Welcome to re:Virals, The Haiku Foundation’s weekly poem commentary feature on some of the finest haiku ever written in English. This week’s poem was
cool night – stars fall but don’t reach the dried grass — Ludmila Balabanova, motes in the sunbeam (2007)
Cezar-Florin Ciobîcă probes the theme of transience:
This is a poem that touches you through the tactile images it offers the reader. The first part prepares the atmosphere, giving us a hint regarding the season, which makes us feel the coldness that settles in our veins.
The second part of the poem surprises us with its pensiveness. The author seems to want the falling stars to touch the dried grass, but this is not possible. Until they reach the earth, the stars burn completely, disappearing into the ether, as if they were not there. The writer says subtly that this is the same way with human life. Man struggles day and night consuming himself for something, a purpose or goal. Then, after a number of years, only God knows how many, he disappears from the world stage, as the great Shakespeare once said, and leaves too little behind.
One feels much regret among the lines of the poem. Man is a transient being who hardly accepts his fate, seeking to understand the meaning of existence. The dried grass can regenerate in the coming year, the stars are replaced by others, but you as a unique entity can do nothing against death. “Contra vim mortis non crescit herba in hortis.” “No herb grows in the gardens against the power of death.” It is obvious that we all become absences, but we have at least the chance to continue our journey due to the light of others, of our family, our kin.
The verbs in the middle verse highlight the hastiness, the intensity of life, and the structure “but don’t” attracts attention to something sad, tragic. Moreover, the final consonant (the double “s”) sounds strange, insinuating an imperceptible sizzling noise, which haunts us even after we have read the poem.
My advice: Live your life without thinking of the deadline!
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Thank you, dear Sarma, for your kind words!
cool night –
stars fall but don’t reach
the dried grass
— Ludmila Balabanova, motes in the sunbeam (2007)
Delighted to view this week’s write by Bulgarian poetess, Ludmila Balabanova, stemming out of her close observation, perhaps with a seasonal reference to summer when parched wings of winds, have a spell on grass making them dry/ or / dry winter;
First line “cool night ’’ time reference weaving an image of moon shine/ or just then rain showers making floor and land wet, for the passers by imbibing a cool aura etc.; wintry showers or summer droplets /-hence cool night, leaving scope for wider prospects of imagination.
The second line the poetess looking up observing, “ stars fall but don’t reach”ending up with third line, “ the dried grass” signify the clear sky emitting the reflection of stars or even the droplets midway hence stars falling ; poetic term of fine observation, one cannot question, do stars fall or of how?
“ but don’t reach/ the dried grass” with an emphasis on ‘but’, delving into the sequential description, that cooler the grass, reflection or impact more; Greener or more; but, reflection of stars less on dried grass, field getting less focused upon. Another point of view in cool night, when it rains, blinking of stars after thunder or before thunder, hence, fall- and disappear, don’t reach dried grass.
Finally viewed in closer perspective, contrasting images -cool night/ dried grass/ worth mentioning.
Happy to go through your note. The following notes are quite impressive. Very interesting.
“One feels much regret among the lines of the poem. Man is a transient being who hardly accepts his fate, seeking to understand the meaning of existence. The dried grass can regenerate in the coming year, the stars are replaced by others, but you as a unique entity can do nothing against death. “
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