Greetings and welcome to The Haiku Foundation’s current Renku Session entitled, ‘Timber Smoke’. I am Marshall Hryciuk of Toronto, Canada and will be leading this session through a 36-link kasen renku.
For verse 3 i’m taking
a file of cars
overtaking a tractor
on the mountain road
I very much enjoyed the reversal from verse to verse that this link performed: going from a singular being (a man) interacting with multiples of another kind of being (plums) to a multiple (of cars) interacting, in a much less pleasurable way with a singular item; the tractor.
No spectacular language but the verse effectively connotes the frustration of the car drivers. Another pleasing aspect is that it takes us from looking down to an immediate thing to looking up the mountain from a broader perspective.
On top of that, we’ve gone from scent to touch to sight as primary senses within three verses.
“Tractor” may be seen as a summer and maybe a spring or autumn indicator, but i have seen farm equipment being moved on a main road in winter, and if it were in winter imagine the increase in irritation for the car drivers at the tractor’s slow movement being so unpredictable. But we don’t have to worry about winter now; we’re moving to autumn for the next two links and having had a farm accessory there can be no harvesting nor fruits in these 2 links.
“(M)ountain” also means that for the moon verse in verse 5 there won’t be a repeat of looking up (into the sky). But there are other autumnal aspects to focus on such as back-to-school, the turning of the leaves and Halloween for instance.
This verse keeps the renku running smoothly, too, so thanks for that Keith.
And what we need now is 2 lines, autumn; still with reserved language and no violent actions, but with lots of activities and events to play with.
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