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The Renku Sessions: Cotton Clouds – Week 17

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Welcome to the current renku session. I am John Stevenson and I’ll be your guide for a twenty verse, nijûin renku.

We will be using an on-line list of season words and phrases (kigo) for those verses that require a seasonal reference:  https://yths.org/season-word-list/

 

Here is my short list of verse 17 offerings:

 

chairs left
in a circle in
a room

Richard Straw

 

so quietly
all the old things
fade away

Urszula Marciniak

 

one last glance
in the mirror
and she’s out the door

Debbie Feller

 

will the mirror
never reveal
my secrets

John Hawkhead

 

the child returns
a half-chewed crayon
to its owner

Tracy Davidson

 

the red-orange
sunset sky slides
into delight

John Daleiden

 

waiting on the step
for the porchlight
to come on

Rachel Greve

 

at dusk
a young man walking
his two Shih Tzu

Lorin Ford

 

a gift
of hand-painted china
from Anonymous

Lorin Ford

 

sound off
watching TV
to music

Anne Fox

 

so smooth
this cold egg
in my hand

Sharon Ferrante

 

speaking
without
words

Belinda Behne

 

a not so
simple case
of mistaken identity

Laurie Greer

 

I ash my smoke
and rush back
into the theater

Joshua St. Claire

 

the rumble then thunk
as bowling balls
re-rack

Sally Biggar

 

given to
a broad selection
of ever-changing moods

Michael Henry Lee

 

goldfish
slowly orbit
their glass world

Jonathan Alderfer

 

eyes closed
on the ride
out of town

Margaret Anderson

 

at the reunion
everybody is the same
and different

Debbie Scheving

 

children asked
to draw pictures
of their families

Nancy Brady

 

hum
of the vacuum cleaner
first thing

madeleine kavanagh

 

 

I think this may have been the longest of my shortlists for this renku. Often, by this point in the process, when so many topics have been covered, it can be difficult to avoid serious redundancies. A kind of collective writer’s block can set in. But you seem to have avoided that problem and, once again, provided a cornucopia of possible links. I celebrate that, while regretting that so many good offers will be passed over.

 

Here is my choice for the seventeenth verse:

 

children asked
to draw pictures
of their families

Nancy Brady

 

This is our first invocation of childhood. Although the previous verse deals with an activity that often begins in childhood, the perspective is that of an adult. It is also the first invocation of family. These topics (without any indication of childhood trauma or family dysfunction) effectively set the tone for our entry into the kyu.

 

 

So, here is what we have, so far:

 

Cotton Clouds (working title)

 

a pinto colt
canters the meadow
cotton clouds

John Stevenson

 

muddied boots
on the welcome mat

Jennifer Sutherland

 

a bounty
of tulips spilling
over the vase

Eavonka Ettinger

 

the comfort of song
sung together

Anne Fox

 

the hermit crab’s
new shell glistens
in the moonlight

Sally Biggar

 

he fell for the sundress
on bare shoulders

Debbie Scheving

 

sweet nothings
with a hint
of Bengay

Diana Ming Jeong

 

we tip the busker
for attempting ‘teen spirit’

Margaret Anderson

 

everyone dies
at the end but
we keep reading

Devin Wilson

 

paper cuts
not withstanding

Michael Henry Lee

 

the stoic grin
on the cooling face
of the gingerbread man

Laurie Greer

 

downhill like a rocket
on a baking pan

rob barkan

 

is she in a sack
or is it a rug that rolls
out before Caesar

madeleine kavanagh

 

crickets
as he waits for a kiss

Orense Nicod

 

a flock of geese
cuts the moon
in thirds

Belinda Behne

 

deciding not to
give the pumpkin a face

Sharon Ferrante

 

children asked
to draw pictures
of their families

Nancy Brady

 

This week, we will be working on the eighteenth verse. This will be two lines. It will be a spring verse. It must contain a season word or phrase from our list of spring kigo. Do not include any form of vegetation in this verse, since the next will be our spring blossom verse.

As part of the “kyu” (fast finish) of this renku, this verse should feature pleasant thoughts, subtlety, and quiet reflection.

 

Please enter a maximum of five verse-eighteen offers. The deadline for submission will be midnight, eastern US time on Monday, August 18.

Looking forward to your spring verses!

John

 

 

 

 

 

 

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John Stevenson

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