The Gift of Haiku and Senryu
It’s the holiday season, and I hope that you and yours are doing well during these difficult and crazy pandemic times. I was thinking today about the gift of haiku and what it means to me. I thought that I would share some of my favorite haiku and senryu with you, and I invite you to do the same in the comments. (Note: Please share published poems only. Some publications will not publish pieces that have appeared anywhere online.) Let’s celebrate our haiku community!
In the past year, more than 25 haiku poets have generously shared their Advice for Beginners with New to Haiku. Many, if not all, of the poets interviewed advised new poets to read, read, and read some more haiku. If you follow this advice, after a time you will begin to collect haiku and senryu in the same way that you might gather seashells, bottle caps, or memories. You may not realize it at first, but some of these poems will become a part of you.
These are just a few of the poems that live with me.
all day long
i feel its weight
the unworn necklace
This poem is from Roberta’s collection with Snapshot Press, The Unworn Necklace, and is an excellent example of senryu as narrative. I have been fascinated with this poem since I first read it. Why is the necklace unworn? Did it break? Is it lost? Was it given to someone else? Does it even exist? Similar to a choose-your-own adventure book with different possible endings, multiple interpretations of this poem are valid. The message in this poem differs depending upon the reader.
washed jeans ––
his love note
still dirty
Susan won an honorable mention in Sonic Boom‘s Fourth Annual Senryu Contest in 2018 with this deliciously sensual and surprisingly intimate poem. This poem feels like a secret between friends. Remember passing notes in high school about your latest crush? The hidden love note may be washed and faded, but if you know where to look, there’s that blush of discovery and a secret smile.
on this cold
spring 1
2 night 3 4
kittens
wet
5
— marlene mountain
The first time I read this poem by marlene mountain, which initially appeared in 1978’s moments/moments, unaloud haiku from High/Coo Press, I did a double take. This haiku has more than three lines! Can you do that? (Yes.) Wait, those are numbers! Why are there numbers? Ohhhh. They represent kittens! The kittens in this poem are arriving unexpectedly, just like this poem surprised me with its unusual line count, flow, and digits.
Good haiku continue to reveal themselves to you upon re-reading them. This poem takes that a step further by initially seeming nearly indecipherable. Personally, I did not understand this poem on the first reading or even the second! Like a puzzle, however, marlene’s haiku grabbed my attention and held on. I love the shape of the poem, which also intrigues me. I have decided that it resembles a kitten held in the mouth of the mother cat.
aster than the speed of lightf
— LeRoy Gorman
This haiku by LeRoy Gorman, which appeared in Scifaikuest in November 2016 and later won the 2017 Dwarf Stars Award, is another “puzzle” poem that I love. When I shared this one on the board for my son’s middle school class a few years ago, one child, when no one was looking, erased the “f” at the end of the poem and re-wrote it at the beginning of “aster”. The teacher was embarrassed, but I loved the way that the student interacted with the poem. Clearly, the haiku moved them so much that they had to respond! This haiku does make us uncomfortable. We want to move that “f” because leaving it at the end of the poem changes our world view.
roadside diner
a shade too brown
for service
My heart hurt when I read this senryu by Jonathan, which appeared in May 13, 2020’s THF’s Haiku Dialogue for Haiku Prism – Brown. Such pain condensed into 3 lines. Such is the power of haiku and senryu. I have not had this experience, but when I read this poem, I was right there at the roadside stand, sweating in the heat with Jonathan and his family, feeling angry, resigned, and defeated, wanting to yell at the proprietor but not knowing if it would even help. Haiku and senryu can be effective windows into someone else’s life.
30th of June
my unidentified flag
furls into itself
Similar to Jonathan’s poem, Peg’s poem, a recent winner in the First Annual Trailblazer Contest, deeply touched me. I read through lines 1 and 2 wondering what was going on. Why this seemingly inconsequential date? Why an unidentified flag? And then, on line 3, I felt a wallop: it was the end of Pride Month and loneliness permeated everything. I wasn’t sure exactly where the loneliness stemmed from, but similar to Roberta’s poem, multiple reasons came to mind. I can’t hug the poet in person yet, but at least I can tuck their poem into my heart.
the moon behind the clouds––
all these little old ladies— Mikey Kelsey, age 6
Speaking of my heart, I may be more than a little biased about this last poem, which appeared in 2014’s Rattle Young Poet’s Anthology. I love the child’s perspective here. All of the little old ladies crowding around to pinch the boy’s cheeks are holding him back, similar to the clouds shielding the brightness of the moon. Or maybe my son simply planned to moon the crowd, who knows?
What are your favorite haiku and/or senryu that you have read? Share them in the comments, and let’s celebrate our wonderful community!
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aster than the speed of lightf
— LeRoy Gorman
when I read this my head spins so fast and I can see a circle that never ends
asterthanthespeedoflightfasterthanthespeedoflightf…. excellent job
here is one of mine dedicated to Brâncuși’s art
imagination
Brâncuși’s art Bird in Space-
life’s aspirations
the Endless Column–
somewhere, another cricket
is counting the stars
First Prize: Christina Oprea
Site: Endless Column (Constantin Brancusi)
I was fortunate enough to be the judge of the World Monuments Fund (New York, USA) haiku contest, and the winning entry was about this famous piece by Constantin Brancusi (1876-1957):
https://www.wmf.org/project/brancusi’s-endless-column-ensemble
The other placed haiku that continue to be wondrous to me:
https://area17.blogspot.com/2013/08/extended-judges-report-for-2013-world.html
Alan Summers, Christina Oprea did a great job with this no wonder she got the first prize.
the recent one of mine on the same subject
The Endless Column-haiku
hope touches the sky
reborn in infinity-
the endless column
Marius Alexandru
Great!
Here’s one I just found this year in Femku that I love:
hungry for more diet culture
Tia Haynes
That’s a great one! So simple and yet so profound.
harusame ya
hachi no su tsutau
yane no mori
Basho
spring rain
the wasp-nest streams
the rafter’s leak
This one has stuck with me, but I had to look it up, and translate it.
That poem is so visual! And I can almost hear the rain running off of the wasp nest.
I may be wrong, but most of Julie’s selection strike me as senryu. What would Basho say?!
Hi Gabriel. Thank you for your comment. You aren’t wrong. I tend to not distinguish haiku and senryu in my mind, but I can see where that was confusing here. I’ve updated the column to address this. I personally think of haiku and senryu on a slider bar, with very few poems being 100% haiku or 100% senryu, but you are right — nearly all of these would be considered senryu. Thanks for catching that. P.S. Basho would invite me over for sake!
I’d invite you over myself. It would have to be peat-scented whiskey, however.
2021 WINNERS
the Haiku Society of America Nicholas A. Virgilio Memorial
Haiku/Senryu Competition
harvest moon
corn whispers
the wind’s path
Gabby Short, Grade 7
autumn breeze
the cold chains
of the old park swing
Amiya Bhattacharrya, Grade 7
2020 Winners
the Haiku Society of America Nicholas A. Virgilio Memorial
Haiku/Senryu Competition
summer night
the house creaks
a bedtime story
Sahil Gandhi | Grade 8
after my dog’s funeral
his imprint
still left in the bedsheet
Julia Kwon, Grade 10
New Year’s Eve
at midnight I kiss
my pillow
Andrew Reveno, Grade 10
Incredible work! All of them deeply moving, rich in the senses, and tactile.
Brilliant!
Alan Summers
founder, Call of the Page
Alan, thank you for sharing these! I hadn’t read them and they are amazing. I love the coldness of the park swing – a detail that an adult might not catch – and kissing the pillow at midnight. I can see why all of these poems were chosen as winners.
Hi Julie,
Or it might be something some youngsters might not notice, but was acutely observed by Amiya Bhattacharrya. It’s been a long time since I went on a swing, public parks were great to swing and chat when I was a bit older, but not now, with or without an Autumn chill! 🙂
This was incredible,
New Year’s Eve
at midnight I kiss
my pillow
Andrew Reveno, Grade 10
There’s been many a New Year’s Eve, until Karen became my partner as 1998 changed to 1999, where I was either at home or not in a romantic embrace as the year turned! 🙂
It would also work incredibly well as a one line haiku:
New Year’s Eve at midnight I kiss my pillow
So many youngster’s haiku deserve to be in regular anthologies don’t they! 🙂
Alan