re:Virals 221
Welcome to re:Virals, The Haiku Foundation’s weekly poem commentary feature on some of the finest haiku ever written in English. This week’s poem was:
rehearsing
my breath
rare orchid
–Stephen toft, is/let, August 2019 Radhamani Sarma studies the breath:
This week’s poem by Stephen toft, veers round a daily habit of a breathing exercise while one repeats the same.
Beginning in the first person, the short lines, “rehearsing/my breath/” take us to view a persona’s constant rehearsal of breath in and out. The act of inhaling and exhaling, during the process, what he or she gets is the smell of all food smell, plants and herbs and roots, digested from stomach; Exercise is personalized and establishes connectivity between the nasal organ and stomach.
Another possibility is that the speaker either could be a child, might have eaten a flower of fragrance, now springing up during the breathing exercise.
Clayton Beach explores the white space:
Some haiku seem to resist any definite interpretation, choosing instead to set a tone and allow the reader to interpret as they will. This is one such ku, managing to be evocative without committing to any single interpretation and leaving many readers left wanting for answers.
“Rehearsing my breath” brings to mind a meditative setting, whether it is rooted in yoga or zazen, a measured, deliberate breathing is implied. “Rehearsing” connotes some level of insecurity or inexperience with the process, implying that the speaker is an acolyte or novice. Whatever the task, this is something that takes work or practice, and some level of concentration.
Leaving other interpretations open, at the very least the first section broadcasts a mix of vulnerability and diligence.
As a foil, “rare orchid” does not immediately shed light on the enigmatic base section, rather pointing to something seemingly unrelated. The distance between foil and base then requires quite a bit of legwork for the reader to connect the dots, a white space that may be intimidating to some readers in the gulf of meaning that we are meant to fill and which will leave us unsure of whatever answers we find.
Orchids are often a metaphor for things that are easily disrupted, fragile and particular, an “orchid child” is one who needs a very specific and narrow range of conditions to thrive. They are the ultimate “hothouse flowers.” “Rare” doubles down on this sense of the exotic, the fragile and beautifully diaphanous.
Is the flower of enlightenment something so difficult to grow? The lotus has its roots in the mud of life, with the flower representing enlightenment, but orchids are saprophytic tree dwellers, almost rooted in thin air, nestled tenuously in crooks and knotholes of lush tropical zones and only flowering when conditions are within that narrow Goldilocks zone of perfection. For this speaker, the fruit of their search is elusive, delicate and perhaps just out of reach. Rare orchid as flower of enlightenment is a hard-won insight pulled seemingly from nothing and lasting but an instant.
A more grounded and humorous reading takes the orchid as literal and re-contextualizes the rehearsal of breath; perhaps the speaker is an orchid enthusiast and is trying to pollinate or collect pollen from a rare specimen, in this case the slightest puff of breath might contaminate the pollen for long term storage, or blow precious granules away. Seed harvest is also a similarly dicey prospect, with microscopic seeds smaller and lighter than grains of sand, each of immense value, ready to scatter to the wind with the slightest of ill timed respiration, harvest must be quick, efficient and mindful of every tiny current and eddy of air.
Thus, perhaps the ku is less metaphysical than originally thought. Are we satisfied with the results? Is this a mysterious ku with metaphysical implications on the difficulties of finding enlightenment, or a lightly humorous evocation of an uncommon and eccentric hobby? Results may vary from reader to reader, and there is enough “dreaming space” to decoct any number of alternative explanations for what we find here in the spaces between the lines.
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re:Virals 222:
first drizzle
grandfather mentions an old song
–Angela Giordano, Haiku Column, August 2019
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Basho, is said to have composed:
Aki no yo o uchi-kuzushitaru hanashi kana
Breaking up this autumn night: the stories you tell
your – possible dreamscapes – brought back this …(it is from On Haiku by Hiroaki Sato…)
I don’t quite get the poem, but it does not matter, it is poetic enough to pique me and interfere with my wandering thoughts
the only word that fascinates me is – rehearsing
who is rehearsing, the orchid or the speaker or someone else? Is that a standalone verb?
Or does it continue and allude to both the breath and the rare orchid?
Is the orchid an orchid or a person or something else
So if there is a rehearsing, if it is the narrator, then what is the significance of the rare orchid
If it is the rare orchid that is rehearsing, what is the breath of the narrator signifying…
@Clayton,
Basho, is said to have composed:
Aki no yo o uchi-kuzushitaru hanashi kana
Breaking up this autumn night: the stories you tell
your – possible dreamscapes – brought back this …(it is from On Haiku by Hiroaki Sato…)
I don’t quite get the poem, but it does not matter, it is poetic enough to pique me and interfere with my wandering thoughts
the only word that fascinates me is – rehearsing
who is rehearsing, the orchid or the speaker or someone else? Is that a standalone verb?
Or does it continue and allude to both the breath and the rare orchid?
Is the orchid an orchid or a person or something else
So if there is a rehearsing, if it is the narrator, then what is the significance of the rare orchid
If it is the rare orchid that is rehearsing, what is the breath of the narrator signifying…
I can go on,
but in your words: ”Results may vary from reader to reader, and there is enough “dreaming space” to decoct any number of alternative explanations for what we find here in the spaces between the lines.”
I think I hear you in there and perhaps, I do to a certain degree concur, not more …never more…
whew, there was a problem posting, so I deleted words and reposted and both edits are here,
rehearsing
my breath
rare orchid
–Stephen toft, is/let, August 2019
How rare is it to become a human? Or I would rather ask: how rare is the miracle of dreams? “rare” could mean the orchid itself is rare, regardless of the environment, or it could imply an orchid and human being are somehow thriving in a desolate or otherwise, harsh/difficult environment. How rare is it for someone to simply acknowledge and notice the act of breathing? “rehearsing my breath” brings to mind a meditation I practice called pranayama, where the breath is deliberately controlled in a rhythmic cycle in the following sequence: breathe in 4 seconds, hold the breath for 16 seconds, and breathe out 8 seconds. This practice slows down the nervous system and helps get rid of toxins in the body. “rehearsing” brings to mind the word practice. More definitively, I would say, it is a spiritual practice for all of us to simply notice the act of breathing and observe things in life without mental conditioning.
true:
“rare” could mean the orchid itself is rare, regardless of the environment, or it could imply an orchid and human being are somehow thriving in a desolate or otherwise, harsh/difficult environment. ”
it is not so much spiritual for me, as is the fact that the narrator is rehearsing her/his breath… I find the word: rehearsing, most intriguing, it carries its own weight and the weight of the poem on its tail…
Thank you Radhamani and Clayton. I appreciate Clayton opening up the white space to multiple readings. The image of the delicate balance of a yoga meditative breathing exercise paired with the delicacy of the orchid is very evocative. My mind went in other directions. Perhaps the writer is a musician, who must rehearse breathing so as to produce a sound as pure and delicate as an orchid. Or he may be recovering from an illness that has reduced his ability to breathe, or even put him at the edge of life, represented by the fragility of the rare orchid. A beautiful poem with so many possibilities!
hey Peggy,
I have to disagree…because…because…!!!:)
to me, it seems like something Mr Wilson would do when he has to open the door to Denis the menace … the breath seems to be a stretch of patience… and that is rare like a rare orchid…
whatevah
during meditation/and yoga breathing we often bring in something to focus on. i see this orchid as an inside plant brought to the place where the session is ….
I see a list poem Wendy, what are your thoughts on that being a possibility?
Dear Gilbert,
In your detailed analysis, the following is quite
interesting and informative.
“Orchids are often a metaphor for things that are easily disrupted, fragile and particular, an “orchid child” is one who needs a very specific and narrow range of conditions to thrive. They are the ultimate “hothouse flowers.” “Rare” doubles down on this sense of the exotic, the fragile and beautiful.”
Dear Mark Gilbert,
Thanks for your kind words of appreciation.
with regards
S.Radhamani
I enjoyed both commentaries this week, but in addition I wondered whether the writer has simply struggled to the top of a rugged hill and encountered a flowering orchid which only grows at such altitudes. As this has happened to me, I didn’t find the third line so enigmatic. A fascinating haiku.