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The Moon’s Aura: Week 8

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Namaskaar!
_()_

Welcome to the eighth week of rasika —’The Moon’s Aura.’
I’m Kala Ramesh, and I’ll be your guide in this journey in collaborative poetry.

It seems as if we have just started and we’ve reached the end – ageku!

 

The rasika till now:

The Moon’s Aura

— rasika, the shortest renku ever!

opening credits
the moon colorized
by its aura

— Laurie Greer

 

in one fluid stroke
we each draw an enso

— Sally Biggar

 

hush
of the huddled sparrows
as snow comes down hard

— Sanjuktaa Asopa

 

 

sea winds whistle through
the bleached bones of a whale

— Kashi Reisu

 

her perfume
with its hint of petrichor
enchants him

—  Marietta McGregor

 

surprise baby shower
at the women’s shelter

— Chris Patchel

 

 

Thanks a lot for all your offers. I enjoyed reading and thinking about them a lot.

Below are all the verses that I felt suited this slot. Choosing one took some time!

Some verses connected in one way or the other to petrichor, and one even to the hokku.

they say
timing is crucial when
it comes to forsythia

—  Michael Henry Lee

I really liked this verse but felt it connected directly to petrichor!

 

 

just enough shade
for the bright yellow
of a wild rose

—  Firdaus Parwez

Love this verse but the hokku has ‘colour’ and felt this won’t sit well here.

 

 

on the drive
the new BMW
studded with blossom

— andrew shimield

 

New topics covered but L 1 (on the drive) took me to petrichor again. I could be wrong! Lovely verse.

 

flowering irises
opening the window
among the tall grass

—  Angiola Inglese

 

Highly imaginative! Debated a lot about this verse. Well done!

 

 

 

suddenly
a purple sky rolls down
from grandma’s lilac bowl

— Lakshmi Iyer

Child-like and fun!

 

are dandelions
illegal aliens
or undocumented immigrants?

— princess k

 

I really liked the thought behind this but felt it was slightly wordy and so had to let it go.

 

 

 

most unexpectedly
the jacarandas bloom
a month earlier

 

                                  — Barbara A. Taylor

 

This is the verse that I felt sits best here. That is the beauty of renku. Each sabaki (guide) can take the renku forward in a totally different direction!

There’s a gentle touch about the image here, and it’s a fact that birth happens most unexpectedly in human beings and in the rest of nature! There’s no saying when we are going to be born or when we’ll die, for that matter. We don’t even know when we drift off to sleep or the exact moment when we wake up. The beauty of birth is succinctly brought to the fore, in the form of a blossom.

Let’s go back to ‘jo-ha-kyu’:
introduction, expansion and rapid close.

In Rasika these three parts would be:
Verses 1 & 2 – jo
Verses 3, 4, 5 and 6 – ha
Verses 7 & 8 – kyu.

How well this renku fits into this broad framework.

 

The rasika till now:

The Moon’s Aura
— rasika, the shortest renku ever!


opening credits
the moon colorized
by its aura

 

                                           — Laurie Greer

 

in one fluid stroke
we each draw an enso

 

                                           — Sally Biggar

 

hush
of the huddled sparrows
as snow comes down hard

 

                                          — Sanjuktaa Asopa

 

sea winds whistle through
the bleached bones of a whale

 

                                                — Kashi Reisu

 

her perfume
with its hint of petrichor
enchants him

 

                             —  Marietta McGregor

 

surprise baby shower
at the women’s shelter

 

                                    — Chris Patchel

 

most unexpectedly
the jacarandas bloom
a month earlier

 

                        — Barbara A. Taylor

 

The schema for ‘The Moon’s Aura’:

 

long – hokku | au mn*

short – wakiku | ns*

long – daisan | wi*

short – ns

long – end su/lv (rainy season)

short – ns/lv

long | sp bl *

  1. ageku | ns *

 

The asterisks show the important verses which remain constant in all renku.

What are the requirements for the ageku:

Ageku is always uplifting.
Short verse.
No seasonal reference.
A nature verse, without the presence of people.
Rapid close – (kyu)
Please don’t mention any word or image that has been used before.
Go for fresh images – images that have not been done so far in this renku.

 

The window closes on Sunday 21st November!

Keep a close watch on this space! Meet you next Thursday.

Thanks once again for following and participating in this renku.

 

I’m keenly waiting to read the ageku candidates!

Through all this activity of checking the requirements, don’t forget to have fun!

yours in haikai spirit,
_kala

 

 

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This Post Has 68 Comments

  1. alien traces
    in the asteroid

    (I would prefer:

    traces of alien life
    in the impact crater

    but it might be ruled out on a formal syllable count)

  2. please ignore “dawn of a shell
    left overnight on the shore “, which I realized looks like one already proposed

  3. from dusk to dawn
    secret life of a garden
    ***
    small brown eggs
    on the cabbage leaves
    ***
    dawn of a shell
    left overnight on the shore

  4. Congrats Barbara!
    .
    .
    most unexpectedly
    the jacarandas bloom
    a month earlier

    — Barbara A. Taylor
    .
    .
    the arctic circle
    currently drifting northwards
    .
    in one ear and out the other
    the moo of a glacier
    .
    even the last polar bear
    can’t turn off the lights
    .
    .

  5. most unexpectedly
    the jacarandas bloom
    a month earlier

    — Barbara A. Taylor

    shrivelling back
    the fungi enters warp speed

  6. most unexpectedly
    the jacarandas bloom
    a month earlier

    — Barbara A. Taylor

    within layered sandstone
    a perfect dinosaur footprint

  7. most unexpectedly
    the jacarandas bloom
    a month earlier

    — Barbara A. Taylor

    sunrise from behind
    the jagged city skyline

  8. Thank you Kala for selecting my verse. It is a lovely surprise. Thankyou all for your comments.
    I do love Jacarandas and have several in bloom right now.
    Looking forward to the ageku…

    Peace and Love

  9. most unexpectedly
    the jacarandas bloom
    a month earlier

    — Barbara A. Taylor

    the pure amethyst of crystals
    forming in a geode

  10. most unexpectedly
    the jacarandas bloom
    a month earlier
    *
    — Barbara A. Taylor
    *
    lichens turning stone
    into biome
    *
    lichens lay the ground for once
    and future forests
    *

  11. most unexpectedly
    the jacarandas bloom
    a month earlier
    *
    — Barbara A. Taylor
    *
    a walking stick finds its cryptic path
    along the map lichen
    *

    1. revison:
      *
      most unexpectedly
      the jacarandas bloom
      a month earlier
      *
      — Barbara A. Taylor
      *
      a walking stick wanders
      across the map lichen
      *

  12. Just adding my haiku to the conversation,
    not only about what the moon is like, but
    also about her effects around us.

    The brightest moonscape
    big sky filled with shinning stars
    smooth, vague, snow contours

  13. most unexpectedly
    the jacarandas bloom
    a month earlier
    – Barbara A. Taylor

    forward facing eyes blink
    while its tail holds true
    – Betty Shropshire

  14. most unexpectedly
    the jacarandas bloom
    a month earlier

    — Barbara A. Taylor

    *****

    wild mustangs grazing
    in the high desert

  15. his paw in mid air
    a jackal spies the eclipse

    a spring in the steps
    of escaping gazelle

    with fresh eucalyptus
    koalas forget their scars

  16. Barbara–a wonderful, vivid addition to this–congratulations! Kala, thanks as always for the careful readings and considerations. Sorry to see this end!
    *
    most unexpectedly
    the jacarandas bloom
    a month earlier
    *
    — Barbara A. Taylor
    *
    the fossil species endure
    the way they always have
    *

  17. Dear Kala,

    Thanks a ton for the wonderful Rasika journey. It will stay with me for the rest of my life.
    I enjoyed the learning through your comments and brief description. I must say, I was intoxicated until I got my offers ready every week with all the challenges of the Rasika cupping it. It was fun!
    Thank you again for your precious time and guidance. Thanks to THF for the opportunity given to learn from the expert.

    My offers for the ageku …..

    music of time reflects
    on a serene lake

    deeply rooted tree
    homes a wildflower

    a dark forest schools
    countless tiny hearts

    Keep rocking!

    Love and smiles
    Amrutha

  18. Love jacarandas! Africa days…

    —-

    the pines recite
    a song of old times

    how quickly the sun
    melts Heaven’s River

    the soft lilt of the pines
    sings of new dawn

  19. Thanks Kala for mentioning my verse and for your guidance. Congratulations Barbara, beautiful verse.

    most unexpectedly

    the jacarandas bloom

    a month earlier

    — Barbara A. Taylor

    the beagle pauses
    then moves on

  20. on the laptop screen
    images from other worlds

    *
    I’m watching the solare eclipse
    through a shard of smoked glass

    *

    let’s enjoy the light coming
    from the crossroads winds

  21. the Sequoia’s silence
    speaks volumes
    ***********************
    turtles enjoying
    what turtles enjoy
    **********************
    countless hover
    around the street lamp

  22. most unexpectedly
    the jacarandas bloom
    a month earlier

    — Barbara A. Taylor
    *
    over the mountains
    a brilliant sunrise

  23. Just for fun:

    most unexpectedly
    the jacarandas bloom
    a month earlier

    — Barbara A. Taylor

    a column of gnats spirals
    up up and away

  24. Congratulations Barbara and many thanks Kala for your guidance in this session.
    *
    a skunk crossing
    the busy highway to mate

  25. Congrats Barbara and thank you Kala for your patient guidance.

    most unexpectedly

    the jacarandas bloom

    a month earlier

    — Barbara A. Taylor

    the cliff sheds a gold nugget
    for the wood rat

  26. most unexpectedly
    the jacarandas bloom
    a month earlier

    — Barbara A. Taylor

    after all said and done
    the squirrel still has his nuts

  27. or:

    most unexpectedly
    the jacarandas bloom
    a month earlier

    — Barbara A. Taylor

    strings on a solar harp
    unavoidably in tune

    11.18.2021 by wendy © bialek

  28. I like Barbara’s ‘jacaranda’ verse a lot, and it would perhaps be hard to find a suitable ‘blossom’ that didn’t have a perfume, but it’s clear that ‘jacaranda’ blossoms, along with ‘forsythia’, ‘ wild rose’ and ‘lilac’, has a fragrance/ perfume
    and this takes us back to Marietta’s verse which states “perfume” (primarily) as well as giving the scientific name for a particular scent (petrichor).

    It would be hard to find a spring blossoming tree without a perfume/ fragrance. But there’s no way it could be argued that this lovely blossom verse didn’t take us back to last-but-one, the uchikoshi.

    1. Yes, the verse is lovely yet it does take us back to the fragrance of the petrichor verse. The name jacaranda comes from a South American language Guarani and it means ‘fragrant’.

    2. replying to both lorin and michelle……

      this is all true and perhaps, from a sabaki’s point of view….unavoidable.
      one needs to work as best as one can with what they receive.
      and sometimes the hierarchy can be art/beauty over rules.
      i believe j. carley mentioned this as well as john stevenson.

      1. “… sometimes the hierarchy can be art/beauty over rules.
        i believe j. carley mentioned this as well as john stevenson. ” – Wendy
        .
        I’d like to see where John Carley “mentioned this” in relation to uchikoshi (return to the verse -before-last). I don’t think John Stevenson has “mentioned” anything along these lines, either. Can you quote your sources for these claims, Wendy?

        1. lorin…there is no ref. in print, i know of, where it applies specifically to uchikoshi …. but here, where, we may have a first.

          1. “… sometimes the hierarchy can be art/beauty over rules.
            i believe j. carley mentioned this as well as john stevenson. ” – Wendy
            .
            “I’d like to see where John Carley “mentioned this” in relation to uchikoshi (return to the verse -before-last). I don’t think John Stevenson has “mentioned” anything along these lines, either. Can you quote your sources for these claims, Wendy?” – Lorin
            .
            “lorin…there is no ref. in print, i know of, where it applies specifically to uchikoshi …. but here, where, we may have a first.” – Wendy
            .
            (I don’t understand the 2nd part of your statement, Wendy: “…but here, where, we may have a first.” A first what??? A first reference? (That doesn’t make sense to me.) Certainly not a first 8 verse renku. You’ll find Kala’s first THF 8 verse renku in the renku archives. – Lorin)

            Wendy, you wrote: ” “… sometimes the hierarchy can be art/beauty over rules. ” I understand that part of your post is likely to be a very general statement. – Lorin
            BUT your
            “i believe j. carley mentioned this as well as john stevenson. ” – Wendy

            is an appeal to authority and you need to back it up… find and quote the relevant texts by both Johns and give your source/s.

            If, as you claim, both or either John Carley and John Stevenson “mentioned” , in relation to progression in renku , anything that could possibly be interpreted as “sometimes the hierarchy can be art/ beauty over rules” you’ll be able to source where you came across these particular “mentions” by these well-educated-in-renku leaders. “In print” isn’t necessary, in fact online, on the web, is fine and for this venue, it’s better.
            .
            What isn’t good is to make a claim that certain people “mentioned” something but you don’t or can’t back up with evidence. (See below)
            .
            “Whereas ‘link’ describes the relationship between each added verse and the previous verse, ‘shift’ governs the relationship between an added verse and its last-but-one or ‘leap-over’ verse. Essentially, each added verse must have almost nothing whatsoever to do with the last but one verse. In some circumstances it may share the same season, but other than that it must mark a truly comprehensive shift away.” – JEC

            “The late and truly great Master Meiga Higashi identified ‘uchikoshi’ as being the sine-qua non of renku composition. He proposed that even if every other convention and consideration were disregarded any piece of poetry which respected ideas of ‘uchikoshi’ would have to be treated as renku. ” – JEC
            .
            (Yes, that important! – Lorin
            .
            “The principal of uchikoshi (kannonbiraki) means that there should be no similarity between added verse and last-but-one, other than possibly belonging to the same seasonal segment, or to the ‘love’ section.” -JEC
            .
            On the art of renku:
            “But it is essential to remember, when learning these conventions, that renku is art. It is not a forensic investigation, or a high school debating society. Renku is about periodicity and modulation. It deals not so much with absolute novelty as with recontextualisation. Renku cannot be written by adherence to ‘rules’. We are artists. We must understand our materials. And create. ” – JEC
            .
            This, or similar, might be the source of your comment, I think, Wendy. But ‘art’ didn’t mean ‘beauty’ to JEC. He disliked the “string of firecrackers/ beautiful verses” idea of renku verses. The plain and the beautiful, the mundane and the exotic, the clever and the innocent, the dead serious and the comic, etc. etc.

            (All quotes from JEC are from Sandra Simpson’s choice of comments John C. made along the way in the various renku he led at the “Issa’s Snail” website. The title: ‘ Renku – A Snippet of Snails’)
            https://poetrysociety.org.nz/affiliates/haiku-nz/haiku-poems-articles/archived-articles/renku-a-snippet-of-snails/

          2. yes, thank you, lorin, you found something that appears similar to what i read in print….about renku art.
            the “beauty” part i added from a feeling i take away from this renku session with kala.
            both what is beauty and art are quite subjective.
            it intrigues me to see how each sabaki scours the list to find that gem!
            my approach here is to place in verse form responses to what i see… and have fun doing it, reading the comments and enjoying all the writers’ submitted verses…. what i see, hear, feel, and think. allowing the sabaki do his or her magic and learning/understanding the way of that sabaki; and absorbing the lessons, and gifts of wisdom, each leader brings to the session.
            kala has made me see in different ways, she has added a new depth for me. and it has made for a very positive experience.
            i would love to talk more with you about the beauty and art in being a sabaki….so let’s continue this with an email conversation….sometime soon….i am off to fun and creative, meal prep. for another organic holiday party.
            (this might post out of order)

          3. “… sometimes the hierarchy can be art/beauty over rules.
            i believe j. carley mentioned this as well as john stevenson. ” – Wendy
            .
            Well, nobody can say I didn’t try! The point, Wendy, is : if you’re going to attempt an “appeal to authority” , make sure you can back up your claim that said authority / authorities have actually “mentioned” whatever you claim they’ve mentioned. All you’ve managed to do is to cast the shadow of disrepute on two authorities, (one of them deceased) by making a claim you can’t substantiate, and in doing that you show yourself as, at best, an unreliable witness.

            … but no, I certainly don’t want any email follow-ups from you, Wendy, which would just be more wasted time for me.
            “One can lead a horse to water, but one can’t make it drink.”

          1. Thanks, Princess, I’m happy you appreciate the article, and others may, too. There are some good articles and resources online.

    3. most unexpectedly
      the jacarandas bloom
      a month earlier
      ——— Barbara A. Taylor

      *

      owls and cuckoos
      discuss the health of the forest

      *

      sunlight glitters
      off the crow’s dark edges

      *

      the fox in his den
      dreams of white rabbits

  29. a perfect, and most beautiful choice, kala….

    barbara, love your writing!
    the link of ‘unexpectedly’ with ‘surprise’,
    ‘a month earlier’ with the ‘birth of a baby’ and
    your choice of blossom having to do with with
    rebirth, etc i find so charming.

    congrats, barbara, for a most fitting piece.

    most unexpectedly
    the jacarandas bloom
    a month earlier

    — Barbara A. Taylor

  30. most unexpectedly

    the jacarandas bloom

    a month earlier
     
                            — Barbara A. Taylor

    unwavering
    light in the cat’s eyes

  31. “If a jacaranda flower drops on your head then it means good fortune. The tree represents wisdom, rebirth, wealth and good luck. The name jacaranda comes from a South American language Guarani and it means ‘fragrant’.”

    Jul. 19, 2020
    https://m.tribuneindia.com › schools
    Jacaranda — The lavish lilac – Tribune India

    I wasn’t familiar with this beautiful tree. Lovely verse.

  32. most unexpectedly
    the jacarandas bloom
    a month earlier

    — Barbara A. Taylor

    hung on one arm
    the chimp’s broad smile

  33. most unexpectedly
    the jacarandas bloom
    a month earlier

    — Barbara A. Taylor

    carps gobble air
    here and there

    Milan Rajkumar

  34. most unexpectedly
    the jacarandas bloom
    a month earlier

    — Barbara A. Taylor

    Congratulations Barbara!
    Thank you Kala for the guidance .

  35. Congratulations, Barbara. It’s a beautiful verse. I love jacarandas. I thought we were going by this instruction, however:

    “For a renku this short, it can be any blossom.
    Generally, it is only flowering trees that are allowed in longer renku.”

    At any rate, it’s still lovely.

    1. Yes, but I didn’t find any other verse better than the chosen one.
      And a jacaranda is a blossom too :))

      thq,
      _k

      1. Thank you, Lorin. 🙏 I was fortunate to have experienced these sprawling, fragrant and ephemeral trees when I lived in Pasadena, California. It seems like I read an article about one woman who was responsible for the planting and upkeep of all the jacaranda seeds in California. Now, they are all over California. They are quite entrancing in their beauty.

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