etc. will not satisfy the requirements. The pair of love verses will need to have a sense of progress. This means that our first love verse should not be about the end or aftermath of love.

The requirements for verse six will be as follows:

  • A two-line verse of fourteen syllables or less
  • With a summer kigo from our designated list
  • With a focus on love between adult human beings
  • Without a grammatical break
  • Linking in some way to verse five (and in no obvious way to previous verses)

For this renku, we will be using this site (http://www.2hweb.net/haikai/renku/500ESWd.html) as the source for our season words and images.

 

I will be reviewing your offers until midnight on Monday, June 7 (New York time). On Thursday, June 10 there will be a new post in which I will announce my selection of the sixth verse, comment on some of the other offers, and issue instructions for writing verse seven offers.

Thank you, everyone,
John

 

 

 

 

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This Post Has 90 Comments

  1. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k
    *
    swimming with the girl
    who moves like Marilyn

  2. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon
    – princess k

    no boundaries for this love
    as fireflies wink in&out
    – Betty Shropshire

  3. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon
    – princess k

    first slow dance as a man
    same as you in the afterglow
    – Betty Shropshire

  4. *
    summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon
    *
    inside one hula hoop
    we set out for a starlit swim
    *

  5. his tender suit
    in her delicate hands
    ********
    her summer drive
    smile in windscreen of his car
    **********

    her summer moon
    in his nearby glass mirror
    *******
    firefly in midnight
    dwell in their watchful play
    ***********
    plateful of sweet fish
    their night delicacy
    ********

  6. in these evenings so long
    our voices in a whisper
    **************************
    my breathless body
    while I look at you
    **************************
    the skin sings
    feeling your perfume between the sheets

  7. 17 years of sweet nothings
    silenced by cicada song

    6/07/2021 by wendy © bialek

    or shortened form:

    their sweet nothings
    silenced by cicada song

    6/07/2021 by wendy © bialek

    1. shortened to:

      17 years of sweet nothings
      silenced by cicada

      6/07/2021 by wendy © bialek

  8. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon
    .
    princess k
    .
    the unexpected burn
    of your middle age kiss
    .
    the smouldering heat
    in your midnight tango

  9. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon
    .
    princess k
    .
    the kiss from my fingers
    into a fragrant Breeze

  10. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon
    .
    princess k
    .
    love a like draft
    of fresh spring water

  11. a fragrant breeze
    perfumes their yearning
    ***********************
    fireworks punctuate
    their ardor
    ****************************
    cooling off after
    a sultry samba dance

  12. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon
    – princess k

    sacred kingfisher eyeing
    their backwater tryst
    – Betty Shropshire

  13. As three of mine have been skittled (trees, clothes) may I offer another two?

    summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k

    the way she sways
    in the fragrant breeze

    an ocean of thunder
    as we cross the line

  14. the sweat between her breasts
    in the summer night

    ***
    on the intertwined hands
    the summer night and a cello

    ***
    they drink together laughing
    from an iced amphora

    ***
    when she sways out of the shower,
    the beach gets even hotter

    ***
    on the curve of her lips
    a drop of ice cream

  15. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon
    – princess k

    unheedful of the drought
    as he gathers her close
    – Betty Shropshire

  16. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k
    *
    a kiss of rainbows as they
    fall for each other
    *

  17. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon
                            princess k

    the lovers’ rowboat
    adrift in lapping waves

  18. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k

    our nook in the dunes
    as the fireworks begin

  19. an evening downpour washes
    the ink from our poems

    ozone scented air
    and the taste of salt on your lips

    our yin yang legs
    entwine to claps of thunder

  20. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k
    *
    basking in the afterglow
    of their underhandedness

    1. oops–should be no hands. Maybe this:

      basking in the afterglow
      of their bold understanding
      *
      or
      basking in the afterglow
      of their bold undertaking

  21. Great one, princess k!

    summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon
    ***
    sharing an outdoor bath
    with a river frog’s soundtrack
    ***
    naked in the garden
    until the mosquitoes
    ***
    from our navels
    the rise of fireworks
    ***

  22. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon
    *
    short night of dancing
    as the Stonewall becomes Stonewall

  23. Such a lovely opening to our love verse sequence, congratulations princess k!
    *
    summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon
    *
    body heat thru thin clothes
    his first he-him kiss
    *

      1. Hi John. Trying to work this out so providing a few.

        body heat thru thin clothes
        upon his first he-him kiss

  24. Verse 1:

    they lie entwined
    behind the waterfall

    Verse 2:

    watching the evening downpour
    and each other

    Verse 3:

    at the end of the rainbow
    he stole her heart

    Verse 4:

    swimming naked
    and both peeking

    Verse 5:

    Jack and Jill
    hot on top of the hill

  25. lovely verse, Princess K !
    *
    summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon — princess k
    *
    cicadas sing the same song
    they sang on their honeymoon

  26. Many of you have been offering verses that feature flowers or trees. There are specific verses within the renku that require such images but we need to refrain until those verses come along.

  27. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon
    princess k
    .
    young lovers swimming out
    to the third sandbank
    .

  28. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k
    ***
    feeling of spontaneity
    electricity flows throughout the body

    Nani Mariani

  29. Congratulations, pk!

    summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k

    distant thunder
    and love an echo too

    lightning charges
    the curve of your thigh

  30. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon
    princess k
    .
    he tucks a peony
    into her sarong
    .
    a fragrant peony tucked
    behind her ear
    .
    an old bush warbler serenades
    his mate and us
    .
    the fragrant breeze rocks them
    gently in the hammock
    .
    he plucks a cicada shell
    from her hair

  31. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k

    a sweetheart’s blush
    amidst the wild iris
    Or
    sweethearts blush
    in the willow’s shade

  32. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k
    *
    their every kiss another
    curve on the rainbow
    *

  33. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k

    #2
    we choose the same tree
    in the evening downpour

    #3
    two faces smiling
    by the clear stream

    #4
    we glide
    in a smouldering tango

    #5
    in summer chiffon she reviews
    offers until midnight

  34. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k
    *
    learning every curve
    in the luxuriant foliage
    *

  35. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k
    *
    nothing meet cuter
    than rainbows and fireworks
    *

  36. her loose sarong
    becomes his pick-up line

    6/03/2021 by wendy © bialek

    i imagined that, too!
    should sarong qualiflies as thin clothing

        1. That is correct. While we try to avoid any obvious links to any verse other than the one to which we are currently linking, this is even more intensely the case with regard to the hokku and to the “last but one” verse. So, since two verses ago we had an article of clothing, we cannot have one in this current verse.

  37. Yay princess k! What a perfect verse!

    fishing from the small boat
    lines and limbs can’t help but touch

  38. his smoldering gaze
    hotter than the night
    *
    their short night
    full of fireworks
    *
    falling for the boy
    with a shady side
    *
    with love on his lips
    no time for switching clothes
    *
    his shower of kisses
    after a long drought

  39. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k

    *
    beside the wild irises
    our clothes tangle
    *

  40. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k
    ***
    hand in hand
    you and me were hit by the waves

    Nani Mariani

  41. well done princess k
    *
    summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k
    *
    the imprint of our bodies
    in the cut grass

  42. Congratulations atulations.., dear Princess k!!

    *******
    summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k

    humming …
    we swing in one hammock

    Nani Mariani

  43. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k
    .
    What an excellent verse , in itself and to open the way for the ‘love’ verses. (for some unknown reason I visualise a sarong slipping down the hips in a very revealing way. I also (for no good reason) have the image of someone dancing in that sarong.

    Congratulations, princess k. 🙂

  44. ooops-left out kigo!

    summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k

    their sides bump
    in hot hula class

    6/03/2021 by wendy © bialek

  45. how wonderful, pk!
    congrats on a very relatable
    and creative verse!
    great pick. john.
    thanks for the mention.

    summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k

    their sides bump
    in hula hoop class

    6/03/2021 by wendy © bialek

  46. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k

    hearts on fire in
    the afterglow of a kiss

  47. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k

    I ask the phoenix tree
    am I too old to love

  48. Love that vs princess k
    ******************************
    the morning after smoldering
    from the night before

  49. summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k
    *
    thunder just subterfuge for
    this fateful collision
    *

  50. congrats princess k, I always enjoy your verses and thank you John.
    *
    mosquitos know that my wife
    has sweeter blood

  51. Lovely strong verse princess k, very evocative!

    summer moon
    low on the hips
    of the horizon

    princess k

    hand in hand we run
    where wild roses intertwine

  52. Nice work, Princess! A lovely verse that gets us nicely set up for the love verses.
    John, thanks as always for the comments, reminders, etc.

  53. Wow! Thanks John! I am very pleased to have a verse selected for inclusion in this renku and looking forward to reading all of the submissions for the linked love verse.

    1. So happy for you, princess k. It’s a very clever verse, as yours always are. Pauline

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