Shelley Baker-Gard is our selector this week. Here is her report:
“As expected, the choosing was difficult due to the many enjoyable entries. Some of the haiku/hokku were particularly appreciated by me because of their humor and because they reminded me of moments or events in my own life. For instance:
Because I once was stopped on a bike path by a fat robin picking up a worm, I laughed when I read Dan Campbell’s:
the bike path
Likewise, I’ve pulled up numerous holly tree sprouts “planted” by birds (probably a fat robin), so Wendy’s verse made perfectly fun sense to me:
in the garden
planted by a bird
And because coming home to the familiar sounds of feathered friends is comforting, I also loved Laurie Greer’s verse:
with the roosting song
of house finches
Two of the versus reminded me of the poetry of the Japanese masters Matsuo Basho and Kobayashi Issa respectively:
First was Dan Campbell’s beautifully sad haiku which was reminiscent of Basho’s poem on summer grasses swaying over a great samurai battle (many translations):
The second was John S Green’s humous self-deprecating haiku that reminded me of Issa’s life as he was frequently engaged with animals and his stepmother had a mean bite towards him and treated him as a fool.
the mama racoon bites me
April Fools’ Day
Many of the entries evoked powerful and immediate images:
This one by Michelle Beyers brings out metaphorical implications with “mirrors” and “sand” – perhaps meaning the person gathering shells is reflecting on the passage of the sands of time.
all i know about
mirrors in this sand
Other examples of wonderful imagery are Ellen Compton’s hokku:
leaf by leaf the light
taste of spring
and Nani Mariani’s
touch the wheat leaves
The following poems I thought were particularly great for their openness to multiple linking and shifting directions a capping verse could take, and they all had a spring theme. It was from these that I made a final choice.
a vow not to fight
on the forest floor
hidden from view
the crocus hiding place
at first sight
the first warm breeze
sets the porch swing
Thank-you all for participating!! After much thought, I have decided to choose Dana Rapisardi’s hokku as our opening verse for the next tan-renga. Her image evoked surprise and a clear picture of a person enjoying the arrival of spring, and at the same time I saw many possibilities for a wide variety of capping verses.”
the crocus hiding place
John speaking again:
Dana Rapisardi will be offered the option of choosing our next capping verse from among those offered in the coming week. Dana, please let me know if you are willing to make the next selection. As always, I am ready to make it if you would rather not and ready to consult with you, if you do want to choose.
This week, you are invited to offer two-line capping verses. They may be either spring or non-seasonal verses but should not be set in a season other than spring.
Please enter your verses in the comments box, below. Dana or I will review them until midnight on Monday, March 15 (Eastern US time). On Thursday, March 18, there will be a posting in which Dana or I will comment on some of the capping verse suggestions and select one of them to complete our latest tan-renga.
Looking forward to seeing your capping verses!
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