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re:Virals 312

Welcome to re:Virals, The Haiku Foundation’s weekly poem commentary feature on some of the finest haiku ever written in English. This week’s poem was

 
     my shortcomings
     i bake pizza for him
     with a new recipe
          — Lucia Fontana, HaikUniverse (2021)

Lakshmi Iyer reflects on facing one’s flaws:

“my shortcomings” — Who doesn’t have them? Am I perfect? Or is he perfect? The definition of a shortcoming is a failing or something that is considered to be a flaw. An example of a shortcoming is when you are a messy and disorganized person. Perhaps you are unable to satisfy people. Or it could be that how much soever you cater to a person’s needs, they never seem to be satisfied. Here, the poet confesses to this in the very first line. And that is so powerful! She accepts her flaws, and to pacify this, she bakes a pizza with a new recipe.

I liked the way the poet is confronting her flaws through an art she knows really well. And when someone accepts and acknowledges, the baked pizza definitely tastes perfect.

Isn’t Lucia Fontana managing things so well? This simple yet striking haiku depicts human tastes in life! Beautiful!

Keith Evetts considers the compensation:

A neat senryu suggestively encapsulating self-awareness, guilt, expiation, and enduring love.

We are not told whether “he” is spouse, child, lover… (but we can probably discount “boss”!). Most likely it is the author’s partner in love, who is, she fears, hurt by what she sees as her shortcomings. And as they may not be shortcomings she can undo, she finds another way to please, to compensate, to give, to make things up to him, to do something for him that he will like; something she is able to do. A sensitive and loving heart, signaling by deeds instead of words. A “new recipe” for a fresh start.

One hopes he responds in kind. I’d just add that the way to a man’s heart is not, as generally supposed, through his stomach! But a nice dish doesn’t hurt your prospects.

Sushama Kapur sees the protag trying something new:

This poem shows the narrator seemingly acquiesced in her lot: to her shortcomings as perceived by someone significant in life, and secondly, that she’s game on trying something new to overcome these shortcomings — for this same person. Reminds me of an old and patriarchal adage of how the heart of a man can be won through his stomach!

However, the image in the phrase could be metaphorical, too: a new strategy rests in this definitive action. And it could literally be talking about any relationship other than a romantic one. Whatever that may be, the atmosphere/tone seems to be positive. She’s tried to find a solution, and while doing so has learned something new. On the other hand, the tone could also be sarcastic: “Yeah, so we’re talking about my shortcomings? Well, deal with this new pizza recipe!” Perhaps she’s thrown in more than necessary — a red pepper? or something else?

The connotations surrounding this senryu are interesting as they are layered, and in the end, the poem still keeps you wondering.

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re:Virals 313:

 
     prayer call—
     the cry of a lost calf
     at twilight
          — Sanjuktaa Asopa, The Daily Haiku (2013)

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  1. re:Virals 312:

    my shortcomings
    i bake pizza for him
    with a new recipe
    — Lucia Fontana, Haik Universe (2021)

    Very much delighted to be given a chance to comment upon this senryu
    by Lucia Fontana. Possibly a point of view of housewife in her endeavor,
    trying to appease her husband with the new recipe of pizza.
    The first line “ my short comings” with a wider coverage of faults, mistakes,
    attitudes, short temper and hasty decisions and much more given a wider
    speculations for the reader. Obviously, it sounds to be the displeased or hurt
    voice of a wife or lady love or could be even fiancée, giving vent to her thoughts of how best to retrieve her lost face or please her counterpart.
    As a result of her deficiencies, she experiments with a new recipe of pizza
    for him, all with a good intention of pleasing him.

    The same old recipe of milk power, garlic, tomato sauce and cheese and
    veggies, might not be his like and choice for the day; hence she might
    change her method and modality .While baking with a new recipe, she
    is convincing him that she is a good cook ,make up for the loss, hence
    he need not all the time point out her faults. A way to man’s heart is his belly as the old saying goes by.

    Another viable inference is that her husband /the man/ might be having
    Some foibles, defects, pitfalls which she could not put up for along time;
    Hence she decides to show she is much caring and bakes a pizza with a new
    Recipe for him.

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