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The Renku Sessions: Side Show – Week 6

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Hello, Everyone—Earlier this week I heard from John that his eye procedure did not go well. At this moment I don’t know but I hope the setback is temporary and that over time he will recover. I am counting on help from Jim Kacian and Dave Russo until John recovers.

 

The choice this time was difficult because the link to “adventure” in Carol’s verse seemed to awaken the imaginations of everyone. As I read through the offerings, it became clear to me that our poem needed a verse with a positive feeling here and using this as a guide I was able to narrow the choices to the list below. As I mentioned last week, I also was inclined to try to find a verse that honored Bill Ander’s “Earthrise” if I could.

 

So here is my long list with the short list in bold: 


Anders’ last thought
B4 he splashed down
“next time in 3D”

in the year 2525
five humans with
four O₂ tanks

June 7th
the sound of a shutter
heard across cosmos

Wendy C. Bialek

*

international
peace rules the cosmos
in 2080

at recess children
in costumes play
superhero games

doctors develop
DNA cancer cure
at Martian lab

my time machine
arrives at Earthport
in 3020

the lonely
decision to attack
the attackers

below Egyptian
tombs we discover
a new culture

John Daleiden

*

awake before dawn
the scattered troupes
trail the first birds out

packing some gewgaws
for the daily treks,
on the off chance

Clysta Seney

*

at the end
of the game he loses
his favorite marble

Mimi Ahern

*

lost in a book
slowly steam rises
from her latte

Earth rise
in the rear view mirror,
Voyager explores deepest space

Melissa Dennison

*

ivory netsuke
of a Tokugawa samurai
astronaut

long lost ukiyo-e print
by Hokusai
of the earth rising

Jonathon Alderfer

*

i remember the day
she told me to make tea
as she turned to greet the other guests

Diana Ming Jeong

*

which kid
will be first to find
Patty Reed’s Dolly?

Patty Reed’s doll
lives on
as a survivor

oui.
et quand est
l’happy hour?

Alison Woolpert

*

introduced
by imaginary friends
to his first real ones

no simple errands
in a city
under siege

Laurie Greer

*

Bill Ander’s journey
to space
edifying earth

madeleine Kavanagh

*

the graduates
throw their mortar boards
into the air

andrew shimield

*

Ander’s ‘Earthrise’
some years before Kubrick’s
great space odyssey

a space odyssey
to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
spake Zarathustra’

when the horses dropped
camels were imported
with their cameleers

Lorin Ford

*

her bags ready
to return home
in remission

Tracy Davidson

*

chauffeur-driven
new mayor reaches town hall
on a tandem

Attard Francis

*

the sound
of national anthem from
the bombarded school

Milan Rajkumar

*

neeb evah
I erehw ees
ot sdrawkcab gniklaw

Dan Campbell

*

pride flags
line the walk
of South Orange Ave

Michael Henry Lee

*

at the whiskey bar
Earthrise comes up again
the day its shutterbug dies

Pamela Garry


So many great adventures in these verses—any one of them would give the renku a solid start. So I’m sure that you can appreciate that narrowing the choices down to one was difficult. I’ll mention just one that caught my attention and that’s Alison Woolpert’s verse about Patty Reed’s doll. I didn’t know who Patty Reed was until I looked her up and found that she was a little girl in the ill-fated Donner party crossing the Sierras in winter in 1846. She had been told to discard all her toys to lighten the load on the wagon her family was traveling in. She kept a small four-inch doll which she hid from her parents. The family was one of few who survived that terrible winter. The article said that they moved to San Jose and thrived. I was surprised to learn that several streets were named after them, and one of them, Reed Street, was the street where I lived when I first moved to San Jose! One learns so much from others when writing renku.

In any case I still felt strongly that we needed a positive and uplifting verse following Carol’s verse. And my desire to honor Bill Ander’s led me to favor all the verses submitted about him and/or his famous photograph “Earthrise.” As I sifted through them there were two that were almost right:

Ander’s ‘Earthrise’
some years before Kubrick’s
great space odyssey

a space odyssey
to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
spake Zarathustra’

Both by Lorin Ford

The first of these honors Bill Ander’s “Earthrise” and the second has the uplifting feeling I was looking for. If Lorin will agree (fingers crossed), I would like to combine these two to make our fifth verse:

Earthrise
to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
spake Zarathustra’

Lorin Ford

If you haven’t heard this piece for a while, I suggest you play it and see if you don’t agree that this is a winning combination.


With that, we have our fifth verse and our poem will read as follows:

 

Side Show

 

the moon joins
a juggler’s side show
harvest festival

Wendy C. Bialek

 

a swirl of moths
orbits the yellow lamplight

Jonathan Alderfer

 

drifting leaves
pile up at the lock gates
on the old canal

Andrew Shimield

 

an inuksuk points the way
to the next adventure

Carol Jones

 

Earthrise
to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
spake Zarathustra’

Lorin Ford

 

Note that I did not put Earthrise in quotes as I hope the capitalization is enough to suggest the photograph, but earthrise free of the quotes invites us to imagine we are on the moon looking back at our dear earth.


 And now here are your instructions for verse six:

 

  • a two-line no-season verse, the two lines should flow syntactically; this verse could be a love verse — or not.
  • link to verse five in some fashion;
  • the door is open for all topics: religion, war, politics, death, or any wild or bizarre subjects (in this section of the renku the party gets going full steam — arguments, clowning, tears, all happen here);
  • for the rest of the renku, please avoid any subjects related to festivals or circuses, carnival acts, moons, etc.; also avoid mention of art, music, photography, religion, and planets for the next six verses; avoid mention of stones, directions, or cairns for the next five verses; avoid mention of entrances, water, and vegetation for the next four verses; avoid any mention of insects, light, color, or trajectories for the next three verses;
  • submit your verses by midnight PDT Tuesday, June 25.

Thank you for all your submissions. I wish you good writing in the coming week — and good healing for John.

Patricia

 

 

 

 

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This Post Has 202 Comments

  1. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’ – Lorin Ford

    after 14 years Julian
    steps again on native soil

  2. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’ –Lorin Ford

    ***

    honeymoon ears still ring from
    shells spent on the shooting range
    *
    i should have listened
    to my cold feet

    1. honeymoon ears still ring from
      time spent on the shooting range
      *
      honeymoon ears still ring from
      hours spent on the shooting range
      *

  3. The first 2 lines of some poems by Ted Kooser. I enjoy his poetry because, like haiku, he notices the everyday miracles that are usually ignored.

    “Today, from a distance, I saw you walking away,”
    “and without a sound, the glittering face of a river slipped past.”
    “A Birthday Card”

    “He was a big man, says the size of his shoes”
    “on a pile of broken dishes by the house;”
    “A Letter in October”

    “I am almost home, while the fireflies”
    “open and close in the sweet dark.”
    “So This Is Nebraska”

    “The gravel road rides with a slow gallop”
    “over the fields, the telephone lines”
    “A Gold Tooth”

    “In a pawn shop in Wichita,”
    “a gold tooth,”
    “The Early Bird”

    “Still dark, and raining hard on a cold May morning,”
    “and yet the early bird is out there chirping.”
    “A Rainy Morning”

    1. Wonderful poetry Dan, thank you for sharing these ‘teazing’ two-liners of
      of Ted…..now asap i must read more!

  4. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    –Lorin Ford

    the prosperity prophet
    blesses flowers of the field

    in streets, children chant war songs,
    sing of fire, ash, and death

  5. mating in mid-air
    was quite a scare

    she sure looked cute
    in a parachute

    my last words were o lord
    I can’t find the ripcord

  6. my uber driver
    lowers the speed limit

    the uber driver
    running on fumes

    great conquests
    on a minuscule speck

    not living until
    we’re together again

    the last thing I’ll see
    is your face

    sent away
    in an escape pod

    struggling to break
    the cycle of abuse

    a strange sense
    of déjà vu again

    we both remember it
    differently

    ***
    get well soon
    we all sign the card
    for a renku master

  7. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    –Lorin Ford

    her love song, a paen,
    lamenting his war death

    in minor key, he sings
    of ripped away, hostage-love

  8. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’

    Lorin Ford

    the fighting shifts
    from south to north

    smoke plumes up
    where cities were

    pew kneelers drop
    as congregants pray

    1. Earthrise
      to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
      spake Zarathustra’

      smoke plumes up
      where cities were
      .
      I like the realistic gist of this, Richard. You could add something , for instance rubble., for emphasis. For instance:

      smoke plumes and rubble
      where cities were

      (Unfortunately this is the literal case in our world at present.)

  9. hope flickering off
    and on like a firefly

    hope a pinhole
    of light in the darkness

    hope a new dawn
    and a new day

  10. her beauty
    only cloud deep

    tears rain down from heaven
    quenching forest embers

    as she frantically parts steam
    her engagement ring circles the drain

    two skeletons hold hands
    inside a scorched suv

  11. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    –Lorin Ford

    early morning exercise
    at the senior center

    in his homily the priest
    requests our charity

  12. Coming in late…loved your verses, Carol and Lorin!!
    ***

    an inuksuk points the way
    to the next adventure

    Carol Jones

    *
    Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’

    Lorin Ford
    *
    his buzz cut and uniform
    freshly pressed just for her

    Betty Shropshire

  13. harmonising
    we sing in tune

    twinkly eyes…
    but such corny jokes

    at the seaside smiling
    how I miss you

    the lucky charm you carried
    now in my purse

    pushing teddy
    in my pram, you held my hand

    dancing the night away
    on the banks of the danube

    horses hooves on
    cobbled streets – Vienna

  14. Congratulations, Lorin, on your verse being chosen.

    Wishing you a successful recovery, John.

    Earthrise
    to the tune of Straus’s Thus
    spake Zarathustra
    –Lorin Ford

    generals waltzing
    around war zones

    generals waltzing around
    so many wars

    diplomats waltzing around
    peace talks

    1. I really like these verses, Nancy…poignant and beautiful and very .thought provoking.

  15. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    –Lorin Ford

    in the concert hall attire
    is come as you are dressed

    singers leave Concert Hall
    to tour the Rust movie set

    follow prophets and think
    good thoughts, words, deeds—the divine

    symphony of lovers’ songs
    serenades streets where we live

  16. an ill-timed bout
    of honeymoon halitosis

    another odyssey
    delayed by strikes

    the gravity
    in every vote

  17. Doesn’t Earthshine hearken back to the first line of the renku? Just curious, being late to the party.

      1. hi Chris, and other posters/writers of renku verse,
        What else i have learned from John Stevenson concerning the following special verses:

        it isn’t only about the Moon verse…just to be clear,
        it applies to all ‘designer verses’,

        blossom/flower verse…..the example of a rose is a rose is a rose but a tattoo of a rose is not a rose.

        love verses….love between adults only, not children, not pets, not relatives, not hobbies, etc.

        1. “What else i have learned from John Stevenson concerning the following special verses:

          it isn’t only about the Moon verse…just to be clear,
          it applies to all ‘designer verses’,

          blossom/flower verse…..
          love verses ” – Wendy C, Bialek

          Wendy, I may be wrong but I’d lay odds that John Stevenson did not teach you to use the expression ‘designer verses’ in relation to renku. I imagine you’ve carried that term over from more mundane things than poetry, things such as ‘designer kitchens’ & ‘designer labels’ . As is typical of advertising, the grammar is poor: labels don’t design anything, nor do kitchens. A designer kitchen is a kitchen designed by a person or a company.

          We have moon verses, blossom (or flower) verses and love verses in all types of renku. Quite where these verses are placed depends on where whomever first designed the schema of a particular type of renku decided to place them.

          Perhaps the person who first developed any particular form of renku could be called the ‘designer’ of that form of renku? Perhaps Basho put a sign in his front yard: “Basho, Renku Designer” ?

          1. Lorin, i, too was put off when i first heard this term…but, i can see how when a sabaki is teaching renku to new students…it can be easily relatable.
            You are certainly correct… John never, ever, used the word, ‘designer’ verse with me…..only Marshall used that word.
            which is why….
            i am perplexed by this comment.
            not too long ago i posted here saying; it was Marshall H. in Timber Smoke renku who introduced me to this term.
            Lorin,
            I never said or intended anywhere that…”John” taught me that term.

            John taught me what would be acceptable and unacceptable examples when utilizing these special verses.

    1. as John Stevenson has taught me:
      a picture (photo, painting, etc.) of something is not the thing itself.

      1. I assume that’s about moon verses needing an actual moon (as opposed to a photo or idiom like ‘over the moon’). But this is about repeating topics (in any way).

        1. Hi Chris, I believe you are right that writing about the Earthrise picture is too soon in our renku, since the first line of our renku is about the moon. Last week, in commemoration of William Anders, the astronaut who passed away recently, Patricia made an exception, by asking if we would include poems about him, his journey to the moon… his photo of Earthrise.

          1. There have been great responses to Patricia’s request…wonderful that Patricia made this exception.

          2. the moon joins
            a juggler’s side show
            harvest festival – Wendy C. Bialek

            “Hi Chris, I believe you are right that writing about the Earthrise picture is too soon in our renku, since the first line of our renku is about the moon. ” – madeleine kavanagh

            Well, Madeleine and Chris:, I disagree. My ‘Earthrise’ verse not “too soon” because it’s not a moon verse. (I would’ve thought that was obvious!)

            I like Wendy’s hokku a lot, especially the play on a scene in which a juggler is juggling round things (balls, most likely). For a moment the moon appears to become part of the jugglers act. A distant full moon would certainly be the right shape and size to fit in with balls being juggled.

            As I see it, that’s the beginning (but not the end) of the word ‘moon’ in this renku.

            But, Chris and Madelaine, where, pray tell, is the moon mentioned in my:

            Earthrise
            to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
            spake Zarathustra’ – Lorin Ford

            ??? Where is the moon?

            If either of you want to say something along the lines of ” If we look at the original Earthrise photo we can see the edge of a desert place that we might assume is part of the moon”, but I don’t think that’s enough. Wendy’s moon is a thing stated and part of an image to be seen. The humour in her hokku is that, because of its shape and distance, it appears to be just another ball in the juggler’s act.

            Where is the moon mentioned in my Earthrise verse? Nowhere! Earthrise is about Earth, as seen from space in a photo taken by the recently late William Anders. Earthrise is not about the moon but about the Earth, seen from space. It is not a moon verse. ‘Earthrise’ is the name of a famous photo of Earth taken from a spaceship, just as Strauss’s ‘Thus spake Zarathustra’ is a famous tone poem, based on a novel. Yes, in Ander’s photo one can see a strip of desert that probably is part of the moon in that photo but my verse doesn’t refer to the moon in any way, just as Wendy’s hokku doesn’t refer to a stage, the juggler’s costume or the hog pens in the background.

            “”But this is about repeating topics (in any way)” – Chris

            Well, what topic is being repeated, Chris? Please do tell! ”

            p.s. I’m not sure, but I think I recall Patricia mentioning that this would be a nijûin renku. If so, it will be comprised of 20 verses. Unlike some other renku verses, the nijûin can have two verses dedicated to the moon.

            I do know that in a ninjuin renku that starts in Autumn (as this current renku of ours does) , “the moon generally appears in one of the first three stanzas. ” according to William J. Higginson and Tadashi Kondô . So I’d say our moon verse hokku is in the traditional place for this type of renku : “one of the first 3 stanzas”

            “Short: Twenty-Stanza Renku

            The nijûin, a twenty-stanza format for renku, is the shortest format with a classical feeling in its overall structure and rhythm. With a clear “face”, two shortened middle pages, and a back page mirroring the front page, it provides for two moon verses, one blossom verse, and two groups of love verses, closely paralleling the structure of a thirty-six stanza kasen. And though twenty stanzas is little more than half the length of a kasen, the format provides enough room for the great diversity of a true haikai no renga. ”

            http://www.2hweb.net/haikai/renku/shorter_renku.html

        2. Chris,
          repeating topics that is a whole other thing, that we can give a great deal of focus to… here.
          however, since Madeleine informed you of Patricia’s interest to also include offers for tributes to “Earthrise” and its photographer,
          the late, William Anders…that consideration had not addressed.
          What i do so much appreciate about our sabaki, Patricia, is her ability to be flexible when a current event catches our attention and she agrees to be open to this flow….i experienced the same sensitivity in the “Rendezvous” renku…when we first experienced Covid, world-wide….Patricia allowed us to post about illnesses, etc. before the customary order for its mention.

          Kudos, Patricia for your flexibility!!!
          Look at how beautiful this renku has flowed…from the serendipity of a moon that magically appears to join earth….to the serendipity of a photo of the earth rising towards the moon accompanied with a fanfare of stunning music. (along with all the wonderful stops in between)!

    2. Hi, Chris–Earthrise does refer to the famous photograph taken by Anders while orbiting the moon. But the moon isn’t mentioned and I thought earthrise could occur in other places in the solar system. So that, in my mind, gave enough distance although I admit there’s still a slight whiff of moon about the verse.

      1. Lorin, I stand corrected and I meant no offense in any way. I apologize if I have caused you any distress. It was not my intention. I love your poetry and have always found your poems to be brilliant as well as inspiring. Yours is a glorious verse and I applaud Patricia’s choice for this week’s renku. I wouldn’t have wanted any other verse but yours to be in its place, adding so much richness to our renku. My only excuse is that I was trying to explain in my own clumsy way to which was a genuine interest on Chris’s part in seeking more knowledge on the subject. I fell short and did not answer the question well at all. I am grateful for your explanation, Lorin. I am grateful to Sabaki Patricia & to Wendy for their explanations as well, all helping to further the understanding of the art of renku.

        1. Ah, Madeleine, please don’t apologize: you have every right to your opinions and we are all finding our way under Patricia’s guidance. I wasn’t at all offended or distressed and I sincerely hope you don’t feel offended or distressed either.
          You are brave to question things. Sometimes that’s the only way to find out what we need to know. There will be another ‘moon’ in this renku, I think. (Patricia will tell us when)
          I don’t know how many verses (if any ) need to pass before we have a ‘music’ topic- a link to a different kind of music in a different place might be acceptable… I don’t know, that’ll be up to Patricia)
          I think (not sure) this renku is a Nijûin: http://www.2hweb.net/haikai/renku/shorter_renku.html
          If so, then the next two verses will be ‘Love’ verses.
          Good luck! :-)
          warm wishes from cold Melbourne

          I think (not sure) this is a Twenty-Stanza (Nijûin) Bill Higginson’s layout for this type of renku is here:
          http://www.2hweb.net/haikai/renku/shorter_renku.html

          If the Nijûin is the type of renku we’re involved in here, then the next verse is a ‘love’ verse.

          1. Thank you Lorin for your wonderful and heartwarming response and for all the information. I will look up the links you have posted. I am glad you are one of our fellow adventurers in this enriching experience of sharing renku poetry and I am happy Patricia is at the helm!

          2. I hope you are staying warm in cold Melbourne! :) Warm wishes back to you.

        2. Earthrise
          to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
          spake Zarathustra’ – Lorin Ford
          .
          home at last a tall man
          embraces his wife
          .

  18. John Stevenson, may the second eye operation restore your vision. Wishing you a full recovery, you are in my thoughts for healing.

    Patricia, thank you for your generous inclusion in the Week five verse selections. Your choice of Lorin Ford’s verse rings with the sonorous tones of Strauss’ brilliant fanfare. Well done.

  19. Hi Patricia, this is great news about John’s prognosis following his second surgery…praying for his continued recovery.

    1. Lorin, this is a marvelous poem, giving much musicality to our renku. Patricia, I did refresh my memory and listened to Strauss’s “Thus spake Zarathustra” again and I can see why this poem is a perfect fit. I had never heard of the Reed doll and appreciated reading its history. Thank you for including my poem on the short list.

      ~ ~ ~

      With all the senseless events going on in the world, I often think of George Orwell’s writing.

      doublespeak
      takes over the ability to reason in oceania

      ~ ~ ~

      cold war
      preceding a colder one

      ~ ~ ~

      a delight to see him
      in the children’s features

      ~ ~ ~

      The next two poems allude to religion. I am not sure if religion is still off the table, so these two don’t need to be considered. (They also don’t contain the appropriate syntax.)

      the weeping icon
      she kisses the glass in honolulu

      ~ ~ ~

      no time to change
      the children wear beachwear to church

      1. I understand that after reading Patricia’s instructions, religion is on the list. I apologize for misunderstanding.

      2. Hi Patricia,
        if you would scratch “…a delight to see him…” off the list to be considered, it would be appreciated. :)

  20. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    –Lorin Ford

    singing, I drive my Stanley
    Steemer to the auto show

    at the Opera House, I watch
    modern family tragedies

  21. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    –Lorin Ford

    the divine order—
    road to Frashokereti

    singing, I drive my Stanley
    Steemer to the auto show

    at the Opera House, I watch
    modern family tragedies

  22. This can easily also be…

    i didn’t want see it before
    but now i see my Dad everywhere

    Diana Ming Jeong

    My Dad passed away on December 19, 2023. This is my first haiku dedicated to him.
    If you are on Facebook, you know that each day, Facebook posts your memories. For 10 years, the same memories have come up, accumulating each year. So, this Saturday, June 22, a photo post from 2014 came up. It was a photo I took of Chinese Long Bean flowers. Grief struck me when I realized that my Dad planted those Chinese Long Beans, every year… and this will be the first year without him.

    1. In my case, either one is appropriate

      i didn’t see it before
      but now i see my Dad everywhere

      or

      i didn’t want see it before
      but now i see my Dad everywhere

      1. Actually, I would like to keep it as:

        i didn’t see it before
        but now i see my Dad everywhere

        Diana Ming Jeong

        Retracting this one, which has a typo anyways…
        i didn’t want see it before
        but now i see my Dad everywhere

      1. Thank you, Dan! :)

        Here is another one.

        it didn’t matter how old i was
        Dad always kept everything i made for him

        Diana Ming Jeong

        1. A tender and beautiful haiku, Diana. What a lovely tribute these poems are. I love that your father planted Chinese long bean flowers every year.

          1. Thank you Madeleine!
            When cleaning out his things, I found some seeds in a bag labeled “long beans”. I didn’t keep them………..
            I’m sure he is ok with that.

    2. Diana–thank you for sharing your thoughts about your dad. I hope there’s a verse yet to be written about Chinese Long Beans –or the lack thereof.

      1. Thank you Patricia!
        This is new to me… this grief. I didn’t know I would be able to write anything about my Dad. But I definitely will share more verses if they be about Chinese Long Beans or not. But the photo of those Chinese Long Bean flowers sure did open my eyes.

  23. Side Show

    the moon joins
    a juggler’s side show
    harvest festival

    Wendy C. Bialek

    a swirl of moths
    orbits the yellow lamplight

    Jonathan Alderfer

    drifting leaves
    pile up at the lock gates
    on the old canal

    Andrew Shimield

    an inuksuk points the way
    to the next adventure

    Carol Jones

    Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’

    Lorin Ford

    *****

    i didn’t see it before
    but now i see my Dad everywhere

    Diana Ming Jeong

  24. wishing there was
    a lighthouse for lost souls

    empty swings
    seem so sad and silent

    plastic poinsettias parked
    on my tombstone

  25. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’

    Lorin Ford
    *
    making one filmy veil
    do the work of seven

  26. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    –Lorin Ford

    the Prophet proclaims: ‘love,
    love, love is all you need.’

        1. Thanks! The allusion was to Star Trek, popular 1966-69, the time frame during which the Apollo 8 mission took place.

    1. the same prelude announces
      Elvis in the house

      I just discovered that in later years, Elvis concerts opened with this theme.

  27. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    –Lorin Ford

    Ooops. Correction:

    fluid notes segue to liquid
    flowing water rhythms

  28. good wishes to John for a swift recovery, and thanks to Jim for helping out.
    Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    – Lorin Ford
    *
    my teenage son
    stays in bed till noon

  29. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’

    Lorin Ford
    *
    awaiting developments
    on the ever after

  30. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    – Lorin Ford

    a toast
    to the young couple

  31. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    ——-Lorin Ford
    .

    the torn and faded cover
    of my old Whole Earth Catalog
    .

    traveling a line
    that vanishes into black
    .

    a star-nosed mole
    checks the night sky

  32. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    –Lorin Ford

    in dulcet voice mother sings
    freedom songs to her infant

    strains of trumpets announce
    the Lord’s second coming

    the anthem ring of sirens
    alerts the town to wildfires

    fluid notes segue to fluid,
    flowing water rhythms

    the flow of flaming lava
    engulfs houses and fields

    whirling notes become a white
    crane rising above marshland

  33. So sorry to hear of your ongoing vision difficulties, John. My fervent hope is for you to have a stress free recovery in the weeks ahead.
    Best regards,
    Betty

  34. an inuksuk points the way
    to the next adventure – Carol Jones

    Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’ – Lorin Ford

    because the world is round
    It turns me on . . . – John and Paul

  35. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    –Lorin Ford

    the artist composes work
    that creats world peace

    the chorus proclaims,
    “Hallelujan, peace reigns.”

    after carillon bells ring
    smoke creeps up the valley

    firefighters clear brush away
    from the carillon tower

  36. John, I sure do wish you a speedy recovery!

    Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’ – Lorin Ford

    it’s always the favorite star
    that vanishes without a trace

    it’s amazing how far shadows stretch
    when they’re waving goodbye

    the artist grief
    only sculpts a broken heart

  37. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    –Lorin Ford

    composition on the theme
    of restoring life to the land

    balancing harmonies
    with dramatic heat increase

    a harmony of spheres
    rescues man from certain death

    the scale of change evolves
    into new culture boundaries

    the soprano sings joyful
    praises blessing the new born

  38. making a new paradise
    from a two-part harmony
    *
    from their two-part harmony
    one true paradise
    *

  39. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    –Lorin Ford

    the two lovers whirl
    through life as one

    a fanfare for genetic
    life-saving intervention

  40. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’

    Lorin Ford
    *
    having the Eremocene
    all to ourselves
    *
    the old harmonies
    dwindle to a monotone
    *

  41. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’

    Lorin Ford
    *
    the orcas out
    to settle old scores
    *
    orcas showing us
    two can play that game
    *

  42. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’

    Lorin Ford
    *
    keeping the secrets
    in a second language

  43. Good morning, Everyone–I have some encouraging news about John. He has had a second surgery on his eye. The doctor says John’s prognosis is good that he will regain his eyesight, but it will take time for him to recover. The estimate is seven weeks. So while John is healing, Jim Kacian has volunteered to do the renku posting for us each week. I know we are all much relieved about John’s situation and that we have a way to go to continue the renku in his absence.

    Wishing you all good writing . . .

    1. Patricia: many thanks for the update on John, and all our best wishes for a successful restoration of his eyesight.

      And thanks also to Jim!

    2. Thankyou for this positive update Patricia. Take care and be patient, John :)

      Also, many thanks to Jim Kacien.

    3. Thanks, Patricia. Very glad to hear that John’s prognosis is good. Now he need to rest and let the healing process happen. My wish for him is comfort and music of his choice.

      Many thanks to Jim, who has done and still does so much for world-wide haiku and related. His haiku, :

      gunshot the length of the lake

      continues to echo and resonate for me after all these years. Every time it occurs to me, I’m there.

    4. Yay upon Yay, John!! Such wonderful news. Rest, recover and listen to the chorus of our best wishes. Thanks for sharing, Patricia.

    5. i so appreciate your sharing this optimistic update about John’s second surgery, Patricia. This is such great news to hear.

  44. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    ——-Lorin Ford

    staged for joys & passions
    falling rice on newly-weds

  45. Earthrise

    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus

    spake Zarathustra’
    — Lorin Ford

    a toy monkey clapping
    slower…and…slower

    unfolding the map
    from before the bypass

    the philatelist
    wets his lips

    a broken funny bone
    from the monkey bars

    Ps: Be well, John!

  46. Earthrise

    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus

    spake Zarathustra’
    — Lorin Ford

    waiting to welcome back
    her godmother

          1. Just for fun, Pamela:

            her shoe too large
            Cinderella falls flat on her face

  47. Earthrise

    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus

    spake Zarathustra’
    — Lorin Ford

    the fanfare ending
    also begins the hunt

    a majorette cartwheels
    with fire baton

    in the background
    twirling fire batons

  48. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’

    Lorin Ford
    *
    the conductor’s second sense
    about elopements
    *
    the conductor tells from
    their grins they’re eloping
    *
    the simultaneous
    translation so seamless
    *
    the near seamlessness of si-
    multaneous translation
    *

  49. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’

    Lorin Ford
    *
    passing the baton
    to a smaller generation
    *
    conducting themselves with dignity
    no matter what
    *
    scrambling for a letter
    of safe conduct
    *

  50. John, I pray for you and your family and your doctors helping you back to full sight. Lorin, incorporating Strauss’ tone poem to link to Carol’s verse is brilliant. Much gratitude to Jim and Dave for lending their gifts to us until John is well again. Patricia, you are the heart and spirit of these renku journeys. Thanks ever so.
    `
    Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    `
    Lorin Ford
    `
    temps rise to the level
    of human inattention
    `
    anti scientists go
    tilting at windmills
    `
    after aliens’ first visits
    they rethink time travel
    `
    arms this wide apart
    showing how much love

    anniversary bed plus
    two kids petting the dog

    world of silence between
    I do and never did

    across all their years
    still everything left to say

    1. Oops!
      `
      temps rise to the level
      of human inattention
      `
      Too similar to Lorin’s verse. So:
      `
      temps exceed levels
      of human inattention

    2. Oops!
      `
      Too similar to Lorin’s verse. So:
      `
      temps exceed levels
      of human inattention

  51. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    –Lorin Ford

    on Ringstrasse the sage’s
    words soar to supreme heights

    beautiful Eros evokes
    troubles for Gods and mortals

    the scales of passion enflame
    romance between her and me

  52. with science advancing, maybe soon
    ‘sight” cells transferred to the palms
    may allow a blind man to read any flat
    page in a book bypassing the need to
    rely on braille. With this in mind i write
    this verse:

    with pin-pricked palms
    a poet sees his words

    (more research is needed, for those interested in learning more about
    this, you may want to google D. O. P., Dermal Optical Perception, perception cells, etc.)

    1. This is great! But if a person can still hear, then there are perhaps screen reading programs to output to audio. I believe these exist but I am not familiar with the program names or it escapes me right now. I’m sure that Google or Microsoft or Apple are on it? Calling all A.I. 🧐

      1. Certainly these programs exist, Diana…..but i really like cuddling up to a book and writing poetry in bed….and taking into account exposure to certain lights directly after surgery can be harmful to eyes and possibly delay healing….
        The other benefit…i find advantageous, with some of the promising techniques is that reading/and writing is not co-dependent on software updates, wires, electricity or any light source at all.

  53. I’m praying for John and his family for the healing of his eye and for a speedy recovery. ❤️‍🩹🙏💐

    Thank you again, Patricia, for choosing one of mine for the long list. And I also had to look up about the doll! I was born and raised in San Jose and I had no idea about the street names! I now live in Pasadena, Ca so those names are long ago but I do remember Reed!

    Congratulations to Lorin! I was JUST listening to this before Bill Anders passed. Our music director was playing it for me and perhaps it did coincide with Bill Ander’s death and that is why he was playing it. This is a perfect tribute to Earthrise! It’s fantastic and genius.

    My “brilliant blue eyes” haiku was a tribute to Earthwise (earth and reflection of earth on the glass) and also a nod to John for his eyes, for his eye to heal, so he can enjoy some chocolate cake or the cake of his choice. 🎂

    1. Thanks, Diana. :-)

      I suppose it’s all those oceans that Earth has, and perhaps also oxygen in the atmosphere, that makes blue the colour of Earth as seen from space. Without all that water, Earth”s colour would be like that of Mars.

  54. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    ——Lorin Ford
    .

    the eagle has landed
    on top of the tallest pine
    .

    on my way to you
    one small step at a time
    .

    lying about you lying about
    how much you love me
    .

    we promise to speak only
    in the present tense

  55. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’ –Lorin Ford
    *
    even in the mock debate
    he pleads the fifth

  56. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    –Lorin Ford

    may I have this dance
    for the rest of life?

  57. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    — Lorin Ford

    pole vault competitors’
    hug viewed worldwide

    lightning strobe lights
    his courtship dance

    marzipan assorted fruit
    on the picnic blanket

  58. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    –Lorin Ford

    a phrophetic path
    to enduring love

  59. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    –Lorin Ford

    Ahura Mazda, prophet
    of a virtuous life

  60. Earthrise

    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus 
spake Zarathustra’
    Lorin Ford
    *
    young poets
    deciphering cloud puppets
    *
    Vienna waits for
    the third woman
    *
    in every plaza
    a soapbox and a waltz
    *

    1. To clarify the linkage Nietzsche was the author of “Thus Spake Zarathrusta” in which he described poets as “makers of lies”. One example was how poets make up stories out of clouds.

      1. Yes, Clysta, Nietzsche was the author of the novel, “Thus Spake Zarathrustra” . However, it was Strauss who, later, composed the “tone poem” with the same title.

        Wikipedia has it: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Also_sprach_Zarathustra

        “Also sprach Zarathustra, Op. 30 (German: [ˈalzo ʃpʁaːx t͡saʁaˈtʊstʁa] ⓘ, Thus Spoke Zarathustra or Thus Spake Zarathustra)[1] is a tone poem by Richard Strauss, composed in 1896 and inspired by Friedrich Nietzsche’s philosophical 1883–1885 novel Thus Spoke Zarathustra.[2] Strauss conducted its first performance on 27 November 1896 in Frankfurt. A typical performance lasts roughly thirty-three minutes.

        The initial fanfare – titled “Sunrise” in the composer’s programme notes[3] – became well known after its use in Stanley Kubrick’s 1968 film 2001: A Space Odyssey.[4] ” + etc.

        Strauss’s initial fanfare – titled “Sunrise” – is the source of the title of Anders’ photo, “Earthrise’ .

        1. You are correct Lorin. I saw and heard 2001 ASO when it was released. I meant only to point out that my cloud verse linkage was to the earlier book. The same with my Richard and Johann Strauss loose linkage. I wonder if such connections are too loose for renku. My mind ranges vastly. 😉

  61. “I am counting on help from Jim Kacian and Dave Russo until John recovers.” – Patricia

    Many thanks to Jim and to Dave Russo, without whom we’d all be up the creek without a paddle.

  62. Foremost – wishing John a steady recovery over time.

    Lorin – your link is superb! Now what? I’ll ponder love, but in the meantime . . .

    Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    –Lorin Ford

    knick knack paddy whack
    give the former president a fact

    1. Thanks, Alison. :-) Happy you like it.
      “Now what? I’ll ponder love…” -Alison Good idea, I think. Guess what they used to call the June full moon in old England, France & Germany (at least).

      “But, what does honeymoon really mean?
      https://www.dictionary.com/e/honeymoon/

      Relevant to June in the Northern Hemisphere only, of course.

  63. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    –Lorin Ford

    a glance that speaks volumes
    words can never convey

    without speech
    our thoughts understood

  64. how to translate from one
    dead language to another
    *
    a love that
    dare not
    *
    the hum of life
    in a pair of held hands
    *

  65. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’

    Lorin Ford

    looking back
    at our years together

    waking to the dulcet tones
    of a cement grinder

  66. John, you are too talented a poet and editor
    to have your sight taken away, therefore you
    will have a full recovery very soon so you can
    read these words.

  67. Sending my best wishes to John as he goes through this healing journey.

    Thanks to those keeping this going and to Patricia for her wonderful explanations of the process.

  68. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    –Lorin Ford

    I wake every morning
    at your side for twenty years

    waking every morning
    at your side for twenty years

  69. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’

    Four storm riders
    quicken in the dawning

    Humanity in Glory
    Triumphant among stars

    a star in the East
    annonces the Ancient of Days

  70. Firstly. all the very best for the recover of your vision, John. A truly beautiful verse about the moon and trees.
    This is seen by so many but not appreciated . . .

    An absolute stunner of a verse you have chosen, Patricia.
    Congratulations and thankyou, Lorin for this exceptional link.

  71. So sorry about the setback, John! I join the stream of good thoughts heading your way.
    Patricia and Lorin—wonderful work. This week is truly about banding together.
    *
    less and less that can’t be said
    in polite company
    *
    what even counts for
    polite company anymore
    *
    no unaccompanied dogs
    or children allowed
    *
    hearing both sides
    on the Anthropocene
    *

    1. hearing both sides
      on the Anthropocene – Laurie Greer

      Love this verse, Laurie, at some time we will be judged for the things we had or had not done and, maybe, by archeologists in the very very distant future, probably not of our world or mankind, but not as we know it today.

    2. Thanks, Laurie. A bit of work-shopping can work wonders, sometimes. Patricia is the one who first saw the possibility of blending the gist of two verses, to make a much better verse.

  72. John, wishing you the best and speediest recovery! Beautiful ku on today’s ’Haiku of the Day.’

    Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’
    ——-Lorin Ford

    Congratulations Lorin! Your verse sent me in an unexpected direction.

    On a whim I found these words in ‘Thus Spoke Zarathustra’ by Friedrich Nietzsche, and reformatted them into two lines. Too aphoristic for the haiku tradition, but I thought they might be of interest and perhaps present ideas relevant to our renku

    those who hear not the music
    think the dancers mad

    I fear you close by;
    I love you far away

    where one can no longer love
    there one should pass by

    in the end one experiences
    only oneself

    Was that life?
    Well then! Once more!

    1. Whoops! Thanks, Jonathon.

      But it looks like I confused Strauss’s music title with the title of Nietzsche’s novel. (where was my head? )
      (I love the music . . . blame that on the Kubrick film, which is where I first heard it.) The title of that music should be ‘Also spake…’ not “Thus spake …”, which refers to the book.

      Earthrise
      to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Also
      spake Zarathustra’
      .
      or

      Earthrise
      in tune with Strauss’s ‘Also
      spake Zarathustra’
      .
      I’ll put this up top where Patricia might notice it and perhaps we’ll see what Patricia thinks.

      1. ah, no. It’s ok. I was getting confused. It should be “… Strauss’s thus…”, as is.

        ” … Thus Spake Zarathustra)[1] is a tone poem by Richard Strauss, composed in 1896 and inspired by Friedrich Nietzsche’s philosophical 1883–1885 novel Thus Spoke Zarathustra.[2] ”

        That’s it, in English. “Also sprach Zarathustra” is the same but in German, I gather. Whew!

        1. Whew indeed, that is confusing since the a German word “also” translates into English as “thus” and is not the same as the English word “also.” I believe Nietzsche’s book title and Strauss’s tone poem both have the same original title in German, “Also Sprach Zarathustra,” which is usually translated into English as “Thus Spoke (or Spake) Zarathustra.”

  73. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’

    Lorin Ford

    a grain of sand spirals
    around the soupbowl

  74. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’

    a spaced-out ex-hippie
    smiles and says . . . good shit!

  75. Be well, John! I hope you recover quickly and completely from eye surgery. It’s nice having one of your poems selected today for The Haiku Foundation’s “Haiku of the Day.”

    all those haiku
    about the moon in the trees,
    the moon in the trees

    John Stevenson

    Congratulations, Lorin, on providing a fine fifth verse! And, again, great guidance this week, Patricia. Here are a few sixth-verse candidates.

    Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’

    Lorin Ford

    the zero-gravity toilet
    a downer for stoners

    the smell of burning weed
    permeates the balcony

    the kids making out
    lose track of the plot

  76. thoroughly completely
    and inexorably confused

    voiceprints might yet
    lead to a conviction

    the past looms large in
    the not-too-distant future

  77. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’

    Lorin Ford

    This is a fascinating and intriguing verse
    Lorin, a poetic and poignant scene
    set to that timeless dramatic theme,
    very well done.

    Patricia a fine pick, thank you. Now the
    possibilities forward are as endless as space.

  78. Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’

    Lorin Ford

    a fine wine picked here
    and sipped off alien’s lips

  79. So glad that Lorin is amenable to this fabulous combination, of two fine offerings that Patricia mixed in her creative mind. I can enjoy the heightened experience resulting from the melding of these two worlds into one.
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    Earthrise
    to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
    spake Zarathustra’

    Lorin Ford
    _______________________________________________________________________
    Congrats to Lorin, Patricia, Bill Anders, Stanley Kubrick and Richard Georg Strauss

    1. Thanks, Wendy. I, too, prefer the combination that Patricia arrived at best of all. :-)
      (I’m sure we’re all awaiting news of John’s condition and hoping for the best outcome.)

  80. Patricia, what a lovely surprise here at my old computer at 9:49am, AEST to find you’ve chosen my Anders + Kubrick verse to follow Carol’s verse. (Probably everyone in the Northern Hemisphere is asleep. For me, last night was the longest night of the year. The moon was full and golden.) I’m delighted. :-)

    However you choose to have the verse is fine with me, with or without quotation marks, or combining the two verses.
    I’m really happy you considered Strauss’s music in the background, too. Probably everyone is familiar with it, but just in case:
    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=T1HdRwiANpE

    1. Lorin–I’m so happy that you are pleased with this verse–out of the fertile mind of Lorin Ford!
      I’m looking at that same moon tonight–at 11:29 on the coast of Monterey Bay.

      Patricia

      1. Many thanks, Patricia, and your inspiration to combine the elements of two verses was brilliant. It reminds me of happy days in the past working with the late John Carley. (Though those renku were done on a private website and could be quite funny and raucous in ways that wouldn’t be suitable for display on THF.)

        Yes, same moon. :-) This from a radio station on New Zealand (it’s the first relevant moon news article I’ve found. There will be others, around the world)
        https://www.rnz.co.nz/news/world/520244/everything-to-know-about-strawberry-moon-in-australia-coinciding-with-this-year-s-winter-solstice

        So, for you, it was the ‘strawberry moon’, it seems :-) I don’t know if there are any names for the full moon at winter solstice here, but I can say that the Moon Rabbit was very clear and bright.

    2. Lorin, Such an auspicious Solstice for your verse and for this Sideshow Renku this year. Your verses become heard perfectly with Patricia’s touch. I too watched that same moon rise last night over the Diablo Range in the Northern Hemisphere and felt that same delight. My thoughts are with John and my thanks to Patricia for considering two of my offerings. Off to our next adventure.

      1. Thanks, Clysta, yes it’s the same moon that appears in both North and South Hemispheres, just not at the same time. When it’s my longest night & winter, it’s the longest summer day in the Northern Hemisphere. The moon orbits the Earth, both orbit the Sun.

        It was a very cold evening and night here, but the moon was golden-rosy warm -looking.

      1. Thanks, Marion. Lovely to “see” you here. :-)
        I’m pretty sure Kubrick’s film was where I heard it first, too. I had heard Strauss’s famous waltz, though, which also is on the film’s sound track.

  81. With concern and best wishes for John. And thanks to Patricia for this wonderful adventure. In particular for sharing about Patty Reed and your personal connection! And congratulations to Lorin on your wonderful poetry.

    Ander’s Earthrise

    some years before Kubrick’s

    great space odyssey 
    —Lorin Ford

    someday without you
    dog will fill the gap he said

    leap-second debate
    consensus couldn’t wait

    bio-concocted
    with sun and cholesterol

    paddle board à deux
    four feet connect with swells

    inexpressible
    relationship reckoning

    praying — sit and rise
    waking lullabies

    1. And many thanks to Jim Kacian and Dave Russo for supporting the Renku pending John’s recovery.

      1. “DITTO” for Pamela’s support for the helpers here and good wishes for John!

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