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The Renku Sessions: Title To Be Determined

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Hello Everyone—I was so happy to see so many friends, old and new, ready to participate in creating this twenty-verse poem. Thank you so much for welcoming me so kindly; it’s most gracious of you. Of the 150 verses submitted for the hokku, I have chosen sixteen verses for final consideration and those highlighted in bold were my short list.

 

a prodigal son
searching for home
in the moonlight

Dan Campbell

 

bringing to light
our unique quirks
hazy May moon

Clysta Seney

 

the original influencer
with a flair for gray –
this hazy moon!

princess k

 

spring moon
a raft of sea otters
afloat on its back

and so
we begin again
spring moon

Keith Evetts

 

looking up
only the moonlight
to guide my way

Pauline O’Carolan

 

desert dusk moon
heaven sent front row tickets
to aurora display

bright moon
forgotten nectar feeders
light up like lanterns

the moon joins
a juggler’s side show
harvest festival

Wendy C. Bialek

 

hazy moon
a gentle breeze
lifts the curtain

Betty Shropshire

 

crescent moon
humming a lullaby
from his grandfather’s primer

hazy moon
the seer pauses
over a card

moonbeams…
the busy spinnerets
of an orb weaver

Laurie Greer

 

Pentecost
the same moon
world over

Richard Straw

 

moonlight
on the footpath
–silver ferns

Nancy Brady

 

misty moon
toasted with green tea served
in plastic cups

Attard Francis

 

 

 

The opening verse for the renku is:

 

the moon joins
a juggler’s side show
harvest festival

Wendy C. Bialek

 

which means, with a nod to the southern hemisphere, we will be writing an autumn nijuin renku.

 

All of the above verses caught my eye or heart. They had a feeling of joy or calm or appreciation that I think a hokku should have. Wendy’s verse, in particular, stood out to me as an impactful visual image. And beyond it being visually strong, it had just a touch of sauciness while alluding to the team that we are assembling here to work together and the harmony we need for a successful outcome. I hope it can be our beacon for the journey ahead.

 

Your assignment for next week is to write:

  • a two-line autumn verse; the two lines should flow syntactically;
  • link to the hokku in some fashion;
  • if the opening hokku is like the joyful greeting of the arriving guests, this verse should have the feeling of a gracious host pleased that we have come ;
  • avoid any proper nouns, any mention of religion, war, politics, death, or any wild or bizarre subjects (this section of the renku is like the opening of a party—mostly small talk for now);
  • for the rest of the renku, please avoid any subjects related to festivals or circuses, carnival acts, etc.;
  • submit your verses by midnight PDT Tuesday, May 28.

 

I also invite you to weigh in on selecting a title for our renku. Let’s choose from a title from the hokku. It will be our working title. We may change it in the end but for now a working title would be handy to have. Give me you thoughts on The Juggler, Side Show, or Harvest Festival. Or ?

One more thing—sometimes to make all the verse work in harmony I might suggest a change to one of your verses. If you really don’t want your verses monkied with, please let me know. You can email me privately if you wish at patriciajmachmiller@msn.com.

Since we only have twenty verses, it will be my practice to choose only one verse from a particular writer. So, Wendy, congratulations on having your verse chosen for the hokku. This means I will not choose another verse of yours although you are welcome to continue to contribute verses and be part of the ongoing dialogue.

 

I am looking forward to seeing your offerings for verse 2.

Patricia

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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This Post Has 226 Comments

  1. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival

    Wendy C. Bialek

    very happy
    one of the circus performers was a childhood friend

    Nani Mariani

  2. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival

    Wendy C. Bialek

    happiest moment
    all show up

    Nani Mariani

  3. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival

    Great verse, Wendy!

    one by one
    adding logs to the fire

    a silhouetted scarecrow
    does a jig at midnight

    passing around glasses
    of local cider

    the amber glow
    of homemade cider

    on the count of three
    everyone toasts our host

    at the stroke of midnight
    a pumpkin smiles back

    1. hi marion! glad to see you back again, thanks for kind words for our hokku and the wonderfully joyful verses.

  4. Dear Patricia,
    What a fun party you and everyone are creating.
    And what a great hokku; congrats, Wendy.
    Here is my offering:

    one long and low whistle
    passing through the town

    Looking forward to 20 weeks of sharing and learning.
    Mimi

    1. thanks Mimi for all your words of appreciation, thanks for coming aboard this fun journey with us all.

  5. floating tealights
    mirror the path of orange leaves

    – or –

    floating tealights
    continue the path of orange leaves

    – or –

    fallen leaves
    create embers on the pond

    – or –

    the forest floor becomes a giant mural
    under a canopy of changing leaves

    – or –

    the forest floor…
    a giant mural of changing leaves

    Diana Ming Jeong

    1. wow! Diana

      the forest floor…
      a giant mural of changing leaves

      Diana Ming Jeong

    2. Thank you Wendy!

      Another edit:

      the forest floor…
      a giant mural of changing colors

      Diana Ming Jeong

  6. What a beautiful and playful opening verse/ hokku! This is fun 🙂 Thanks for the invitation, Patricia, I always love your commentary xxoo

    My wakiku offerings:

    drowsing next to the wood stove
    I listen for your step

    ****

    quart jars of canned fruit
    we arrange by color

    ***

    my bare skin…
    this new coolness

    1. hi Stephanie,
      thanks for adding to the fun and your generous words about the opening verse.

  7. For the title, some suggestions:
    Juggling Joy
    Joyous Moon
    Harvest Joy
    Harvest Moon

  8. OK, here are a few from me…

    discussing the weather
    over sloe gin cocktails

    rippling stars
    in our ginger apple cocktails

    apple bobbing
    damp hair and smiles

    smiles and small talk
    sipping sloe gin cocktails

    Clearly I have booze on the brain! ?

    1. hi surya,
      happy to hear your poetry and have your involvement in this renku group.

  9. Congratulations Wendy!

    the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    ——— Wendy C. Bialek
    .

    shadows of migrating birds
    dust the moon
    .

    red leaves and blue sky
    dance in the wind
    .

    kittens sip from a saucer
    of moonlight
    .

    a swirl of moths
    orbits the yellow lamplight

    1. hi Jonathan
      thank you and glad to see you back posting!
      such lovely autumn verses!

    2. this is my fav of yours:

      a swirl of moths
      orbits the yellow lamplight

      ——-Jonathan Alderfer

  10. *
    the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    *
    Wendy C. Bialek
    *
    twenty-odd ducks flying south
    home in on their pond

  11. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    *
    Wendy C. Bialek
    *
    more shaggy dogs and stories
    as the long nights get colder
    *

  12. .
    the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    .
    Wendy C. Bialek
    .
    .
    cricket and i
    sing for our supper
    .

  13. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    — Wendy C. Bialek

    snapshot first shrike’
    & a matched hunch

  14. late with the grain bucket
    whinnies from the warm barn

    the hot roasted corn on the cob
    she slips into my cold hands

    the mug of hot apple cider
    she slips into my cold hands

    a snake parting bright leaves
    finds its family in their crevice

    as we sing around the campfire
    sparks mingle with stars

    1. Wow! Rob….
      a cornucopia of sound, visions, flavours and warmth mixed with magic and nature.

    1. plenty of parking reserved
      for the broomsticks

      🙂 🙂 🙂

      This one has me laughing, truly! Love it! 🙂 Perhaps not for the wakiku, though. But definitely, as a verse, a keeper.

  15. morning mist
    she balances to tie her school shoes

    -or-

    morning mist
    she balances to tie her shoes

    Diana Ming Jeong

  16. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    — Wendy C. Bialek

    cornstalks in wind
    or wind in cornstalks?

  17. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    *
    Wendy C. Bialek
    *
    pointed this way and that
    through the rustling corn maze
    *

  18. Thank you, Patricia, for the elaborate guidance. Congratulations, Wendy, on a beautiful and vivid verse for the hokku!

    the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    — Wendy C. Bialek

    For the title, I was wondering about Festival Sideshow or Festival Show.

    My offers for the wakiku:

    guardians of haystack
    all around the bullock

    rice sparrows on the porch
    twittering their song

    dragonflies resting
    on reeds between the rocks

    an old couple’s sweet-nothings fill
    the tree with persimmons

    the missing apples mixed
    into an already full fruit bowl

    1. Thanks Amoolya for your kinds words of support
      found in your wonderful wakiku offerings and
      hokku compliments!

      1. Patricia, consider sports games such as football where two sides compete for the win. People take sides, barrack for the team they hope will win. So we get the ‘magpie siders’ and the ‘hawks siders’.

        Then, there are ‘insiders’ and ‘outsiders’.

        So I take Carol’s L1 as meaning people from all sides applaud the scarecrow. (But am not sure. They say things differently in Wales. 🙂 )

        (‘siders’ might also mean a side dish (not the main dish) in a cafe, but that doesn’t apply here.)

      2. Hi Patricia

        Lorin is on the right road. Yes, we say things a bit different here in Wales, bang on there, Lorin :):)
        When I used the word ‘sider, I was thinking more about people of the north and south east and west eg north-siders south-siders, all gathering together for Wendy’s delightful festival verse.

        Sider – someone placed or living in a specified side or section of their country, urban or rural.

        Hope this helps, Patricia.
        Thanks for asking. Have a good day.

    1. i like the meaningful messages and good feelings of unity and appreciation this seemingly innocent verse speaks. it gets my vote for verse two!
      thank you Carol for giving worthy support to hokku.
      i see a wonderful link with the juggler’s rising hands and the rising high-fiving hands…resonating with the movement of a moon.

      clearly i hear
      a microphone drop!

      1. Thankyou, Wendy, for your thoughts on this offering. Yours is a great opening verse, and there’s a plethora of wonderful verses for Patricia to ponder over. We live in hope, but most importantly, enjoy the party.

        1. thank you, again for your kind words. and yes, Carol…..thank you for the reminder….about enjoying the party!
          that Patricia has many gifts to enjoy and consider from the many gifted poets here…is an understatement.

  19. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    — Wendy C. Bialek

    all are welcome
    in the pumpkin patch

    chewing on hay
    in the pumpkin patch

    meeting up
    in the pumpkin patch

    framing pictures
    In the pumpkin patch

  20. Congratulations, Wendy on this lovely hokku. You’ve captured the essence of the sublime and the playful.

    Suggesting the title: “Cornucopia Days”
    ~
    the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    ~
    she catches the finale
    of falling apples
    ~
    dappled night shadows
    as if cast by the sun
    ~
    sleeping toddlers
    in the arms of drowsy dads
    ~
    one more hayride
    under the ebbing light
    ~
    just right aged dew
    to harden the cider
    ~
    sitting on a pumpkin
    eatin’ punkin pie
    ~
    laughter peels from
    the apple bobbing barrels

    1. thanks so much, Jackie, i’m glad to have provided you a place for that amazing poetic array of verses for the wakiku ! So many eye candies for Patricia!

      here’s one for you:

      scarecrow’s pocket fill with popcorn
      from daddy’s shoulders

      1. correction:

        scarecrow’s pockets fill with popcorn
        from daddy’s shoulder

    2. Jackie my favs:

      laughter peels from
      the apple bobbing barrels

      J M Robinson

      sleeping toddlers
      in the arms of drowsy dads

      J M Robinson

  21. a raccoon in the trip-cam
    shaking his fist
    *
    a raccoon in the trip-cam
    caught red handed
    *
    the trip-cam catches
    a raccoon red handed
    *

  22. outstretched hands
    offer a bowl of new rice

    yellow and white chrysanthemums
    on the dining table

    silver sardines
    caught by a purse seine

    1. yellow and white chrysanthemums
      on the dining table

      Perhaps keep it for the ‘flower verse’ position, Pauline?

      1. Hi Lorin Unfortunately that can’t be done as these are autumn flowers and the flower verse will be spring blossom! Best, Pauline

    1. should this be deemed too close to the hokku for Patricia, or too bawdy for the second renku verse…
      (Nancy has Otto)
      i work with editcrow and we have chiseled it down to:

      scarecrow pointing
      this hay and that hay

      1. What? !!! Wendy & Nancy, are you (both or either of you) using AI editors or the like?
        If so, is this approved of by either Patricia, Jim Kacian or any of the various people and committees of The Haiku Foundation ?
        (I suppose the issue had to come and I’m probably naive to think it hadn’t come already.)

        1. Lorin,
          LOL!
          Nancy playfully has named her spellchecker, ‘Otto’
          and and i made up a fictitious character, i call ‘editcrow’
          after Dan wrote about ‘welcomecrow’.

          i hope i have eased your AI concerns here and you can rest
          calmly.

          1. Thanks, Wendy, for having my back. .I am not a robot, nor some sort of AI., Lorin.

            In the last renku session, I had my problems with autocorrect, which I have now named Otto Correct, Otto for short, but I digress. Some were funny, but most were embarrassing, yet I owned them by making fun of them and myself. Now I just blame Otto and fix them as in the “fry” being changed to “try” as I did earlier.

        2. Lorin,
          Never would I ever consider using an AI editor. I recently attended a zoom meeting in which a poet was discussing the use of AI when writing a haiku by putting in a few words (season, noun, another noun). From the generated haiku, the poet wrote a similar one, but a much better haiku. Frankly, I was appalled by the idea, and still am.

  23. senile squirrel
    trying to remember where he buried the nuts

    falling leaves
    such a melancholy melody

    1. falling leaves
      such a melancholy melody

      That’d be ‘Autumn Leaves’ (the song, from way back, sung by Nat King Cole) wouldn’t it, Dan? I recall it from my childhood.

  24. the noises off
    of a clatter of windfalls
    *
    a path of dropped
    dapples leads from the woods
    *
    a windfall of dropped dapples
    leads us from the woods

    1. exquisite laurie

      a path of dropped
      dapples leads from the woods

      Laurie Greer

  25. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    — Wendy C. Bialek

    the gentle bow
    sunflowers in dappled sun

  26. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival

    Wendy C. Bialek

    stepping into the silence
    of a windless dawn

  27. crows walking in wilted cornfields
    like wind-up toys

    scarecrows look happier
    when they’re wearing a cape

    scarecrows like snowmen
    never had a boyhood

    sneaky scarecrow sipping
    milk from the cat’s saucer

    1. Lorin,
      beautiful placement for your southern lights….imo this is a keeper!

      1. Thanks, Wendy. Probably “curtain” is overdoing it, though?

        as a backdrop
        the southern lights

    2. or simply (so probably better)? :

      the moon joins
      a juggler’s side show
      harvest festival — Wendy C. Bialek

      the southern lights
      as a backdrop

      or

      aurora australis
      as a backdrop

  28. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    Wendy C. Bialek

    apple cider and donut holes
    on the refreshment table

    apple cider and donut holes
    served as refreshments

    1. Hmmm, Nancy, donuts have holes, but as soon as one eats the donut there is no longer a hole. You can serve donuts but how could you possibly serve “donut holes”?
      (I’m very curious!)

      1. They actually make donut holes, which are just a bite, Lorin. I am sure I am not the only one who has bought (and eaten) donut holes. Maybe it’s a thing in America only.

        1. I think donut shops make the regular donuts, which leaves a hole. They then try up the extra dough created by that hole,and thus the donut hole. No waste of the dough and people buy just the holes which are bite sized.

        2. OK, I think I understand: donuts have a hole in the centre, when fried & served. Before they’re cooked, though, they’re a round blob of dough without a hole. The cook then takes the necessary utensil, makes a hole in the centre of the donut’s dough and puts the donut into the fryer.
          This leaves a little round bit of dough.
          Two things can be done with these little dough balls: 1.) Roll them all together and make more donuts or leave them as small balls, throw them into the fryer and when cooked, call them “donut holes”.

          That’s my best guess: the dough that’s taken out of the middle leaves a hole (and of course we can’t eat a hole) but these little balls of dough, when fried, come to be called ‘donut holes’. The thing (little dough ball extracted from the centre) takes the name of what it leaves behind: the hole.
          Thanks, Nancy. 🙂

          1. …and for you, Nancy, with thanks :

            the moon joins
            a juggler’s side show
            harvest festival – Wendy C. Bialek
            .
            a little boy watches
            through his donut’s hole

    2. Nan,
      very welcoming
      lol! very gobbled gone!

      apple cider and donut holes
      on the refreshment table

      Nancy Brady

  29. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival – Wendy C. Bialek
    .
    a whiff of corn whiskey
    warms the busker up
    .
    or maybe:

    a whiff of corn whiskey
    warms us up
    .

    1. the moon joins
      a juggler’s side show
      harvest festival – Wendy C. Bialek

      . . . and/or
      (3)
      behind stacked hay bales
      a whiff of corn whiskey

      1. … or, more straightforward, more to the point, brings “us” in to link to the hokku and acknowledge the host ( in this case, that would be the festival organizers? ):

        the moon joins
        a juggler’s side show
        harvest festival – Wendy C. Bialek

        a shot of corn whiskey
        warms us up

  30. “Give me you thoughts on The Juggler, Side Show, or Harvest Festival. Or ?” – Patricia

    Of these three suggestions above, my preference is for ‘Harvest Festival’ And certainly not for ‘Juggler’s Moon’ or ‘the Juggler’s balls’ . 🙂 (see conversations on the thread).

    1. I’m not too sure on this, Lorin — can renku titles be chosen from another verse within the session, later on or even at the end?

      1. Carol, as far as I’ve experienced and/ or read, a renku’s title comes from some words in the hokku or the wakiku. Which words are chosen by the sabaki. Basho did it, John Carley did it , John Stevenson does it and every sabaki of every renku kept in THF Renku archives has done it, including Patricia.

        https://thehaikufoundation.org/the-haiku-foundation-renku-archive/

        So it’s certainly the tradition that the sabaki chooses the renku’s title from the hokku or wakiku.

      2. . . . and ps: why I’m not keen on ‘Juggler’s Moon’ or ‘the Juggler’s balls’ is that they both can be read as bawdy, and bawdy, I believe, is best saved for the ‘love’ verses, 🙂

        1. Thankyou, for your reply to my question, always good to know.
          And, I agree with the titles you have mentioned, more so the second one. I would lower the tone to a vibrant and energetic start to the session.

    2. Perhaps I missed it Lorin, but I’ve yet to see a title suggestion for “The Juggler’s Balls” from anyone but yourself.

  31. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    — Wendy C. Bialek

    autumn glories
    falling through the paper bag

    Or

    a riot of autumn glories
    breaking loose

    Or

    gathering the fallen
    autumn glories

  32. more leaves jump
    than fall

    remember running
    thru piles of leaves

    moon napping
    on barren limbs

  33. Congratulations Wendy!!!

    This is a lovely hokku that Patricia chose from many wonderful hokku submitted! 

    A suggestion for the title from the hokku…

    Juggler’s Moon

    the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival

    Wendy C. Bialek

    morning mist
    balancing to tie my new shoes

    Diana Ming Jeong

    1. thank you, Diana

      so i see…you like Juggler’s Moon, too
      I have much to say about this one as a title.

      but for now…
      i will compliment your morning mist.

        1. when i first read the suggestion of Juggler’s Moon i thought that’s a very nice title, it’s smooth, concise, intriguing, and has a nice ring to it.
          then…. the reread came…..and with it carried questions and concerns for me. the way we apply a title to any work of art…would be based on one’s interpretation of that art. If the reader believes this hokku is about a juggler….then this title for renku could apply.
          however, respectfully i won’t support it and this is why:
          i feel the focus is more about the serendipity about a moon and how our expectations on placement and spacial positioning can be juggled to provide enhanced enlightenment! A freed moon. There for everyone. Not ever ‘possessed’ by the juggler. in fact…the juggler may not even be aware that a moon is in his/hers shuffle act.

          my second concern is based on the notion that a title of any work of art
          be treated as and “eyebrow for the eye”…it gently stirs you in but never reveals the surprise of the eye qualities, ie: colours, age and abilities.

          the use of a title like this, for the renku, imho, diminishes the reader’s experience of finding the serendipity of the hokku as it reveals within its very words…the plot as well as its ending….a certain spoiler alert flag
          label should accompany it.

          there is no revealing of plots/players in these other suggestions of Side Show or Harvest Sideshow they are eyebrows for the eye, enhancing and not limiting the possible interps. of hokku. and they are safe examples that would get my support.

          1. Um. . . Wendy & Diana : I’d be leaving the choice of a title to the sabaki. In this case, to Patricia.

            Considering that, in a juggler’s act, it’s usually balls that are being juggled (and in this case the moon is ball-shaped, too) perhaps both “juggler’s moon” and “juggler’s balls” would be more suitable for verses in the more bawdy “love” verses section than for the renku’s title?

          2. Such an interesting, insightful analysis of the title choices. You make a lot of sense to me, Wendy. I like ‘Side Show’.

          3. Really a fine example of critical thinking,Wendy. Makes me think I’ve been laboring under a misapprehension about titling renku. Been cowriting renku for some time now and have never come across the concept of “eyebrow for the eye”. It intrigues and delights me! That said, without making it a hard and fast rule, my partners and I have always chosen to leave the title to last because we can never foresee all the upcoming moments as the poem links its way to a close. One more thing, Is there a convention that the title shouldn’t contain direct quotes from the hokku as a title. Not sure where I got that idea, so it’s probably not a real ‘thing’. Your observation of the serendipitous nature of the poems is especially appealing and feels so right vis the title.

          4. corrections and add ons:

            be treated as an “eyebrow for the eye”…it gently stirs you in but never reveals the surprise of the eye qualities, ag: colours, age and abilities.

            What if Edgar Allan Poe’s short story, ‘The Tell-Tale Heart’ was named,
            “Under the Floor Boards”?

            How fun would that be?

            Rob’s humorous response is paraphrased:

            a dead giveaway, wendy point taken!

    2. this one, Diana…..pref. w/o the ‘new’
      a good hokku reply
      i like that it is scent based and has the implied elements of synesthesia!

      1. morning mist
        balancing to tie my new school shoes

        Diana Ming Jeong

        it has two autumn kigo

        but the synesthesia becomes more diluted with the shoe elements.

        1. Wendy,

          Thank you! ?

          morning mist
          balancing to tie my school shoes

          Diana Ming Jeong

          For the title … how about “The Hanging Moon”

          ?

          1. Wendy C. Bialek
            May 26, 2024 at 11:34 am
            and the one at 10:11 pm

            Thank you, Wendy. Thank you – Diana

  34. Congrats Wendy and gracias Patricia!

    the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    — Wendy C. Bialek

    applauding that scarecrow
    in the moonlight, dancing in the wind

    only scarecrows see
    each and every sunrise and sunset

    welcomecrow would be a
    better name for the scarecrow

    solitude is a scarecrow’s
    only season

    1. thanks, Dan!

      i agree with your welcomecrow!

      just for fun: may i introduce you to….

      editcrow a little snippy
      with his scissorhands

      1. Wendy,
        Love the editcrow especially with the snippy scissorhands. I bet Otto and editcrow could become besties.
        Nan

        Now to write another verse to link to the hokku:

        soft jazz playing throughout
        the rotunda

        1. hi nan,
          sure, we can all meet for a virtual picnic lunch
          you pick the park,
          editcrow plays hopscotch on the checkered tablecloth
          while Otto …..

          nan, you fill in the rest

          1. while Otto picks the first purple Crocuses, which Otto likes to change to circuses.

  35. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    *
    Wendy C. Bialek

    ¤

    posing as a scarecrow
    for the still life with pumpkins

  36. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    *
    Wendy C. Bialek
    *
    working behind the scenes
    spicing the wine

  37. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    — Wendy C. Bialek

    between frost and fog
    atoms

  38. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    *
    Wendy C. Bialek
    *
    a crow dives into
    the middle of the leaf pile
    *
    shaking the hand off
    the friendliest scarecrow
    *

    1. shaking the hand off
      the friendliest scarecrow

      Laurie Greer

      i’m belly laughing out loud!

  39. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival

    Wendy C. Bialek

    rotating scarecrows
    so we all get some shine

  40. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    *
    Wendy C. Bialek
    *
    diving into the middle
    of the leaf pile
    *

  41. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival

    Wendy C. Bialek

    tossed honey crisp cores
    gone by the morn

  42. a startled woodpecker
    misses his beat

    dropping chestnuts
    in her brazier

    a pumpkin
    takes a tumble off my porch

  43. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    *
    Wendy C. Bialek
    *
    the trestle table groans
    with apples and gourds
    *
    chilly winds and warm hugs
    drop in at the open house
    *

  44. A great image for the hokku Wendy

    the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival

    Wendy C. Bialek

    tossing and turning
    between strips of light

  45. nice one Wendy

    the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    — Wendy C. Bialek

    a tattered bashō
    sways in the wind

    1. (me…skipping around)
      thanks so much, Andrew….coming from you, a hokku and haiku master, that means a lot!

      love the bend of your ‘bashō’

      looking forward to more of your jewels!

  46. sipping hot cider
    from red plastic cups

    a two hour wait for
    a one-hour hayride

    perilous attempts to
    capture a selfie

    1. thank you very much Wendy. Always loved the name Wendy from Peter Pan, you see i inconvertibly
      refuse to grow up

  47. Well done, Wendy A fine and original hokku.

    I suggest “Juggler’s Moon” might be a title….

    1. thank you keith for your commending words on this opening verse!
      btw: i loved your offering

      midnight moon
      a world
      half awake

      ==Keith Evetts

      I am passionately moved by your title offer and am gathering responses about it.
      to come soon!

      1. kieth and anyone else familiar with Poe’s short story, ” The Tell-Tale Heart”….
        what if he named it “Under the Floor Boards”?
        how fun would that be?

          1. ‘a dead giveaway’

            Rob….
            rolling on the floor boards in stitches LOL!!!!!!

  48. A really well-crafted and visual hokku from Wendy. Like my scarecrow below, homage! I was very excited to see my offering considered, thank you, Patricia.

    a stylish scarecrow
    flourishes his fedora

    1. thanks for the hokku praise, Pauline
      glad to see you posting again!

      it’s fun to dress
      scarecrows up

  49. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    — Wendy C. Bialek

    the soft crunch of leaf litter
    in a morning fog

  50. *
    the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    *
    Wendy C. Bialek
    *
    the ground beetles arrive
    so many hands to hold
    *
    Mother Nature
    chooses crimson highlights
    *

    1. Clysta, enjoying

      the ground beetles arrive
      so many hands to hold

      Clysta Seney

  51. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival

    Wendy C. Bialek
    **

    when you arrive
    i have to wait

    Nani Mariani

  52. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival

    Wendy C. Bialek
    **

    with a relaxed pace
    grandchildren make a circle

    Nani Mariani

  53. .
    the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    .
    Wendy C. Bialek
    .
    .
    Great choice for the hokku, Patricia, and congratulations Wendy on this wonderfully visual verse – so easy to imagine!
    .
    I know that it is traditional to take the title from the hokku, and it seems most of the options have been covered, (I don’t have a strong opinion about any of the traditional options). So just being silly with the title suggestions: balls in the air, something on the side, side hustle, the joint.

    1. princess k,
      happy to hear from you and watch you freely interact, post. and learn….with all your wonderful questions.
      thanks for your kind words about this opening poem.

      your title suggestions are refreshingly fun, like your verses…. a writer who thinks out of the box.

  54. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival

    Wendy C. Bialek

    grandson’s first cry
    polishing familiarity

    Nani Mariani

    1. thanks for dropping by, Nani and sharing your leaves.

      here’s one for you:

      hard to spot the deer
      camouflaged by fall foliage

      (deer viewing Upstate NY, for pleasure and hopes of touching photographs)

      1. Thank you, dear Wendy.
        A deer that is making love or a deer that is heartbroken, hidden by thick leaves..

  55. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival

    – Wendy C. Bialek

    *

    just a flash of pink
    as the jay flies

  56. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival

    – Wendy C. Bialek

    *

    the squirrel’s sleight of hand
    as it buries acorns

  57. Excellent verse for the hokku! Congratulations, Wendy!!

    the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    – Wendy C. Bialek

    *
    bright toothsome smiles
    on front porch pumpkins

    1. how great to hear from you, Betty, again, how are you and the “porch pumpkins” braving all those storms?
      thanks again for your very kind words about this hokku
      and the current and future verses you ably share.

      1. Wendy, we’re fine. Mostly. Worst storms tend to go around us, thankfully.
        Now dealing with triple digit heat indexes already…106° predicted heat index today. Fun times! ?

        1. betty…
          i hope writing about autumn…helps to cool things down for you all!

  58. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival (Wendy C. Bialek)
    .
    sweet sticky fairy floss
    by any other name
    .
    (I believe the American term for “fairy floss” is “cotton candy”. 🙂 Couldn’t help myself.)

  59. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival (Wendy C. Bialek)
    .
    a file of judges
    considers the pumpkins
    .

  60. Excuse me….still in shock and disbelief!
    What an honour, Patricia! a first for me….to
    have a verse accepted as hokku, and what
    makes this so special, is that it comes from
    a tender, patient, compassionate, fair and committed sabaki,
    i so look up to and admire like the moon! Thank you, Patricia. for seeing worthiness in this verse…and seeing above and beyond it. It feels so good
    to be totally understood.
    i have enjoyed the effort (shine) and pick (focal beam) to all the long and bold offers… you have listed and credited Thursday! much appreciation for your thoughtful, clear list of the “to dos” and the knots “to avoid” for next week’s wakiku.

    Happy to have this special opportunity to “start off” our new ‘soon to be named’ renku with all the party goers here.

    i trust whatever title is given will be the most fitting.

    and yes, i will still actively, participate, as i love hanging out and learning with you all, reading your offers and hearing your thoughts (as well as,
    sharing my words and thoughts with this brilliant group).

  61. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival

    Wendy C. Bialek

    Congratulations, Wendy! Well done. I can see the scene, with a smile.
    An excellent choice for the hokku, in my view, Patricia.

    Well done all the people with verses in the long and short lists, too. I do like the idea of showing these lists, Patricia. Very educational. I’m hoping you’ll continue to show such lists throughout.

    1. thank you for your cheerful and generous comment on this hokku, Lorin….so glad to see you smiling and back in renku action. Loving the playfulness of your contributions and comments.

      for sure, resubmit yours for the next moon verse, coming before we know it!

      1. ah, but Wendy, your hokku IS the moon verse for this renku. Once a subject has been included, it isn’t used again. No more moon verses. No more balls or jugglers, no more harvests, etc. for this renku.

        (as far as I know, that is. Patricia might be able to expand my understanding on this subject.)

        1. i wouldn’t give up the moon’s return yet, Lorin!
          IF the schema on page 47 in RR is used…
          we have another chance occurrence on
          verse 15 (long) for either an optional winter/summer moon.

  62. Patricia,
    Many thanks for the long collection of the ‘also considered’. It gives encouragement to many, and also indicates the kinds of things you’re looking for . in this case something more than just seasonal description. Also the characteristics for v2 are specific & useful.
    I hope the ‘also rans’ will continue. As for the tile, any of the suggestions will do for a provisional one, this could be re-considered after the 20 verse are completed.

    the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival

    our quiet organiser
    thankful for blue skies

    late pears & russets
    pile the produce tables

    a winemaker
    sells presses yeasts & jars

    1. Dick,
      Thank you for reading and responding so generously to this, hokku!
      Isn’t it also, so compassionate, that we have been luckily, provided a contact
      “number” in which to call out our editing prefs?

  63. Congratulations, Wendy! What a fantastic way to begin our renku, Patricia. I so enjoyed your sharing your long and short lists as well. Super helpful.

    Title: I really like all the possibilities in Side Show.

    the welcome mat
    worn but ready

    putting together
    Mom’s pumpkin pie

    1. Welcome back, Eavonka! I adore your welcoming and unifying spice you
      sprinkle in the air; openly exuberant in your renku verses and comments.
      thank you, again….as we embark on this fabulous journey, together with our
      guiding sabaki angel, Patricia.

  64. Thank you Patricia for your beautiful process and choice! Wendy, I immediately loved this verse of yours and of course, I continue to!

    the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    — Wendy C. Bialek

    between near and shore
    haystacks

    1. thank you so much, Pamela….everything you do and say here
      is always heartfelt and appreciated!

  65. Congrats, Wendy!

    ancient oak now
    our feast day table

    the rich harvest aroma
    paired with that of fallow

    children’s laughter
    staying out late

    1. hi Curt!
      thank you for your participation in renku,
      your words of encouragement to me, and
      the healthy wisdom you bring out and offer to share
      at this poetic table.

  66. *
    the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    *
    Wendy C. Bialek
    *
    the intimate glow
    of a beeswax centerpiece
    *
    a horn of plenty bursts
    over the table’s center
    *

  67. the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival

    Wendy C. Bialek

    excellence beyond imagining wendy!
    this appears so vividly in my mind–
    playful moon joining the juggler’s dancing balls
    hoping to blend in like another bright ball–
    such a happy festive scene of welcome.

    patricia thank you for choosing the best of the best
    to bring out the warm welcome of the juggler,
    the festival and this hokku.

    1. thank you so….oh Rob,
      i can easily feel spoiled by your words of praise!
      So glad you had fun seeing this image!
      Eager to see your responses!

  68. *
    the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    *
    Wendy C. Bialek
    *
    a brisk walk around the block
    to warm the limbs
    *
    a hearty bearhug
    as the long night gets started
    *

  69. *
    the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    *
    Wendy C. Bialek
    *
    a line of leaves and
    umbrellas dry on the porch
    *
    the door prize a box
    of fresh mulling spices
    *
    oak leaves holding on
    until the bittersweet end
    *

    1. thanks for your kind words, Melissa
      and i agree that Side Show is a strong contender.

  70. Congratulations, Wendy. This is such a kewl (no, Otto Correct didn’t pick it; I did) verse. It is saucy, but I expect nothing less from you.

    Suggested title off the top of my head: Side Show

    Patricia, thanks for taking on this commitment and also for considering one of my verses for the hokku especially since there were so many outstanding verses you could have selected.

    Verses will come later.

    1. thanks so much, Nancy!….nice to know Otto is kept in check!

      LOL!

      so eloquent
      slang like that
      i welcome anytime!

      looking forward to all your keen offerings

  71. Wonderful, Wendy! So many possibilities with this beautiful, lively verse!
    Thanks, Patricia, for giving us the long and short of your decision! I love the insight into the process and of course, am thrilled to be part of the list.
    *
    the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival
    *
    Wendy C. Bialek
    *
    a glass of red
    to warm the chilly hands
    *
    uncorking the red in a blaze
    of crisp maple leaves

    1. so happy to hear your enthusiasm, Laurie.
      love watching you methodically going through
      all the possible links to be found! love all your creative and playful
      leaps…your works are pure entertainment mixed with strong dashes of whimsy as well as intelligence!

  72. Congratulations Wendy! I also loved your salute to the desert aurora. Perhaps “Harvest Sideshow” as a possible working title? Looking forward to your guidance on this renku Patricia and honored to be on your short list.

      1. i agree, Patricia…this is a creative combo, from Clysta’s kitchen.

    1. Thanks for your double congrats! double gratitude, Clysta!
      doubling my pleasure…to have you involved here again!

      very much like your offer for the working title!

  73. Congratulations, Wendy, on a fine poem! It’s a wonderful hokku selection, Patricia!

    “Harvest Festival” sounds like a good title, or something similar, such as “Fall Fair.”

    +++

    peanut shells littering
    the Ferris wheel line

    at the ticket taker’s feet
    bouquets of red stubs

    a painted grimace
    on the clown’s face

    bodies crowding
    the bright midway

    roasted corn
    in the breeze

    fun house mirrors
    reflecting smiles

    in the distance
    a calliope’s song

      1. Thanks for weighing in, Richard, on the title.

        I like your verses, as well, but, except for the “roasted corn” verse, they all are too close to the carnival scene. But please keep writing–the more the better.

        1. Thanks for the feedback, Patricia! Here’s one more…

          +++

          the scarecrow’s arms
          pointing up and down

          1. A couple more…

            +++

            water icing over
            in the birdbath

            numbers invisible
            on the frosted sundial

        2. “. . . except for the “roasted corn” verse, they all are too close to the carnival scene. ” – Patricia
          .
          Patricia, a query: should not the wakiku be close to the hokku, supporting it?
          (Then the 3rd verse, the daisan, is the ‘break-away’ verse, and should have no relation to the carnival scene?)

    1. Richard….thank you for your special words about my poem…and all your past, present. and future contributions to our renku

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