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The Renku Sessions: Cotton Clouds – Week 12

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Welcome to the current renku session. I am John Stevenson and I’ll be your guide for a twenty verse, nijûin renku.

We will be using an on-line list of season words and phrases (kigo) for those verses that require a seasonal reference:  https://yths.org/season-word-list/

 

Here is my short list of verse 12 offerings:

 

the snowball fight
becomes heated

Debbie Feller

 

winter sparrows
huddling on a wire

Richard Straw

 

a child coughing
in the back room

Richard Straw

 

no one left to talk to
on the winter beach

John Hawkhead

 

slushy snow on
the beginner’s hill

Clysta Seney

 

the old winter wind
finds a crack in the door

Michael Henry Lee

 

what to do
with all this winter?

Orense Nicod

 

carrot in a puddle
is the snowman’s legacy

Dan Campbell

 

one winter fly
circling my cheap wine

Sharon Ferrante

 

mulling too much
over mulled wine

Biswajit Mishra

 

the last snowmen
have yet to fall

Sean Felix

 

trying not to go stale
with winter seclusion

Laurie Greer

 

a snowy owl
hunts the blue shadows

Jonathan Alderfer

 

the sting
of the brrrrrry air

Jonathan Alderfer

 

broken angels
decorate the tree

Anne Fox

 

drown your sorrows
in hot chocolate

Diana Ming Jeong

 

hockey sticks
in need of re-taping

Margaret Anderson

 

downhill like a rocket
on a baking pan

rob barkan

 

frozen branches
fall with a snap

Debbie Scheving

 

unpacking a childhood
of ice skates

Wendy C. Bialek

 

This is the peak of the renku party. Loud voices, laughter, wit  and stoutly defended opinions! Among the verses I have passed over most reluctantly, there is a question:

 

what to do
with all this winter?

Orense Nicod

 

And there is a novel verbalization:

 

the sting
of the brrrrrry air

Jonathan Alderfer

 

And a vivid allusion to a J. W. Hackett haiku:

 

winter sparrows
huddling on a wire

Richard Straw

 

 

Here is my choice for the twelfth verse:

 


downhill like a rocket
on a baking pan

rob barkan

 

 

This adds the new topic of games/play and both extends and turns the previous verse in a new direction.

 

So, here is what we have, so far:

 

Cotton Clouds (working title)

 

a pinto colt
canters the meadow
cotton clouds

John Stevenson

 

muddied boots
on the welcome mat

Jennifer Sutherland

 

a bounty
of tulips spilling
over the vase

Eavonka Ettinger

 

the comfort of song
sung together

Anne Fox

 

the hermit crab’s
new shell glistens
in the moonlight

Sally Biggar

 

he fell for the sundress
on bare shoulders

Debbie Scheving

 

sweet nothings
with a hint
of Bengay

Diana Ming Jeong

 

we tip the busker
for attempting ‘teen spirit’

Margaret Anderson

 

everyone dies
at the end but
we keep reading

Devin Wilson

 

paper cuts
not withstanding

Michael Henry Lee

 

the stoic grin
on the cooling face
of the gingerbread man

Laurie Greer

 

downhill like a rocket
on a baking pan

rob barkan

 

 

This week, we will be working on the thirteenth verse. This will be three lines. It will be non-seasonal, so it must not contain a word or phrase from our list of season words. It will be the first in our final pair of love verses.

The priority is that it clearly registers as a love verse but this might also be a good spot for our “current events” verse. If you want to add current events to love, try to offer something that will not be extremely obscure in two or three months. Another way of approaching this topic might be to write of a historical event as if it is a “current event.”

 

Please enter a maximum of five verse-thirteen offers. The deadline for submission will be midnight, eastern US time on Monday, July 14.

Looking forward to your offers!

John

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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John Stevenson

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