The Renku Sessions: Side Show – Week 15
Hello, Everyone—Well, I sense that this assignment to write a winter love verse that linked to a verse about the stories in 1001 Nights was difficult. I was surprised by how many verses were about a wedding or a honeymoon—in other words, young love. My thought was that after 1001 nights, love would have advanced, but clearly it was I who was out of step. Still, I will admit to looking for more mature love as I read your verses. Here are the verses, young love and old, that looked promising to me:
Adam and Eve in the snow camp
adding new inhabitants to the universe
between tonight and that night
the cold turns into intimacy
Nani Mariani
*
abandoned boxcar buried in snow
he lifts her inside
Rob Barkan
*
no longer adrift like snow
now we’re together
melting the ice with the warmth
of their vows
the long engagement strung out
with plenty of ice fishing
snow gives them carte blanche
to carry on as they like
Laurie Greer
*
a golden anniversary
on the snowy moor
Richard Straw
*
the taste of snow
between their lips
Eavonka Ettinger
*
grandparents build snow
hippies sonny and cher
couples march in icy winds
to regain all their rights
the squish of a lover’s hug
in puffy down snow jackets
Wendy C. Bialek
*
both snug as
a bug in an Inuit rug
Michael Henry Lee
*
virgin snow all around
the honeymoon retreat
Keith Evetts
*
snowy sky
unable to view her star husband
he finishes her shiromuku
the snow stopping
under the red parasol san san kudo
snow all around
snow all around
san san kudo
madeleine kavanagh
*
ignoring record snow fall
they celebrate long marriage
under his golf umbrella
he shelters her from sleet
winter after winter
we walk the faithfulness path
while snow falls they read
aloud their billet doux
in December her nineteenth
year with the same man
oysters and silver carp served
as winter wedding hors d’oeuvres
honeymooners tell tales
of travel through winter ice
on their winter honeymoon
free chocolates and condoms
John Daleiden
*
it’s cuffing season
let’s netflix and chill
snow cover blankets
our foreplay
snowed in
sparks fly
Diana Ming Jeong
*
they cwtch into grandma’s
timeworn quilt
beneath a canopy of snow
his resolve stiffens to keep us warm
Carol Jones
*
even in the the cold
your heat
winter drifts in
under our bedroom door
a line of frozen spruces
guards our privacy
Jonathan Alderfer
*
a cup of hot chocolate
dreaming of my prince
shrieking as he stuffs a snowball
down her shirt
outdoors snow falls
fifty candles on their anniversary cake
Melissa Dennison
*
an unsent letter
in his coat pocket
Maria Tomczak
*
brushing snowflakes
from her long long black hair
hibernating
until she returns
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
letting her win
the snowball fights
Dan Campbell
*
snowed up for a week
they reread to each other
Pamela Garry
*
the icy grip of handcuffs
fuels their intimacy
Dan MacDonald
From this long list, I chose these five verses for final consideration (Diana, I especially appreciate learning that there is a practice these days known as the “cuffing season”):
death
is listening
Barbara Anna Gaiardoni
love bound
in the hereafter
of 1001 nights
Betty Shropshire
a golden anniversary
on the snowy moor
Richard Straw
*
death
is listening
Barbara Anna Gaiardoni
love bound
in the hereafter
of 1001 nights
Betty Shropshire
it’s cuffing season
let’s netflix and chill
Diana Ming Jeong
*
death
is listening
Barbara Anna Gaiardoni
love bound
in the hereafter
of 1001 nights
Betty Shropshire
outdoors snow falls
fifty candles on their anniversary cake
Melissa Dennison
*
death
is listening
Barbara Anna Gaiardoni
love bound
in the hereafter
of 1001 nights
Betty Shropshire
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
Dan Campbell
*
death
is listening
Barbara Anna Gaiardoni
love bound
in the hereafter
of 1001 nights
Betty Shropshire
the icy grip of handcuffs
fuels their intimacy
Dan MacDonald
And it became clear that as I thought about Scheherazade in Betty’s “1001 nights,” the tender voice in Dan Campbell’s verse was the perfect response. And so for verse fourteen I chose:
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
Dan Campbell
Dan, I italicized the first line of your verse; I hope you are okay with that.
And now our renku becomes:
***
Side Show
the moon joins
a juggler’s side show
harvest festival
Wendy C. Bialek
a swirl of moths
orbits the yellow lamplight
Jonathan Alderfer
drifting leaves
pile up at the lock gates
on the old canal
Andrew Shimield
an inuksuk points the way
to the next adventure
Carol Jones
Earthrise
to the tune of Strauss’s ‘Thus
spake Zarathustra’
Lorin Ford
may I have this dance
for the rest of my life?
John Daleiden
I swing onto
his Vespa
fully committed
Clysta Seney
letting off a stowaway
in the middle of the heat
Laurie Greer
the cool
of the house
at the back of her mind
madeleine Kavanagh
unidentifiable
vibrations
Pamela Garry
the dog’s ears
prick up
before the doorbell
Keith Evetts
death
is listening
Barbara Anna Gaiardoni
love bound
in the hereafter
of 1001 nights
Betty Shropshire
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
Dan Campbell
And now here are your instructions for verse fifteen:
- a three-line winter moon verse, the three lines should flow syntactically;
- link to verse fourteen in some fashion;
- the door is open for all topics except death: war, politics, or any wild or bizarre subjects (in this section of the renku the party gets going full steam — arguments, clowning, tears, all happen here);
- for the rest of the renku, please avoid any subjects related to festivals or circuses, carnival acts, etc. as well as death, house/home, and life; avoid mention of a foreign language, any body parts, and the process of melting, thawing, etc. for six verses; avoid time of day or night, any reference to heaven, hell, or the great beyond, any numbers, and any reference to literary works or books for the next five verses; avoid references to hearing or listening or speaking for the next four verses; please avoid mentioning four-legged animals or sound-making devices for the next three verses; avoid ID’s and vibrating objects for the next two verses; also avoid mention of structures such as houses, barns, cabins, etc. as well as brains for the next verse.
- submit your verses by midnight PDT Tuesday, August 27.
I thank you all for your submissions and for your lively participation. I wish you good writing in the coming week — and good healing and tranquility for John. Jim is on vacation and the posting this week is being done by Robin Smith. Thank you, Robin, for your help—we are most grateful.
— Patricia
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gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
Dan Campbell
long night moon
rabbit
antsy in her den
~ ~ ~
full moon
wild wheat blades
the snow drift
~ ~ ~
a moon
without snow
one february
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
Dan Campbell
bear moon
the little ones
dreaming of strawberries.
~ ~ ~
bear moon
the little ones in their den
dreaming of strawberries.
~ ~ ~
long night moon
belly laughs
ho ho ho
~ ~ ~
cold moon
a red squirrel
tucked into oak leaves
*(I am sorry these are so late.)
hunger moon
rabbit
antsy in her den
~. ~. ~
full moon
belly laughs
ho ho ho
snow drifts
a red squirrel
tucked between oak leaves
winter moon
glitters
on ice pond
…
winter moon
lies on a carpet
of glittering stars
…
steam rises
from the lawn
after a frost moon
…
no moon
reflected
in the icy lake
cold moon looms closer
as earthquakes
split continents
cold moon
shows its dark side
as mountains topple
cold moon
spans the horizon
as tsunamis kiss craters
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart –Dan Campbell
cold snowflakes
obscure the winter moon
in silence
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
— Dan Campbell
*
the winter moon wanes
as we ready
to catch the cradle
*
our cradle rocks on
as the winter moon
waxes whiter
*
the new moon
blesses the brilliance
of fallen snow
*
tiny moons
softly flutter
on snowflakes
a stolen glance
of the moon
in a snowflake
the moon’s light
refracted
through a snowflake
the moon
in harmony
with a snowflake
the moonlit
frequency
of a snowflake
by the light of the moon
the plink and screech
of fallen snowflakes
the bird’s song
a breath
in the moonlight
a bird’s song
pirouettes across
the moonlight
eclipse moon
gliding down
on a snowflake
snow-capped mountains
silhouettes drifting
against the moon
Diana Ming Jeong
wolf moon smiles
as howling winds
cross the tundra
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart –Dan Campbell
our romance deepens
in the light of a full
winter moon
in winter moon light
the red berries of hermit
smartweed shine
death
is listening
Barbara Anna Gaiardoni
love bound
in the hereafter
of 1001 nights
Betty Shropshire
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
Dan Campbell
*****
goodbye moon
the unique structure
of a snowflake
goodbye moon
the fragility
of a snowflake
goodbye moon
the high and low tides
of a snowflake
goodbye moon
no two snowflakes
are ever alike
Diana Ming Jeong
Lastly
warming up
the defibrillator
she rips off his shirt
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart –Dan Campbell
steam from porridge
cups frosts our window view
of the winter moon
cold moon
reflected in
the spider’s eye
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
a lonely moon
watching the northern lights
dance
from the lunar seas
we look back at a
perfect blue dot
partying all night
as the long night moon
circles overhead
cold moon
a spider sneaks
into the house
cold moon
reflected by dew drops
on a spider’s web
howling
at the wolf moon
from the safety of our beds
through the glass
your pale moon face
head down i walk on
snow groans underfoot
I only think of you
not far to go
orion’s dogs
barking at the
frost moon
clouds of breath
cover the moon
waiting for a shooting star
a bare branch
of the old oak
pokes the moon
Considering the first line of Dan’s verse, perhaps it should be …
a bare branch
of the Spanish chestnut
pokes the moon
Ah—I’ve just remembered we are to avoid mentioning a foreign language!
Well done, Dan. A fine verse.
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
in the tip
of each icicle
a tiny moon
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart –Dan Campbell
at our full moon soirée
cold oysters on rye toast
canapéas served
despite cold rain
we provision our space craft
for winter moon launch
the winter day moon
comforts our car journey from
NY to LA
long moon
set adrift
on an iceberg
Diana Ming Jeong
too much drink
had the young man
flashing his moon
despite the cold
a young man flashes
his moon
But we haven’t had musical instruments. So:
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart — Dan Campbell
—
mulled wine, chorizo
and guitars to honour
the long night moon
revised to:
mulled wine, chorizo
and guitars to honour
the winter moon
—
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart — Dan Campbell
—
mulled wine, chorizo
and dancing to honour
the long night moon
hmmm, probably not dancing, as we already have dancing in John Daleiden’s verse #6.
Probably music (verse #5) is out of the question, too.
where no moon shines
a dreidel made of clay
spins
a dreidel spins
where no moon
shines
strapped in a snow sled
while moon watching
Basho gets a DWI
cold moon
on the marble chess board
checks a black knight square
cold moon
on a marble chess board
checks the black knights’ square
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart –Dan Campbell
on many full moons
at our hearth we savor
scents of fresh-cut pine
the full winter moon
on our alpine lodge where we
snuggle in a quilt
the frost moon reflected
as the cat and I
curl up together
remembering gifts
under the tree
so long night moon
convinced it’s
a woman in the moon
we count the stars
holding hands
following the frost moon
to your doorstep
above the day moon
a clear sky, below
my boots stars crunching
a clinic on Europa
welcomes preserved
eggs
ooops! a clinic is a structure!
Europa’s open community
welcomes preserved
eggs
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart — Dan Campbell
—
as bright as a flame
from a witch’s brass cauldron
this winter moon
—
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart –Dan Campbell
winter orb
in this world of white we hear
the wail of wind
we warm our hands
at the winter campfire
beneath a full moon
Patricia,
This is the first time, i’ve experienced a renku with two moon verses…when one resides in the hokku.
Are there any restrictions of word repetition that need to be observed in this [winter] moon verse? For example, can the word “moon” be used if it is clearly an earth moon? and can the moon be a full moon?
Just how sacred are the words and associations that come with them in the hokku ? i did research on this….but was unable to get anything that
spoke to handling this issue when it concerns a hokku…specifically.
I would love to hear you chime in here and see the how and why logic
you could shine on this unique curiosity.
“This is the first time, i’ve experienced a renku with two moon verses…when one resides in the hokku.” Wendy C. Bialek
. Wendy, sometime back in the threads of this renku you asserted that you followed the late John Carley’s way.
I assumed ( wrongly, it would seem) that you had a copy of his ‘Renku Reckoner’ and could refer to it.
The fact is that Patricia is precisely following the form of a Ninjuin renku. You can find the layout of the Ninjun form both in ‘Renku Reckoner’ and on Higginson’s ‘Renku Home’ (for which I have given the url several times in the course of this renku.)
‘Renku Reckoner’, page 46- 47: For a Ninjuin beginning in autumn, Carley has verse 1 & verse 3 as Autumn moon verses.
‘Renku Home’: For a Ninjuin beginning in autumn, Higginson has verse 1 as an Autumn moon verse & verse 15 as the 2nd moon verse.
(So both are legitimate, wouldn’t you say?)
Since Dan’s verse 14 is the current verse to be linked to, it would appear that Patricia is precisely following the Higginson model, with the 2nd moon verse appearing in the verse 15 slot.
I think we can assume by these two examples that a Ninjuin renku has two moon verses.
“There are two moon verses, one of which is set in autumn. For sequences begun in autumn, the first
will therefore pull up from its default position at #5 in order to figure in either the hokku or daisan.
Other constraints of verse distribution oblige the later moon position to roam the front of the second
sheet.” JEC, Ninjuin, p46 – 47
The moon is the moon. Your hokku was the autumn moon verse. Patricia is now asking for the 2nd moon verse to be a winter moon.
(I hope this helps, helps both you and anyone who might’ve become confused by your post.)
****
(“For example, can the word “moon” be used if it is clearly an earth moon? ” – Wendy C, Bialek
Basho, the renku master, wasn’t into SciFi renku (haiku no renga) , to my knowledge, Wendy.
The moon is the moon: the moon we see from our planet, Earth. Of course it has to be the ‘earth moon’.
I doubt that Basho would’ve allowed the moons of Jupiter etc.
Maybe, one day, there will be SF renku. Meanwhile, we follow Patricia, JEC and Bill Higginson in a Ninjuin renku
. The moon is the moon all year round. It is especially notable in autumn, true, but there was an interesting full moon fairly recently (here, in Victoria, Australia, where August is the last month of winter) A brassy colour.
Hi, Wendy–I am probably not the last word on this subject but here’s what my experience has been:
The moon in the hokku is treated as any moon verse. In the nijuin form there are always two moon verses. And yes, the word “moon” can be repeated. Yes, it can be a full moon, it can be moonlight, it can be no moon, etc. I see Lorin has posted many of the references describing the position of the moon verses.
From reading the verses posted so far, I do think I should add some clarification to my instructions for this verse:
This is a “winter moon” verse. If you us a phrase such as
winter moon
cold moon
frost moon
long night moon
wolf moon
hunger moon
you do not have to include some other reference to the winter season. [Note: “long night moon” contains the word “night” and because we have the verse with “1001 nights,” it won’t be eligible as a candidate for this verse.]
If you use only the word “moon” without a modifier, then you need another season word to make it a winter verse. In my experience it is more effective if this indicator of the season, e.g., quilt, bare branch, icicle, etc. come before the mention of “moon.” If you mention “moon” first without a modifier, we think the verse is an autumn verse only to find out later that the verse takes place in winter. This is a bit aggravating and we don’t want to aggravate our readers.
Finally, I apologize for being late in responding to your question. My internet was on the fritz this starting last Friday and it took until yesterday to get the problem diagnosed (some critter chewed the cable coming into the house). It was finally repaired and my blood pressure is back to normal.
Thank you all for carrying on in spite of my inability to respond.
hi patricia,
so glad you are hooked up again and calmness can be regained.
thank you for getting back and finding time to clarify my concerns.
Madeleine, I know this is tardy and out of order, but I absolutely love your verses:
snowy sky
unable to view her star husband
he finishes her shiromuku
the snow stopping
And grateful for the beautiful vocabulary you introduce to me.
Thank you Pamela, this means a lot to me…I apologize for my late arrival.
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
— Dan Campbell
over the moon on ice
no knee no memory
the heartbeats…
I love this Pamela…somethings to ponder.
*
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
*
the warming mustache
of a marshmallow
moon
*
the marshmallow moon
finds its own level
on the instant hot chocolate
each snowflake
cradled
by the moon’s light
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart –Dan Campbell
on a clear winter
morning in my rear view
mirror a day moon
through frosty windows
full moonlight
warms our romance
misty craters
shred passing fog
without a sound
misty craters
silently shred
passing fog
a powdery thumbprint
in a pink
winter sky
more like
a powdery thumbprint
in a pink winter sky
https://www.timeanddate.com/astronomy/moon/cold.html
in a pink winter sky
a moon more like a
powdery thumbprint
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart –Dan Campbell
snuggled together
wind whistles through the white world
under winter moon
on a hearth
the steaming tea kettle
shuts out winter moon
we forage winter
greens for dinner salad
under a day moon
Congratulations, Dan, for your excellent verse. Thanks, Robin, for stepping up to help in the interim, and continued healing for John. Jim, may your vacation be refreshing.
gracias no amor
for melting my frozen heart
–Dan Campbell
the old moon stuck
in the bare branches
of an oak
the icy branches
of a maple capture
the old moon
*
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
–Dan Campbell
*
by moonlight
insects forage for
gingerbread-men crumbs
*
the hidden new moon
gives a nod to
the brilliance of snow
*
These are beautiful Nan.
first cylinder of moon ice
preserved for
the smithsonian
astronauts toasting
with first moon water
streams worldwide
astronauts taste
moon water
for the first time
first astronaut
to taste moon water
born in Barcelona
astronauts add
moon water to
dehydrated egg nog
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart –Dan Campbell
across the bedroom floor
the arc of winter moon
slowly creeps
moonlight enriches
the fields
of withered grass
cradle moonlight
tiptoes
between icicles
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
— Dan Campbell
into a puddle
the cold moon surfaces
under our shadow
Wow! What a great visual! I love this!
Thank you Diane! Makes me happy!
Or
into a puddle
the cold moon surfaces
we walk on
*
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
*
crescent moon
sharp enough
to hone the dull skates
*
skates sharp enough
to hone
the waxing crescent
*
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
Dan Campbell
trapeze artist tries
the tightrope walk
for the flower moon
Congratulations Dan! And thank you, Patricia and Robin! We miss you John, and are praying for you!
moon casts tree’s shadow
across the snow
to touch another
*
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
*
how the moon
mulls over
a hot cup of wine
*
*
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
*
the infectious grin
of a frozen
crescent
*
hooked on the grin
of a frozen
crescent
*
Congratulations, Dan, excellent addition to the renku!
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
——-Dan Campbell
.
high cirri
but still enough moonlight
for every snowflake
.
a snowy owl
hunts the blue shadows
between moonlit dunes
.
sun to moon
to our snowbound town
in eight minutes
*
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
*
Dan Campbell
*
the moon
and the willow
share an icicle
*
starting a quilt
with the fat quarter
of a moon
*
bare buttocks
glow white
beneath a beaver moon
watched by the oak moon
treehuggers stop
the woodcutter’s axe
the hunger moon
fills empty mugs
at the soup kitchen
Oops, forget the bare buttocks (if you can)! My eyes skipped over the “avoid body parts” rule.
🤣
Very clever! I love these!
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart Dan Campbell
lunar halo
are we all protected
under your umbrella
undecided moon
white city slickers or
boots of spanish leather
the moon
breasts a cluster
of trickling icicles
edit –
the moon
breasts a cluster
of icicles
moon about to roll
down a
bare-branched mountain
bare branches
welcome
a rising moon
a thousand moons
across
a sparkling snowbank
a sparkling snowbank
becomes
a thousand moons
a myriad of moons
across
a sparkling snowbank
a sparkling snowbank
becomes
a myriad of moons
on the ski lift
the cold moon
hits my eye
Diana Ming Jeong
love bound
in the hereafter
of 1001 nights — Betty Shropshire
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart –Dan Campbell
—
. . . and the link (as well as ‘love’ itself) is: ‘foreign languages’ 😊 The original Arabic for 1001 nights, and French (long called ‘The language of love’)
Congratulations Dan, your verse is a great link as well as a lovely, smooth verse in its own right.
—
Cuffing? I’ve always known it to be a soft slap with the back of the hand. Or (at a push) the final touch a tailor might make to a man’s dress shirt. But the Merriam Webster dictionary allows me to realise it’s just another English vs American English issue.
Languages! Basho didn’t have this problem when he was sabaki-ing haikai no renga !
Whoops! Spanish, not French. Duh!
“The original Arabic for 1001 nights, and Spanish. Well, Spanish is classified as a Romance language.
“Spanish is the loving tongue
Soft as music, light as spring
It was a girl I learned it from
Living down Sonora way . . . ” – Bob Dylan
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart –Dan Campbell
winter moon lights
the withered field edge where
tattered scarecrow stands
winter moon
teeters
on pine trees
Diana Ming Jeong
Lovely!
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
Dan Campbell
a perfect coda to the love verses,
thank you dan and patricia.
the gratitude expressed is
quite overwhelming.
and now dan, one of your trademark
spanish phrases has been rewarded
with a permanent place in patricia’s renku.
felicidades!
very grateful for your help, robin.
john you better be reading this.
ice moon
indifferent
to a crackling fire
Congratulations, Dan! Yes, as Madeleine says, quite a sparkle! The king’s heart melted!
Thank you Robin for helping us! Prayers for John and everyone here, and also to Betty Shropshire, hoping she is ok, as Wendy pointed out that Betty hasn’t commented last week.
Thank you Patricia! Happy to be on the short list again!
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
Dan Campbell
long moon night
set adrift
on an iceberg
Diana Ming Jeong
I meant this one:
long night moon
set adrift
on an iceberg
Diana Ming Jeong
Noting this: “avoid time of day or night”
cold moon
set adrift
on an iceberg
Diana Ming Jeong
another version
cold moon
over ice
peaks
Diana Ming Jeong
Beautiful, Diana!
Yes, I’m wondering how Betty is, too, Diana.
Congratulations, Dan, a wonderful verse well-chosen!
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
Dan Campbell
shivers
from a cold moon
on the longest night
***
the moonlight
adds more sparkle
to snowflakes
Lovely verses, Eavonka!
Best of health, John. Great selection, Patricia. And congratulations on your fine link, Dan!
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
Dan Campbell
a street lamp
mistaken for the moon
on an icy avenue
moonlit icicles
in the burned-out factory’s
broken windows
between skyscrapers
a glimpse of something
round and white
a bar’s neon lights
mix with moonshine
in an icy alley
moonlight
splinters into pieces
on the ice
These are great, Richard.
cozying up
by the crackling fire
cold moon
Congrats Dan! The system overrides Patricia’s italics, so here goes:
*
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
Dan Campbell
*
for every child
the Christmas moon silhouettes
one sleigh full of food
*
the frozen moon
slides down the center
of the windshield
. . . as it would, very slowly, when you’re driving straight ahead on a very long road.
I like this one a lot, Michael. It speaks to me of distances, of many miles traveled and many more to go.
Where I am, the moon rises in the east and sets in the west. I suppose it’s the same where you are, but I’m not sure.
If it is the same, then the moon sliding gradually down the centre of the windshield would indicate that this long night journey is toward the west.
Like that one, Michael!
Patricia, this sure was a nice surprise and thanks to everyone for the kind comments!
. . . and, Congratulations again, Cowboy! 😊 Well-deserved. (my main comment is further up)
Gracias amiga!
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart –Dan Campbell
alone
at the withered field edge
in scarecrow moonlight
love bound
in the hereafter
of 1001 nights
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
15
so much love about !
in the griping chill of
a high winter moon
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart –Dan Campbell
on the horizon
winter moon lights
the lake path to home
gracias, dan
por este verso de amor
verdaderamente conmovedor
gracias, patricia for a fine choice!
grasias, in advance robin, for taking over the tasks of posting our renku lists while jim is on holiday.
we miss you john, take your time to heal as long as you make your comeback when you are ready.
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
Dan Campbell
Congrats Dan on a sweet sweet verse! Gracias Patricia , Robin and Jim!
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
— Dan Campbell
the moon glows brighter
with Kamala and Tim
taking an earthly spin
(So much more than politics!)
a drone’s shadow
can’t dim the light
of Kamala and Tim
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gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
*
Dan Campbell
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the moonlit dream
stays sharp
in the cold
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Thankyou Robin for taking the helm.
Another wonderful posting to read Patricia, thanks for including mine in the line-up.
Dan, a delightful verse, well done and congratulations.
Robin Smith, thank you for uploading the Renku file so the writers can continue to submit work for verse 15.
Patricia, thank you for selecting as promising my young and mature lover offerings for verse 14.
John Stevenson, may you continute to heal.
Dan Campbell, congratulations on your selection for verse 14.
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart –Dan Campbell
she readies
her wedding china
under the bone moon
gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
her mittened hand
delivers a full moon
on a sugar cone
mashed potatoes form
a sea of tranquility
in the Swanson meal
Congratulations Dan, “…melting my frozen heart…” is such an enchanting verse, adding quite a sparkle to our renku. Patricia, thank you for this wonderful choice and as always for your insight. Cheers to Robin for stepping in for Jim while he’s on vacation. Good thoughts to John for his continued recovery… Laurie, your remark about “the don’ts” made me chuckle. :)
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gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
*
Dan Campbell
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the ice fishing hole
stays solid
in the middle of the pond
*
whoops–
moon cast off
down the ice-fishing
hole
First of all, thank you Robin, for helping us keep going!
And to Patricia, for another round of comments and selections, and the wonderful final choice of Dan’s bilingual love verse!
I apologize in advance for any of the “don’t”s I’m about to commit.
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gracias mi amor
for melting my frozen heart
*
Dan Campbell
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the cold
translates moonlight
into snowfall
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the cold translates moonlight
into snowfall
and back
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the memorized path
between the moon
and the snow
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