Hifsa Ashraf — Touchstone Award for Individual Poems Winner 2021
Hifsa Ashraf is the recipient of a Touchstone Award for Individual Poems for 2021 for her poem
late-night train
the mother’s lullaby
for everyone
— (kontinuum: kortárs haiku/contemporary haiku 1.1)
Commentary from the Panel:
“Who hasn’t been there. You’re tired and stressed from a long day at work, and you just want to get back home as hassle-free as possible. On a deeper level the train, plane, or bus commute also makes you feel “alone in a crowd,” especially at night. More existential still, maybe you feel like “a motherless child a long way from home” in the words of that old spiritual. These and other implied circumstances set the scene for us in the opening line. And then we hear a song. Not someone’s cellphone music that we dread, but rather a mother’s lullaby for the baby she cradles in her arms. A homely act which changes nothing, and yet transforms everything, about the circumstances. We are comforted now, more at peace. Each and all of us, within the sound of her voice.”
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Ginormous congrats Hifsa! I am so excited for you!
Blessings,
Veronika
Love it! Congratulations Hifsa!
Thanks to the distinguished panelists for this insightful commentary.
Thanks Alan for sharing this wonderful article. 🙂
This is a wonderful haiku!
Yes, ‘the’ adds much to the poem. Thanks to Alan for the insightful ‘article’ article. I have shared it on Twitter!
Thanks John. 🙂
This is a beautiful poem, with such depth. I can’t help but think of all the refugees leaving home by train, but also how this is a metaphor for any of us traveling in the dark and the unexpected comforts that we offer one another along the way. I think too that this poem speaks deeply to the work of mothering, which has societal impact that reaches far beyond any one family. I feel comforted by this poem each time I read it, and so in its own way it becomes a kind of lullaby too. Well done, Hifsa, and congratulations!
Thanks Meredith for your great comments. I really appreciate it.
A moving poem indeed, congratulations Hifsa!
Thanks Dan. 🙂
Using the the article “the” rather than “a” is a brilliant move that simultaneously pulls the reader in close and universalizes the idea of “mother.” A beautiful poem!
Dear Matt, really glad you picked that out! I wrote an article about articles, as this neat little grammatical device is often overlooked or underused.
The definite and indefinite article – how a house passes along the train of haiku
https://area17.blogspot.com/2018/03/the-definite-and-indefinite-article-how.html
warmly,
Alan
Spot on, Matt! It is the article that makes this haiku different. Thank you.