The Renku Sessions: Triparshva—call for verse 5

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1. sweet reminiscences
   of our bygone days
   — Barbara A. Taylor
   ***
   the frozen river
   with a night moon
   sliding alongside
   ***
   frozen river
   and a moon’s light
   sliding side by side

2. .
   .
   in moonlit shadow
   the stealth of the neighbor’s cat
   in last night’s snowfall
   .
   .

3. and thanks to Maureen, too.

4. Thanks Linda for accepting my verse. Also, thanks to Betty and Lorin.

   For fun:

   sweet reminiscences
   of our bygone days
   *
   taken aback
   by two smoking Santas
   in the full moon

   *

   sweet reminiscences
   of our bygone days
   *
   in the moonlit paddock
   high-jumping lambs
   with wagging tails

5. It hope this is ok: I’m changing a word in my 2nd offer —
   —
   far too early
   for wisteria to bud,
   yet the horned moon

   —

   (that ‘but’ was annoying me)
   —

   – Lorin

6. sweet reminiscences
   of our bygone days
   ~ Barbara A. Taylor
   ~ ° ~

   just a hint of moon
   and still the groundhog
   sees his shadow

7. passersby stop
   to applaud a subway
   saxophone player

   – Karen Cesar
   —

   sweet reminiscences
   of our bygone days
   ~Barbara A. Taylor
   —
   the cat in the hat
   comes back
   with the misty moon
   —

   – Lorin

   1. Nice link, Lorin.

      1. Thanks very much, Lynne. (I like it best of my 3 offers, too 🙂 )

         —
         After the formality of Latin-derived terms in the two preceding verses (‘applaud’, ‘reminiscences’) setting the ‘high’ tone of those verses, and the clear, neutral tone of the hokku & wakiku before that, I felt that a change in register and of beat might be helpful in subtly advancing the flow, as we only have verses 5 & 6 to go in the jo.
         —
         A long shot, though, perhaps … I’m aware that Linda has written, “Let this one be purely nature in its imagery.” And I can’t claim that ‘the cat in a hat’ is “purely nature” 🙂
         —

         – Lorin

8. the spill of moonlight
   over snow-laced pebbles
   along the river

9. no one left
   to pull up
   the full moon’s sock

   -Patrick

10. passersby stop
    to applaud a subway
    saxophone player
    *
    sweet reminiscences
    of our bygone days
    *
    restless
    in the moonlight
    pregnant ewes

    *
    – Sandra Simpson

    1. Nice, could be either winter or spring . . . but I hope those ewes are all polled ewes . . . 🙂

       – Lorin

       1. 😀

11. passersby stop
    to applaud a subway
    saxophone player
    *
    sweet reminiscences
    of our bygone days
    *
    holding the moon,
    for a moment or two,
    a bare-branched oak

    – Sandra Simpson

12. in this night
    even the new moon
    smell of spring

    ***

    under the cold moon
    two birdies chirp together
    to worm themselves

    ***

    under the ice moon
    Mount Fuji is shining
    more and more

13. passersby stop
    to applaud a subway
    saxophone player
    – Karen Cesar
    *
    sweet reminiscences
    of our bygone days
    ~Barbara A. Taylor
    —
    this rock pool
    big enough for a starfish
    and the hazy moon

14. passersby stop
    to applaud a subway
    saxophone player
    – Karen Cesar
    *
    sweet reminiscences
    of our bygone days
    ~Barbara A. Taylor
    —
    bathed in moonlight
    the part of the lake
    where wild ducks rest

15. passersby stop
    to applaud a subway
    saxophone player
    – Karen Cesar
    *
    sweet reminiscences
    of our bygone days
    ~Barbara A. Taylor
    ——
    moonlight
    streams across the hoofprints
    in a withered field

16. moonlight on
    the water reveals
    tadpoles morphing

    *
    or
    *
    moonlight on
    the water reveals
    morphing tadpolrs

17. sweet reminiscences
    of our bygone days
    ~ Barbara A. Taylor
    ~ ° ~
    cold crow stares
    from a branch bent low
    to the new moon
    ~ Betty Shropshire

18. sweet reminiscences
    of our bygone days
    ~ Barbara A. Taylor
    ~ ° ~
    cold crow
    shares his branch
    with moon rabbit
    ~ Betty Shropshire

    1. Or should I have said, “its branch”? POV troubles me somewhat.

       1. Revising to:
          ~•~
          cold crow
          shares a branch
          with moon rabbit

       2. You’ve already fixed the verse, but from the “nature” aspect of it, crows are not sexually dimorphic. No way for the poet observer to know it is a male. This is true of lots of birds, but not for others such as bluebirds, turkeys, mallard ducks, etc.

          1. I do like the pairing of crow and moon rabbit. My only thought would be that it’s so brief as to be tontoism with an article only on line 2. You could relax it out a bit so the language flows naturally.
             .
             a cold crow
             shares its branch
             with the moon rabbit

             1. Hmmm…I see your point. Not a fan of beginning L1 with an ‘a’ so will use instead:
                •••
                one cold crow
                shares its branch
                with the moon rabbit
                ~ ~
                Thanks for your insights, Linda! 🙂

          2. Hi Paul! Thanks for your help…I guess with crows, it’s a matter of size since females are slightly smaller.

             1. 🙂

19. only silence
    of the Pink Moon
    in melting icicles

    1. Todd, you have a double kigo here: “pink moon” and “melting icicles”. Double kigo isn’t necessarily bad but it tends to produce an overstuffed feeling in which neither kigo is free to ring true. What if you use either one or the other, or break it into two different versions?

       1. Thanks, Linda. Since we were given the choice of either winter or spring, I deliberately choose two kigo to express the feeling of transition from one season to the next. I’ll let the haiku stand as is.

          Todd

          1. 🙂

    2. I had no idea that ‘Pink Moon’ was a kigo! It comes across to me like something one might see peeking out from a lingerie catalogue. 🙂 Well, I learn something new every day:

       http://www.cbc.ca/news/technology/4-facts-about-the-pink-full-moon-1.1313175

       Not about colour, but those clove-scented, little carnation-like flowers!

       http://home.howstuffworks.com/define-dianthus-carnation-pinks.htm

       —

       – Lorin

       1. It’s not really a kigo, I guess, though it does remind one of blossom, doesn’t it? “Pink moon” (April which coincides with the warming up phases of spring up here in the northern hemisphere) comes from a calendar cycle of Native American moon names. There are a couple of websites that give them. Fun to use though I wouldn’t vouch for the reliability of the information.. I put a url to Farmer’s Almanac up top, and here’s another I’ve used:

          http://home.hiwaay.net/~krcool/Astro/moon/moonnames.htm

          1. Whatever the name for the flower was in any Native American language, the derivation of the English term is interesting:

             “The old-fashioned carnation name ‘pinks’ comes from the serrated flower edges, which look as if cut with pinking shears. And the name of the color pink is said to come from these perennials, which have been popular in gardens for hundreds of years.”

             I don’t think pinking shears were part of any pre-invasion Native American tool kit. 🙂 But it’s very interesting to find out that the name of the colour, pink, is said to have its origin in these flowers.

             – Lorin

             1. Very interesting derivation! I never knew it — but I do remember my mother’s sewing box had pinking shears. I’ve also heard the flowers referred to as “pinks.” Since that was mostly their actual color I’ve never known the other meaning.

                Yet in this renku to say “pink” is to say it — and the hokku already has color, possibly two. An example I think of is that the renku already has its quota of furred, 4-footed animals (usually only one per renku poem) and I wish to describe the wildflower “wolfsbane” it butts up against the actual animal — no matter the intention of the writer.

             2. Do we have a four-footed furry yet, Paul? Thank you for spotting the kukazu (avoidance) problem with “pink” re the hokku and color. It looks like we’re entering the phase of the renku where the early verses worm into our brains through cryptomnesia, so the more eyes spotting these things the better.

                Re the flower pink, in Renaissance painting it was a symbol of marriage.

             3. yeah, Paul…I get what you mean. If we had a wolf in one verse, it might be a tad much to have the herb, wolfsbane, in another. It’s not just the name in itself, it’s that the herb was once believed to repel wolves. So that would certainly return readers to a previous verse with a wolf in it..

                But how come we can have only one four-footed, furry animal per renku, when we can have numerous verses relating to two-footed derivatives of the ape family? ” I think I could go & live with the animals”- Walt Whitman. Quite often, I’m with Walt. And a cat is not a camel.

                Much is strange, including ‘whales’ as a kigo for winter. As an Australian, I’m only too aware that the so-called ‘scientific’ whaling in the Southern Ocean by the Japanese happens in summer…every summer, (Which is far more important to me than whether a fox gets an American H-1 visa or not…yes, I received my copy of Frogpond yesterday.

                the code words
                for nationalism –
                cicada shells

                – Lorin

                – Lorin

                – Lorin

20. Lovely verse, Barbara!
    ~°~
    sweet reminiscences
    of our bygone days
    ~ Barbara A. Taylor
    ~°~
    just old growth
    pines cradle
    the long night moon
    ~ Betty Shropshire

21. passersby stop
    to applaud a subway
    saxophone player
    – Karen Cesar
    –
    –
    sweet reminiscences
    of our bygone days
    ~Barbara A. Taylor
    –
    –
    the silence
    when the sky
    is full of moon
    –
    or
    –
    light rain
    and the silence of moonlight
    in the long grass

    1. Beautiful, both of them, but the first one feels like an autumn moon and the second, modified with long grass, feels late summer. What were your thoughts?

       1. Is it the ‘silence’ making it feel autumny? Or is the suggestion of it being a full moon making it autumn? I suppose, for me, the silence suggests ‘bareness’ which for me would be winter. And the sky ‘full of moon’ doesn’t have to be a full moon.
          .
          And yes, ‘long grass’ does make it summer more than spring, though I hadn’t thought that when I wrote it. Could it be:
          .
          light rain
          and the silence of moonlight
          in the new grass
          .
          ?

          (I’m not getting notifications of any ‘replies’… so I’ll have to make sure I check back for yours. Thanks, Linda.)

          1. 🙂

22. moon-shimmer
    on the iced river curling
    around a bend

23. passersby stop
    to applaud a subway
    saxophone player

    – Karen Cesar

    —
    sweet reminiscences
    of our bygone days
    ~Barbara A. Taylor
    —
    far too early
    for wisteria to bud,
    but the horned moon

    —

    – Lorin

    1. Very evocative–it moves nicely forward from the maeku, but how do you feel about the pun of “horned” with a saxophone in the uchikoshi?

       1. Hi Linda,
          Candidly, I think that reading a pun into ‘horned’ here is far-fetched, the very sort of forensic overkill that drove John Carley crazy (not literally crazy! He was perhaps the most sane person I came across in the poetry world) There’s certainly no pun intended, no intended reference to a ‘horn’ as a musical instrument.
          —
          But since you bring it up, I imagine that horns-as-musical-instruments etc. are called such because it’s likely that the first ones were actually made from the horns of some some animal… long ago. It’d be a long stretch, though, to read eg. ‘hornless goat’ as meaning a goat without a hunting horn or the like.
          —
          If ‘horned moon’ is a pun on ‘saxophone’ & that rules the verse out, and we apply the same logic to hypothetical cases, that would mean there could never be sheep, goats, cows, gazelles, deer etc. , a devil, (any horned animal) followed, two verses later, by any instrument from a brass band, a car (cars gave horns!) or a ship (they, too have horns!)
          —

          I recall John giving the most ludicrous example he could think of: supposedly, someone (unnamed) claimed ‘mansion’ wasn’t acceptable because ‘pigeon’ was in the uchikoshi, and of course, both have wings!
          —-
          The reason why ‘kannonbiraki’ is to be avoided is that the flow of renku must ever go forward, it shouldn’t stagnate & it shouldn’t look backward, so no verse should draw attention back to the uchikoshi .
          —

          Linda, if you think (& by naming ‘horned moon’ as a pun, it’s clear that you do think so) that ‘horned moon’ might cause some readers to “return to the uchikoshi” , and thereby disturb the forward-moving flow, that’s fine. You’re the sabaki.
          —
          Perhaps you think of a saxophone player as a horned man? 🙂 Or as a horny man? Better stop! This could get Freudian! 🙂

          —

          I actually had Richard Wright’s lovely haiku in the back of my mind, as well as Sandra’s bellowing bull:

          Coming from the woods,
          A bull has a lilac sprig
          Dangling from a horn.

          Now, the bull in Wright’s haiku is a French bull. Does that mean, I wonder, that this bull has French Horns? 🙂

          —

          (ps, of course, even if Sandra rewrote her bull verse to exclude the bellowing, in the light of your ‘horned moon’/ ‘saxophone’ analogy, we couldn’t overlook the fact that bulls have horns in relation to the uchikoshi, could we?)
          —-

          cheers,

          Lorin

          1. Just asking. Yes, important to remember that aesthetics trumps pigeonholes. At first I simply read the moon image literally, as a crescent moon with point up. I see what you’re getting at.

          2. Ohhh Lorin . . .

             Groaning as I read your punning funsterism “French Horns.”

       2. ps, here are some wisteria buds:
          —

          https://myhesperidesgarden.files.wordpress.com/2011/03/20110323_07991.jpg

          —

          I think they resemble little horns, like the horns of a calf just beginning to grow out.

          —

          Lorin

24. passersby stop
    to applaud a subway
    saxophone player
    **

    sweet reminiscences
    of our bygone days
    **
    stirring the neighbour’s bull
    to midnight bellows,
    a petal-coloured moon

    **
    – Sandra Simpson

    1. ah no, sorry, please disregard. Sound, sound.

       1. LOL kannonbiraki can really get into you head like an ear worm, can’t it? The bull’s name is Ferdinand?

          https://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/en/6/68/Ferdinand_the_Bull_film_poster.jpg

          1. “The bull’s name is Ferdinand?” – Linda

             Not likely. 🙂 A Kiwi bull is more likely to be named Angus MacKinnon, or something like that.

             Pity about the ‘midnight bellows’, Sandra. I like the verse a lot. Our cow Daisy used to trample the fence down and walk 3 miles up the road to visit her bull of choice, and break into his paddock the same way. We’d get the phone call in the morning, with the owner (jokingly) threatening to charge the sire fee.

             – Lorin

             1. The bull on the neighbouring property to my brother’s farm always sounds off on a moonlit night, doesn’t have to be full. He settles down eventually. Makes a change to the cityscape night sounds of police sirens though!

          2. Hi, Sandra

             Would that sly dog, kannonbiraki, apply to ‘note(s)’ in the wolf verse offerings?
             Betty
             (I cannot abide ear worms…just yuck!) 😉

             1. Oh, jeez, I meant to direct my question to Linda! Sorry for the confusion.

             2. Good eye, Betty. I was so focused on the double kigo that I missed the kannonbiraki–yes, I think so–a wolf’s howl can sound a little like a saxophone, can’t it? Sandra withdrew her bull verse for the same reason–sound. Now let me figure how to put your comment and mine on the appropriate thread where Deborah can easily find it.

                Thanks!

25. moonlight finds
    the frosted leaves against
    the garden wall

26. bare-tree shadows
    from the same old moon
    stretching

27. yet again
    the moon lights the loggerhead
    as she digs

28. Linda…OK! While I was out driving I realized what’s going on!! As a qualifier for the moon, I was using “wisp” as a noun: one that is thin, frail, or slight; a thin or faint fragment –“a wisp of moon”…trying to indicate the earliest visible crescent moon. So I think that didn’t come through clearly enough.
    I’m afraid this has become something of a humpty-dumpty verse. 🙂

    1. No it isn’t. It’s fine as is.

29. passersby stop
    to applaud a subway
    saxophone player
    – Karen Cesar
    —
    sweet reminiscences
    of our bygone days
    ~Barbara A. Taylor
    —
    may the road
    always rise to meet us
    and the misty moon

    —
    – Lorin

30. soap bubbles
    moonlit diamonds
    quickly vanish

    1. Joel, it feels that there’s a haiku-like cut at the end of line 1. How might you deal with that?

       1. Linda — I sensed that cut too but was hoping it was just me 🙂 Thanks for the affirmation! How about:
          soap bubble as
          moonlit diamonds
          quickly vanish

          1. left the ‘s’ off soap bubbles—
             *
             soap bubbles as
             moonlit diamonds
             quickly vanish

             1. revising just slightly because it better captures the original feel 🙂
                *
                soap bubbles
                as moonlit diamonds
                quickly vanish

             2. Third time’s the charm!

31. sweet reminiscences
    of our bygone days
    ~Barbara A. Taylor

    Congratulations, Barbara. I can hear your Irish voice speaking this one very nicely.

    – Lorin

32. Hi Linda,
    Is there a place where verse offers for previous verses are accessible?
    I understand that travel to ‘foreign’ or far places is a no-no in the first movement (jo) :

    “Though travel … might seem arbitrary, Carley explains that travel was a grueling enterprise in the Edo period,” – Linda

    But would it be reasonable to count city to suburb commuting as ‘travel’?

    “At a Station in the Metro”
    The apparition of these faces in the crowd;
    petals on a wet, black bough.

    Ezra Pound

    – Lorin

    1. Excellent point. I don’t count city to suburb commuting as “travel”, and I saw both your Coltrane and your faces in the window as commuting. Both were on my short list for the slot but what gave me pause was that the Coltrane verse, being about play on names, pulled me back to the hokku a bit too much–I’d be game to do it in the ha but not this early in the renku. Also, subway to commuter train seemed a close link–if we were in a kasen or hyakuin no problem, Triparshva, however, is a relatively short form and while we’re not under the same pressure not to repeat topics as we would have been in junicho, 22 verses is still not a lot. This concern also affected other verses with train as well as bus, station, etc, and eventually I began to realize that even all the verses with coin, which were also pretty nice, were a little too close.
       .
       I am going to revise all those resource links at the bottom and insert one that will quickly give access to all the prior threads. I’ll also try to figure out how to cross-link when I get an ongoing copy of the renku together for the bottom of each thread.
       .
       Till I get to it [done!–check the reorganized “resources” section], here’s a link to the Renku archives, everything with the tag “triparshva”:

       https://www.thehaikufoundation.org/tag/triparshva/

       1. Thanks, Linda. 🙂

          – Lorin

33. Creative thinking with season this morning, everyone. We have spring and winter, and moon in a variety of phases–full, crescent, gibbous, and represented indirectly through its moonlight. Including phases and indirect representation is good thinking because there’s the autumn moon coming up in the ha and we should make moon’s two appearances different. Phase or moonlight in this slot would allow the autumn moon to shine full and unencumbered when it comes. Or we could really challenge whomever will write that second verse by depicting a nice full moon in this first appearance. I’m open to all possibilities 😀 .

    Even if you regularly use season in your haiku, the requirements that renku impose are more demanding–the minor moon verse especially so. Now that we’re five verses into the renku, I’m thinking that it’s time to start offering feedback before the closing date for submissions so that you can tweak if you wish. Taking a leaf from Sandra I’ve started to comment here on the thread if the season is off or unclear. No comment means the verse is good to go.

34. reflected
    in the tranquil pond
    a wisp of moon

    1. Did you mean “tranquil pond” as spring, Judt? It’s not enough to defang the default of autumn.

       1. Hi Linda…thanks for the feedback, but I’m still in the dark on this…saw in the Higginson list that “tranquil” is an all-spring kigo…?

          1. Ah! Yes! So sorry--my mistake. I had checked the World Kigo Database and didn't find it. Gabi is usually very thorough but she says that the search feature on her blog is no longer working properly. "Tranquility" is there in the Yuki Teikei season word list too.
While "tranquil" doesn't hit you over the head with season, yes you're right it's spring. The wrinkle here is that you're not only seasoning a verse, you're overcoming an established season reference and changing it to another season.
There's reinforcement, though--"wispy": just to be sure I looked it up in a few online dictionaries and see that the analogies often given are smoke or clouds. So it's also redolent of "hazy moon", a classic spring kigo.
Finally, there's context: If we go with a spring moon for this slot, there will be another spring verse following it and the job of that verse then would be reinforce the season unambiguously. The winter moon option wouldn't have this luxury because it would be a singleton season verse in the slot.
A nicely subtle image, good to go--thanks for coming back to be on this one!

             1. Thanks, Linda…I’m kinda dense here, but not clear on the autumn reference…is it “pond”? I tried to find that but couldn’t.

             2. The autumn reference is the moon itself. Here are a couple of clarifications from the Wikipedia entry on Kigo:
                .
                “moon (tsuki) – all autumn (August–October), and moon-viewing (tsukimi) mid-autumn (September) – the word “moon” by itself is assumed to be a full moon in autumn. Moon-viewing and leaf-viewing in autumn are common group activities in Japan.”
                https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_kigo
                .
                “. . . It may be less obvious why the moon (tsuki) is an autumn kigo, since it is visible year round. In autumn the days become shorter and the nights longer, yet they are still warm enough to stay outside, so one is more likely to notice the moon. Often the night sky will be free of clouds in autumn, with the moon visible. The full moon can help farmers work after the sun goes down to harvest their crops (a harvest moon).”
                (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kigo)
                .
                When it’s needed to move the moon to another season, we have to modify it to knock it out of default mode, as we’re doing.
                .
                As for “pond”, modified by the adjective “tranquil”, the pond is the image that makes your verse a spring moon.

35. bear cubs cuddle
    from cold covered
    with moonlight

36. Congratulations, Barbara. A perfect fit. 🙂
    *
    the frozen pond
    glistening in the light
    of a crescent moon

    1. Hi Maureen…cross my heart 🙂 …tried to post my “pond” last night but couldn’t access verse 5 for some reason…it kept going to verse 4…?

       1. That was my mistake, Judt. So sorry. The release was supposed to be this morning; you saw it last night when I hit a wrong key in WordPress as I finished editing. I’m embarrassed and promise hard not to confuse everyone again.

          1. Hey, no problem! Gave me a chance to tweak 🙂

       2. Hi Judt. No worries. So interesting that we chose similar subject matter! The crescent moon is my favorite. “Wisp” is a wonderful word. Take care. 🙂

37. the snow moon
    rises within the notes
    of a wolf’s howl

    1. Deborah, it’s a lovely winter moon verse, though did you realize you have a double kigo–“snow” and “wolf”? That’s not necessarily “wrong”–just checking.

       1. Thank you, Linda. If I kept wolf and lost snow, would the moon remain as a winter kigo because of the wolf or would it revert to autumn? Which would be better to modify?

          1. Perhaps

             the snow moon
             climbs within the notes
             of a distant howl

             1. Obviously “perhaps” is not part of the offering.

                *****

                a snow moon
                climbs within the notes
                of her distant howl

                *****

          2. Yes, Deborah–snow is not necessary. With “wolf” there it’s still a nice winter verse.

             On that Farmer’s Almanac site you’ll see a “wolf moon”, so if you want to keep playing around with different versions, you have lots of time.

             1. passersby stop
                to applaud a subway
                saxophone player

                – Karen Cesar
                *
                sweet reminiscences
                of our bygone days

                — Barbara A. Taylor

                *
                within the notes
                of a distant howl
                a wolf moon rises

                — Deborah Barbour Lundy

    2. Deborah, this exchange between Betty and me landed over on a sub-thread of Sandra’s. If you’re like me, it’s hard finding things in these threads so I’m copying what we said here so you’ll see it:
       .

       from Betty, 7/24/1:53 pm
       “Would that sly dog, kannonbiraki, apply to ‘note(s)’ in the wolf verse offerings?”
       .
       reply by Linda, 7:12 pm
       “Good eye, Betty. I was so focused on the double kigo that I missed the kannonbiraki–yes, I think so–a wolf’s howl can sound a little like a saxophone, can’t it? Sandra withdrew her bull verse for the same reason–sound. . . ”
       .
       Right. The howl won’t work given the subway saxophone in the uchikoshi. Can you think deeper into your wolf/moon imagery and expand it in a different way?

       1. I wondered about that after reading some of the other comments. Thank you for teaching us along the way.

          a wolf moon
          creeps along the spine
          of distant mountains

          1. Nice revision–it sends a little shicer down the spine.

38. one snowdrift captures
    the curve of the waning
    gibbous moon

39. a koi rises
    through the surface
    of the rippling moon

40. sweet reminiscences
    of our bygone days
    ~Barbara A. Taylor

    *

    the illumination
    of a full buck moon
    on fresh pasture

    1. Carmen, Farmer’s Almanac gives “full buck moon” as July. So this would be a summer moon verse, wouldn’t it? If “fresh pasture” refers to transhumance, could the verse be tweaked so this carries the season?

       https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Alpine_transhumance

       1. the illumination
          of a full buck moon
          over Alpine pastures

          *

          this full buck moon
          covers the movements
          of summering livestock

41. sweet reminiscences
    of our bygone days
    ~Barbara A. Taylor

    the illumination
    of a full buck moon
    on fresh pasture

    1. But “full buck moon” still points pretty strongly to July, as it’s the name of that moon.

42. in pale moonlight
    scent of wisteria
    leads the way

43. the snow moon
    clings to the last full note
    of the wolf’s howl

44. rabbit tracks
    punch through moonlit snow crust
    into night

    1. rabbit tracks
       —
       punch through moonlit snow crust
       —
       into night

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