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Started by AlanSummers, January 31, 2017, 12:40:07 AM

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Rick Hurst

Maybe...

in the bathroom
minding my business
a woodpecker knocking

??
Paraphrasing Diane Arbus (1923-1971) Photographer: "I really believe there are things nobody would see if I didn't (write haiku about) them."

AlanSummers

Thanks flowerfox

Can you make sure you credit it fully?

e.g.

The Slip-Realism Perception Challenge
by Alan Summers
https://poetrysociety.org.nz/affiliates/haiku-nz/haiku-poems-articles/monthly-article/

Alan's blog: http://area17.blogspot.com

enjoy!

Quote from: flowerfox on February 01, 2017, 05:58:39 AM
Quote from: Alan Summers on January 31, 2017, 06:31:30 PM
Hi Rick, and flowerfox,

I rarely make our Call of the Pages (formerly With Words) exercises public, but as it started as a Per Diem feature right here at The Haiku Foundation I decided to make it public.

I am very happy for people to ask permission to use the exercise. If it's for someone other than just themselves I would appreciate due acknowledgement and my Area 17 web address being added.

People are welcome to post haiku here on the THF forums, and draw my attention to them, and acknowledge my name and Area 17 address.

Hi flowerfox,

By all means, if you could fully credit myself and my Area 17 blog: http://area17.blogspot.com

Quote from: flowerfox on January 31, 2017, 05:34:58 PM
Ah, good question, Rick, and one I was going to ask as I was thinking I could present
something for critique in the mentoring the beginner section, later this week.

warm regards,

Alan

Many thanks, Alan. I'll certainly do that.
Alan Summers,
founder, Call of the Page
https://www.callofthepage.org

AlanSummers

Hi Rick,

I won't be able to comment on pieces here or in the forums but do enjoy!  I am stacked up with work and we are launching our first online haiku course shortly, still a space or two. :-)

Haiku course:
http://area17.blogspot.co.uk/2017/01/the-online-intermediate-haiku-course.html

But quickly don't think it's just about using the other senses that we neglect. Read the entire article and look up the examples on the hyperlinks within the article. There is more to it than meets the eye, ear, tastebuds, fingertips etc...

warm regards,

Alan

Quote from: justlikeyou on February 01, 2017, 02:45:45 PM
Maybe...

in the bathroom
minding my business
a woodpecker knocking

??
Alan Summers,
founder, Call of the Page
https://www.callofthepage.org

Rick Hurst

OK Alan, gotcha. Thank you. Until Tax Season is over here in the US (April 18) I am reluctant to take on anything beyond what I already have, but please let me know if and when you do another similar intensive after that date. I would surely love to be a part of a future course. :-) Rick
Paraphrasing Diane Arbus (1923-1971) Photographer: "I really believe there are things nobody would see if I didn't (write haiku about) them."

AlanSummers

Thanks Rick,

We just have one space left on our course, so nearly sold out. So I will be incredibly busy with new material etc... for the course, and be very quiet for at least a couple of months.

I will incorporate the Slip-Realism exercise as it's attracted a lot of positive attention, and might create a PDF at a later date of work. But in the meantime, it's heads down and working incredibly hard to do my students justice. :-)

Quote from: justlikeyou on February 01, 2017, 03:11:40 PM
OK Alan, gotcha. Thank you. Until Tax Season is over here in the US (April 18) I am reluctant to take on anything beyond what I already have, but please let me know if and when you do another similar intensive after that date. I would surely love to be a part of a future course. :-) Rick
Alan Summers,
founder, Call of the Page
https://www.callofthepage.org

Rick Hurst

Best of luck with it Alan. I'm sure it will be a wonderful experience for all.  :)
Paraphrasing Diane Arbus (1923-1971) Photographer: "I really believe there are things nobody would see if I didn't (write haiku about) them."

Jan Benson

#21
Rick:

I think you are counting on "bathroom humor" in your haiku.
Perhaps bring it into more of a nature aspect?

Of course, I'm new to slip realism too, so (grain of salt)...

beyond the fogged
bathroom window
a woodpecker
taps his breakfast

It's rather more a senryu than a haiku, so I think it can bear the "sentence" read.
Yours for consideration or rejection.
Jan in Texas
---1st Prize_The Italian Matsuo Basho Award 2016 (Int'l Foreign Language)
---A Pushcart Nominated Poet, (haiku "adobe walls").
---"The poet is accessible, the poet is for everyone." Maya Angelou

Lorraine Pester

Quote from: justlikeyou on February 01, 2017, 02:45:45 PM
Maybe...

in the bathroom
minding my business
a woodpecker knocking

??

Rick,
This makes me think of a large family all trying to use the bathroom first thing. The woodpecker knocking is the next kid in line saying 'come on! My turn!' Unlike Jan, I don't see it as 'bathroom humor.'

Lorraine
My entire soul is a cry, and all my work is a commentary on that cry.   Nikos Kazantzakis

Rick Hurst

 ;D Thanks for the read guys but I'm not sure Alan wants his thread tied up. Suffice it say that this is a report of a completely literal situation.  ;D
Paraphrasing Diane Arbus (1923-1971) Photographer: "I really believe there are things nobody would see if I didn't (write haiku about) them."

AlanSummers

The Slip-Realism Perception Challenge by Alan Summers (February 2017)
is now archived at:
https://poetrysociety.org.nz/affiliates/haiku-nz/haiku-poems-articles/archived-articles/the-slip-realism-perception-challenge/

The challenge exercise is updated here:
http://area17.blogspot.co.uk/2018/01/slip-realism-haiku-about-lives-and.html

You can leave your published slip-realism haiku/senryu in the comments too! :-)

warm regards,
Alan
Alan Summers,
founder, Call of the Page
https://www.callofthepage.org

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