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The Renku Sessions: Timber Smoke – Week 17

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Greetings and welcome to The Haiku Foundation’s current Renku Session entitled, ‘Timber Smoke’. I am Marshall Hryciuk of Toronto, Canada and I will be leading this session through a 36-link kasen renku.

 

Welcome back, renku fans! We return with a blossom verse link. And a beautiful one it is:

 

a morning glory
the hummingbird
unfolds

madeleine kavanaugh

 

When we left, the tide was coming in, a beneath-the-surface motion that is invisible as to its increments but inevitable. This link announces a natural, above-the surface activity opening out in a kind of exchange that links with the human beachcombers but one that involves the frenetic whirring of wings, barely visible because they’re moving so quickly. It’s not the throat of this bird that hums but its wings. Its beak, where we’d expect sound, is instead, in anticipation of fresh nectar, helping a new flower open in its glorious colour.

I enjoy that it has the ‘haiku element’ of needing to be read twice to be fully understood; our first response being, ‘how does a hummingbird unfold?’ Reading it a second time we realize the verb, “unfold” is not reflexive but transitive and transfers its energy to the first line “a morning glory.”

Reading it a third time, we can further realize that finishing the poem returns you to its beginning: “unfolds/ a morning glory”. It completes a cycle within itself; a marvelous inclusion in the relay of our renku energy.

Thank-you very much, madeleine kavanaugh

 

We need now another verse of spring seasonality. No birds, no flowers or blossomings but insects and human activities of this season are possible so long as they’re not traditions whose spring associations are specific to the northern hemisphere.

 

Happy linking
Marshall

 

 

Timber Smoke (so far)

 

nothing dimmed yet
timber smoke scent
sifts into the house

Marshall Hryciuk

 

one by one
I pick plums off of the ground

Alfred Booth

 

a file of cars
overtaking a tractor
on the mountain road

Keith Evetts

 

drawn out deer notes
echo in the coolness

Betty Shropshire

 

even paler
than the clearing fog
day moon

Mary White

 

handprints  and crumbs
I would miss them

Pamela Garry

 

giving pollen
a lift
on the bicycle bells

Laurie Greer

 

the tiffany blue
of 3 eggs in a nest

Eavonka Ettinger

 

scattered spores
following a random trail
through landmines

John Hawkhead

 

attempted murder
by the morality police

Rob Barkan

 

next door’s dog
barks
at our snowman

Carol Jones

 

the mailman’s breath
faintly white

Keith Evetts

 

Jacques Brel singing
“in the port of Amsterdam”
on the radio

Alfred Booth and Marshall Hryciuk

 

a whirligig of leaves
sweeps the deck clean

Wendy C. Bialek

 

evening begins
with a gift of opal
moonlight

Marion Clarke

 

beachcombers trade shells
as the tide comes in

Jonathan Alderfer

 

a morning glory
the hummingbird
unfolds

madeleine kavanaugh

 

 

 

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This Post Has 105 Comments

  1. a morning glory
    the hummingbird
    unfolds
    ———-madeleine kavanaugh
    .

    without a care
    i let the sun warm my face
    .

    an young farmer
    tills furrows until sundown

  2. whatever you might be celebrating or not let me wish you peace and love

    somehow
    ants find the breakroom
    on the 23rd floor

  3. Congratulations, Madeleine. Glory and unfolds are lovely together.

    we open the windows
    to let the winter out

    stepping out
    with a new umbrella

  4. a morning glory
    the hummingbird
    unfolds
    ———-madeleine kavanaugh
    .

    leaping clear of the world
    a trout and its rainbow
    .

    rising up
    the sound of the forest floor
    .

    the oriole in the orchard
    sings only in the present tense
    .

    showers of soft vowels
    transform the meadow’s face
    .

    toad in the rain
    soaking it up

  5. the smushed butterfly
    in a boy’s opened fist

    making pinwheels
    out of old magazines

    the kids running with kites
    when there’s no wind

    years of the Sunday paper
    resurrected as mulch

    1. dirt pile on a bare patch
      down the hole
      one miner bee

      from the just turned
      compost pile
      earthy steam

  6. a morning glory
    the hummingbird
    unfolds

    madeleine kavanaugh
    *
    fresh humus tracks over
    the clean mudroom floor
    *
    floor of the mudroom
    slippery with humus
    *
    muddaubers make a home-
    sweet-home of the mudroom
    *

  7. Congrats Madeleine – a perfect blossom verse!

    a morning glory
    the hummingbird
    unfolds
    madeleine kavanaugh
    .
    .
    slipping from silks
    in the butterfly garden
    .

  8. a morning glory
    the hummingbird
    unfolds
    — Madeleine Kavanaugh

    dung-beetle’s breath
    in the Milky Way

    burying fresh cow dung—
    beetles brooding in Spring

    1. Pamela, these poems make me smile and they are so interesting! I looked it up and this particular dung beetle uses the Milky Way’s light. Thank-you for posting!

  9. a morning glory
    the hummingbird
    unfolds

    madeleine kavanaugh
    *
    stepping from the changing room
    in her prom gown
    *

    1. hi Laurie -could we change “changing room” to ‘change room’, so to avoid a double participle line?
      And thanks to everyone for your kind words concerning my comments.
      We’re doing great -Marshall

      1. Marshall–Yes to the change.
        and thanks
        *
        *
        stepping from the change room
        in her prom gown
        *
        or
        she steps from the changing room
        in her prom dress
        *

  10. opening my window
    to free the first ladybird (or ladybug)

    the city child cries
    when the older lambs leave

    the bite of a horsefly
    bothers more than the horses

  11. into the fields
    butterfly ‘s first flight

    dawn glows
    housewife’s chanting tune

    crow’s cawing
    her balcony’s rehearsal

  12. her fingers deep in dirt
    setting tender seedlings

    chrysalis opens
    metamorphosis of life

    first concerto of frogs
    swells into open window

      1. This is beautiful Carolyn. I wanted to say that I think your kimono haiku from the last session is breathe taking. 🙂

  13. a morning glory
    the hummingbird
    unfolds

    madeleine kavanaugh
    *
    dance of the fly swatters
    ending in a coup de grace
    *

  14. a morning glory
    the hummingbird
    unfolds
    — Madeleine Kavanaugh

    another ant parade
    on Mother’s Day

  15. *
    a morning glory
    the hummingbird
    unfolds

    madeleine kavanaugh
    *
    caterpillars wrapping up
    their first acts
    *
    caterpillars entering
    their change of life
    *
    caterpillars disappearing
    into their second homes
     *

  16. A beautiful Madeleine. What a way not only to herald in Spring but the day too, with “morning glory”. It is like showing one is many as if every element is a gestalt in itself. That’s without talking about the metaphoric hint of the flower.

    I would like to tail it with:

    she shortlists recipes
    for the kids’ school break

  17. Congratulations Madeleine! What a wonderful way to come back to the renku! Thank you, Marshall, for steering us along!

  18. congratulations madeleine, a very lovely verse!

    a morning glory
    the hummingbird
    unfolds
    ———-madeleine kavanaugh
    .

    windows thrown open
    to the meadow’s thrum
    .

    first mosquitoes
    welcome us to lunch al fresco
    .

    open window,
    a fly considers its options

  19. evening begins
    with a gift of opal
    moonlight

    beachcombers trade shells
    as the tide comes in

    a morning glory
    the hummingbird
    unfolds
    1
    a binman stirs the rubbish
    the rustle of Spring
    2
    first warm day of the year
    a parade of new clothes
    3
    the town’s Art Shows display
    accumulations of clutter

  20. love this one madeleine, most ingenious. marshall your best write-up yet, wonderful explanation.

  21. Thank-you Marshal, I am absolutely delighted! And I enjoyed reading your commentary which adds so much to the haiku.

  22. a morning glory
    the hummingbird
    unfolds

    Madeleine Kavanaugh

    worker ants
    dash off the afternoon

    freeing the ant leg
    from the water bill

    a garter snake held up
    by an amazon package

  23. wonderful pick….and commentary…marshall!

    KUDOS>>>fantastic flower bloom haiku madeleine!!!!

    how fortunate to have have morning glories bloom
    in spring….(the last three years…here…the hummers have to wait
    for summer to unfold them!)

  24. Welcome back, Marshall, and congratulations, Madeleine!

    +++

    the slow tick
    of a school clock

    a skipping rhyme
    on the playground

    a colored egg
    in dewy grass

    the garden shed
    in morning light

  25. Congratulations, Madeleine a captivating verse and very visual.
    I enjoyed reading the comments by Marshall.

  26. A glorious haiku verse! Congratulations and thank you Madeleine! And thank you Marshall for the ongoing wonderful lessons!

    a giggling ladybug
    gathering sunshine
    from Madeleine’s porch

    1. Awww, Pamela. Thank-you for your lovely comment! Your haiku is absolutely darling! I am giggling! (lol:)

  27. *
    a morning glory
    the hummingbird
    unfolds

    madeleine kavanaugh
    *
    falling down dizzy
    from the Maypole dance

  28. *
    a morning glory
    the hummingbird
    unfolds

    madeleine kavanaugh
    *
    the garden begins again
    with a stone buddha
    *
    nothing but a stone buddha
    in the garden

  29. Thanks for this enchanting verse, Madeleine! So glad to be back at this.
    *
    a morning glory
    the hummingbird
    unfolds

    madeleine kavanaugh
    *
    cleaning out the dust
    of moth wings

  30. Fabulous verse, Madeleine.

    a morning glory
    the hummingbird
    unfolds
    Madeleine Kavanaugh

    children uncover
    Easter eggs
    .
    Easter egg hunt brings
    squeals of joy

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