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The Renku Sessions: Way of the Wind – Week 11

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I am John Stevenson and I am your guide for a twenty-stanza, nijûin, renku.

The verse that is selected this week will conclude the first half of our renku. We are in the party phase of composition and it’s time to make some noise.

Here are a few of the many offers that stood out for me this week:

 

prayer flags while still
in the wilderness

                             Betty Shropshire

 

images of atoms
painted on tarot cards

                             Liz Ann Winkler

 

confident my toolbox
will stay tidy now

                             Keith Evetts

 

a scientist-come-poet
explains the cosmos to me

                             Marion Clarke

 

citing chapter
and multiverse

                             Laurie Greer

 

black hole sipping
on a spiral galaxy

                             Dan Campbell

 

to come to a verdict
the judge rolls the dice

                             Maxianne Berger

 

to a little bit of luck
add a dash of flare

                             Ellen Compton

 

the miracle of a vegetable
that I watered with care

                             Margherita Petriccione

 

I only know for sure
my cat is called Schrödinger

                             Marion Clarke

 

sitting like a Buddha
in the center of it

                             Kanjini Devi

 

to scry or not to scry
is still the question

                             Lorin Ford

 

the badlands undisputedly
rich in ore

                             Betty Shropshire

 

And here are a some that would have been finalists if we didn’t already have a verse from each of the poets:

 

roller-skating with two trays
the waitress keeps her balance

                             Keith Evetts

 

charting the patterns
in a buffalo stampede

                             Dan Campbell

 

a symbol with feathers
in the widening gyre

                             Lorin Ford

 

tricycle bicycle Civic
Mercedes wheelchair hearse

                             Dan Campbell

 

mould on a petri dish
becomes penicillin

                             Andrew Shimield

 

a swirl of gutter litter
from a passing truck

                             Keith Evetts

 

voting rights
at risk again

                             Laurie Greer

 

 

The final choice comes down to several offers:

 

waking up from a bad dream
I realize it was true

                             Angiola Inglese

 

Dreams and waking nightmares represent topic areas we haven’t touched upon. And the emotional tone of this verse is at the amplitude we would like to be reaching at this point or soon after in our renku.

 

three-martini lunch
with old pals from sigma nu

                             Betty Shropshire

 

Alcohol, friendship, reminiscence, and the Greek alphabet; all areas we have touched upon lightly or not at all. And the use of a number allows me to mention the rule that any further use of numbering in this renku would have to be higher than a three.

 

escorted discretely away
from the blackjack table

                             Debbie Feller

 

The suppressed violence of this image would be very welcome here or within the next four or five verses. Also, the implication of criminal activity. My only concern is that our hokku names a color. It will be better, therefore, to avoid naming any further colors, even if the color is figurative, as in “blackjack.”

 

the big bang
from his Chevy 69

                             Tracy Davidson

 

Laugh-out-loud images would also be welcome at this point. With a proper noun in the verse-before-last (Escher) we might want to revisit this later.

 

an umbrella to ensure
it doesn’t rain

                             Chis Patchel

And

 

clean and sober now
knock on wood

                             Chris Patchel

 

Both offer new subject matter: umbrella and rain, addiction and recovery, superstition. They both imply a need or desire to establish control over matters that are beyond our control.

 

 

Here is what I have selected as our tenth verse:

 

three-martini lunch
with old pals from sigma nu

                             Betty Shropshire

 

 

Here is what we have, so far:

 

Way of the Wind

 

green barley—
we follow the way
of the wind

                        Lorin Ford

 

kids playing pooh sticks
with plum blossoms

                             Linda Weir

 

the long day opens
with a chime of pots
on the kitchen island

                             Laurie Greer

 

a coin in the cap
of a street busker

                             Andrew Shimield

 

summer moon
low on the hips
of the horizon

                             princess k

 

mosquitoes know that my wife
has sweeter blood

                             Dan Campbell

 

still drawn to him
after all the bumps
along the line

                             Wendy C. Bialek

 

queuing up to enter
the Escher exhibit

                             Carol Judkins

 

do you think
they discovered chaos theory
by chance

                             Keith Evetts

 

three-martini lunch
with old pals from sigma nu

                             Betty Shropshire

 

 

We will now be moving on to a pair of winter verses. No images that have their own places in a renku should be used here – no moon, no love, no blossoms.  

 

The requirements for verse eleven will be as follows:

 

  • A three-line verse of seventeen syllables or less
  • With a winter image (kigo) from the list we are using
  • Without a grammatical break
  • Linking in some way to verse ten (and in no obvious way to previous verses)

 

For this renku, we will be using this site (http://www.2hweb.net/haikai/renku/500ESWd.html) as the source for our season words and images.

 

I will be reviewing your offers until midnight on Monday, July 12 (New York time). On Thursday, July 15 there will be a new post in which I will announce my selection of the eleventh verse, comment on some of the other offers, and issue instructions for writing verse twelve.

Keep up the good work!

John

 

 

 

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This Post Has 100 Comments

  1. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu
    ——Betty Shropshire

    bronze generals
    topple into
    the withered reeds

    as the sun sets
    cold sparrows chatter
    in the frozen ivy

  2. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu
    -Betty Shropshire

    buckshots
    ad nauseam
    at whatever moves

  3. the short day
    her long novel cosy
    in her tab

    ***
    first snow
    mellowing still on grass
    winter night
    ***

    newness with bell
    full warmth ringing
    close of the year
    ***
    around fireplace
    music in high pitch
    winter’s spell

    ***

    cold crow
    she is strong beneath rug
    cozy
    **
    mandarin ducks
    special rhythm
    in my ears

  4. Congratulations, Betty, and thank you, John for your continued guidance.

    rising words
    finding new shape
    in first falling snow

    Michelle Beyers
    Copyright © 7/12/21

  5. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    the morning after
    my throat’s sore
    as a cold crow’s caw
    *
    consommé of grebe
    the acme of
    nouvelle cuisine
    *
    taller stories
    told by the imp in me
    on stilts
    *
    their memories
    holding water
    in a wicker fishnet

  6. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    distant lightning
    the background radiation
    of approaching rain

  7. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    drifting sea fret
    getting lost in the grey
    of her past

  8. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    struck match the tang of infatuation

    1. or…

      three-martini lunch
      with old pals from sigma nu

      Betty Shropshire

      struck match
      the tang
      of infatuation

  9. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    so hard to find
    a 4 lb. diakon
    dropped in this snow

    7/09/2021 by wendy © bialek

    1. must change this one:
      so hard to find
      a 4 lb. diakon
      dropped in this snow

      7/09/2021 by wendy © bialek

      “find” is too close to “discovered” in keith’s verse

      to:

      how quickly
      a 4 lb. diakon disappears
      in this snow

      7/09/2021 by wendy © bialek

      1. or:

        a 4 lb. diakon
        disappears quickly
        in this snow

        7/09/2021 by wendy © bialek

        or:

        a 4 lb. diakon
        quickly disappears
        in this snow

        7/09/2021 by wendy © bialek

          1. lol!!! how quickly you eyed this one, john h. !!!!
            thank you for ‘pointing’ this out to me!
            ‘quickly’ is not only, not needed…..but, muddies the waters!

            btw:
            who wrote:

            when pointing with a daikon
            don’t wear shiny bangles
            ’round your arm?

            i know who wrote:
            大根引大根で道を教へけり
            daiko hiki daiko de michi o oshie-keri

            with a just-yanked
            radish
            pointing the way

            Kobayashi Issa (1763-1827)
            translated by David Lanoue

        1. corection and edited, (with help from john hawkhead)

          a 4 lb. daikon
          disappears
          in this snow

          7/09/2021 by wendy © bialek

  10. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    a little diakon
    woke up this greek salad
    and detoxified livers

    7/09/2021 by wendy © bialek

    1. if “livers” is too close to “hips”, then:

      a little diakon
      woke up
      this greek salad

      7/09/2021 by wendy © bialek

  11. congrats betty on your ingenious verse, and once again, thoughtful commentary from john!

    three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    snow falls
    gently on the relevant
    monuments

    7/09/2021 by wendy © bialek

  12. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu
    .
    Betty Shropshire
    .
    first meeting
    at the new place to hold
    a quilting party

  13. Congratulations on your verse, Betty!

    Verse 1:

    the hags
    casting spells
    around the brazier

    Verse 2:

    she was hunting
    the blind mice
    with a carving knife

    Verse 3:

    by having a party in lockdown
    they were skating
    on thin ice

  14. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire
    .
    bedbugs
    practicing
    secret handshakes

    or

    under my pillow
    bedbugs practice
    secret handshakes
    .

  15. grandpa was up
    at dawn to light
    the fireplace
    *
    foreclosure
    sign burning
    in the fireplace
    *
    sipping coffee
    by the bakery’s
    fake fireplace
    *
    tossing the
    suicide note
    into the fireplace

  16. their last gauntlet
    idea involves
    icicle paddles
    .
    penalty shoot-out
    rules decide
    winter games winners
    .
    glühwein
    helps recall
    skiing downhill

  17. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu
    ——-Betty Shropshire

    swirling smoke
    writes a mystery alphabet
    above the bonfire

    we could talk
    if only those winter clouds
    would hold still

    ice on the rocks
    glistens below the lighthouse
    as we set off

  18. Thanks for the attention shown to my verse John , congratulations on your choice
    ***
    of course
    it would be great
    a long Indian summer
    ***
    so fragile
    the winter voices
    like crystals
    ***
    also around
    to a small brazier
    you can laugh

  19. Nice verse Betty!
    .
    three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu
    – Betty Shropshire

    at the pier
    the pleasant chatter
    of the dabbling ducks
    .
    at the pier
    the pleasant chatter
    of waterfowl
    .

    (waterfowl and wild ducks listed a winter kigo, do we need to use the exact phrase/word? Dabbling ducks are a kind of wild ducks/waterfowl).

    1. We can use close variations of the kigo, though I am less likely to select them in this context. We have only two winter verses in this renku and I will want them to very clearly register as such.

  20. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    next schedule
    we will meet again
    with our family

    Nani Mariani

  21. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    the winter grove
    where we found each other
    now paved paradise

  22. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    sliding on slick ice
    into a whole new
    raison d’être

  23. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    —-
    the old at table
    freeze in the sound
    of sneezing

    hunting
    for the lost tribe
    of Lexington

    federal agents
    freeze mafia accounts
    for illicit booze

    missing friends
    in winter rain
    not part of the equation

    none present knew
    that hermit smartweed
    is senryoo

  24. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    bêche-de-mer
    wrinkled or not
    are a luxury

  25. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    a small brazier
    at life drawing class
    chases the blues

  26. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    a shaky brush
    with characters
    under the influence

    1. Please scratch this one, John. I fear it’s closer to New Year/ first days of spring. Marietta

  27. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    onion soup
    leaving us only
    half-full

  28. ici
    cl
    e
    *
    icicle
    tears hanging
    from my eyes
    *
    icicles dangling
    from the immigration
    office window
    *
    icicles
    make better daggers
    than swords
    *
    melting
    icicles make
    snowmen weep

  29. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    after that ..
    we take pictures
    style like a soccer player

    Nani Mariani

  30. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu
    .
    Betty Shropshire
    .
    meeting a friend
    of a friend of a friend
    beneath the quilts

  31. their footprints
    a bit zigzag
    in the snow

    John, snow is late winter, and this verse is one of two winter verses. Does this mean the next must be all winter or late winter, and does the use of snow limit the game playing?

    1. Yes, exactly. The use of a late winter kigo now would mean that that next verse must be either late winter or “all winter.” We have only one more winter verse (the next one) in this renku, so the use of snow as a kigo now will not have far-reaching consequences.

  32. Congrats Betty, and thank you John, for your insightful ongoing guidance _()_
    .
    plans to crash
    a party by the cold lake
    thwarted
    .
    somewhat peeved
    only porridge
    is served
    .
    not so easy
    to purchase stilts
    at such late notice
    .
    you say
    potato and I say
    potato
    .
    nodding off
    on the 18th
    woolly sheep
    .
    a frozen piece
    of evidence
    at the eighteenth hole
    .

  33. Congratulations Betty

    three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    stepping back
    in time to when
    snowballs were fun

  34. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu
    *
    defeating management
    with bargaining clout
    and freezing conditions
    *

  35. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu
    *
    thanked
    for his service after
    shoveling snow
    *

  36. Congratulations! Great work!

    northwind blows
    our fake toupets
    sideways
    *
    untold
    dreams rising
    from a charcoal bed
    *
    first snow
    how we gently slide
    to Sandpiper Hotel
    *
    memories
    kindling
    by the fireplace
    *
    secrets
    slowly distilled
    sharp as icicle
    *
    snowflakes
    our heads sporting
    the passing of years

  37. three-martini lunch
    with old pals of sigma by
    .
    winter pledge class
    memorizes
    greek alphabet
    .
    coeds digging through
    snow-covered paths
    to classes
    .
    fratenity brothers
    add icicles to
    the hairy buffalo

  38. for fun:

    three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu
    – Betty Shropshire

    wild ducks among
    other colorful fowl now
    stuffed and mounted

  39. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire


    on Greece’s shore
    a huddled mass around
    a small brazier

    feeding
    a few vanities
    around the bonfire

  40. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    togetherness..
    is the most expensive time for us
    cheers “

    Nani Mariani

  41. Congrats Betty and thank you John for another fun and creative week
    *
    vegan snowman
    with a carrot nose
    and turnip eyes
    *
    family
    sharing a sliced turnip
    in their soup
    *
    poets have to
    use stirrups in
    couplets about turnips
    *
    roast turnips
    and then add garlic
    and thyme
    *
    retirees
    eat turnips
    on Thursdays
    *
    hail in Juneau
    is the size and color
    of turnips

  42. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma my

    Betty Shropshire

    a few to many
    snowflakes on the window
    sophomore pranks

  43. a hot barley
    in the pungent air
    on the waterfront
    —–
    how many tears
    preparing the stew
    with onions
    ———–
    the smell
    of the morning air
    so cold …
    the smell
    of the morning air
    so cold …

  44. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire
    *
    a bonfire regenerates
    that militant
    zeal
    *

  45. Wonderful job, Betty! And thanks John, for mentioning one of mine.

    trying to create
    snowflake ornaments
    all different

    ******

    cold sparrows huddle
    around the frozen birdbath’s
    blurred reflection

  46. first snow
    fills the bottle she left
    on the bridge
    *
    checking in
    to the cheap motel
    with free bed bugs
    *
    among withered reeds
    we bury
    an old enemy
    *
    skipping coffee
    for no-strings fun
    by the fireplace

  47. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    growling at the waitress
    who blew on our porridge
    till it was just right

    when reminded
    his nickname was turnip
    even he laughs

  48. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire
    *
    the chatter of crows
    across a withered field

  49. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire
    **

    war is over
    we once dreamed of eating pizza
    gun on waist

    Nani Mariani

  50. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    bamboozled
    by a few Greek characters
    in a horse

  51. Thanks John for choosing this verse from so many others! I especially look forward to your commentary and am so happy to have had other verses mentioned as well. And, thanks to everyone else…it’s an honor to be included. 😊 Betty

  52. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu
    Betty Shropshire
    .
    the waiter
    smirks as we order
    the fugu soup
    .

  53. Nice link from the Physics class somewhere in the 20th century to the booze-up get-together with fellow ex-students in the 21st. 🙂 Congratulations, and well done Betty.

  54. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    wolves
    in relentless pursuit
    across the frozen tundra

  55. three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    news of 007’s arrest
    leaves HQ shaken
    but not stirred

  56. Thanks to John Stevenson for mentioning my verse. Kudos to Betty Shropshire and everyone who plays with us.

  57. Fun one, Betty ☺ .. and thanks for pausing on mine, John .. so here goes for winter partying!!

    three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu .. Betty Shropshire
    **
    our wink-eyed
    ice sculpture
    too risqué for the dean

  58. What a terrific set of contributions. I loved Chris Patchel’s
    “an umbrella to ensure
    it doesn’t rain ”

    Well done, Betty!
    —–

    three-martini lunch
    with old pals from sigma nu

    Betty Shropshire

    for the hell of it
    fugu hazing rituals
    leave a few zombies

    even the nandin
    shivers when I tell its berries
    of the past year

    [[ notes, just in case – Japanese folklore about the all-winter kigo ‘nandin berries:’ many keep the delightful small shrub, nandina domestica, the “heavenly bamboo”, close to their door, for it is believed that you may rid yourself of a nightmare by telling it to the nandina. We have three….
    And the fugu or blowfish has to be specially prepared as sashimi/sushi, for it contains tetrodotoxin. This toxin from the blowfish was advanced as a candidate for zombification in Haiti by the ethnobotanist Wade Davis in “The Serpent and The Rainbow”]]

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