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pat nelson

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Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« Reply #75 on: January 23, 2012, 07:49:44 AM »
the game of  War
we slap the cards down hard
following thunder

Adelaide


thunder muffles
old hanging chimes
soft snoring

Matthew


snoring dragon...
a down feather floats up
and down with the smoke

Vida


smoke rings
wobble then dissipate
lost signals

daysleeper


signals
the tiny door in my head
opens to sky blue

pat

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Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« Reply #76 on: January 23, 2012, 08:19:42 PM »
I deleted this link because it was not done correctly.  (See Don's post following this)

Adelaide
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Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« Reply #77 on: January 24, 2012, 10:52:15 AM »
Hello folks,

Please keep in mind that the "last" word of the prior poem is the first word of the next.  That's how the little train works.  So, Adelaide's poem should begin with "blue" instead of "open".  I hope this helps keep us on track.

Thanks for playing!

all the best,

Don
I write haiku because they're there ...

storm drain
the vertical axis
of winter

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Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« Reply #78 on: January 24, 2012, 06:15:50 PM »
Sorry Don.  I didn't know that it had to be the last word.  I thought it was any word in the last line.  I guess my other contributions were not correct, either.

I'll try another one:

blue morning
fragrant notes pulling me
inside the cafe

Adelaide

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Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« Reply #79 on: January 25, 2012, 06:40:01 PM »
No worry ...  ;D  Nice poem by the way!!!
I write haiku because they're there ...

storm drain
the vertical axis
of winter

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Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« Reply #80 on: January 26, 2012, 03:12:39 AM »
blue morning
fragrant notes pulling me
inside the cafe

Adelaide

Café DuMonde'
my fallen beignet
some pigeon's prize

daysleeper

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Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« Reply #81 on: January 26, 2012, 12:28:39 PM »
very nice poem! :D
i'm a fan of haiku poems especially basho haiku

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Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« Reply #82 on: January 26, 2012, 03:41:33 PM »
blue morning
fragrant notes pulling me
inside the cafe

Adelaide

Café DuMonde'
my fallen beignet
some pigeon's prize

daysleeper

prize fighters
two plastic robots
toe to toe

Andy

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Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« Reply #83 on: January 27, 2012, 12:55:48 AM »
blue morning
fragrant notes pulling me
inside the cafe

Adelaide

Café DuMonde'
my fallen beignet
some pigeon's prize

daysleeper

prize fighters
two plastic robots
toe to toe

Andy

toe testing
his sudden look and sly smile
says yes

daysleeper

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Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« Reply #84 on: February 01, 2012, 07:12:22 PM »
toe testing
his sudden look and sly smile
says yes

daysleeper

What happened to the posts that came after this one?  There was mine and one or two others.

Adelaide

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Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« Reply #85 on: February 02, 2012, 04:17:52 PM »
toe testing
his sudden look and sly smile
says yes

daysleeper

From what I've read on another post, it seems that some data has been deleted. so I'll post my link to the train again.

yesterday's storm
all that seemed permanent
toppled

Adelaide

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Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« Reply #86 on: March 01, 2012, 07:07:19 PM »
Looks like the haiku train is stalled.  Anyone out there ready to start it up again?

Adelaide

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Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« Reply #87 on: March 02, 2012, 06:33:03 AM »
toe testing
his sudden look and sly smile
says yes

daysleeper


yesterday's storm
all that seemed permanent
toppled

Adelaide


toppled lego
another failed attempt
at world domination

Alan Summers

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Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« Reply #88 on: March 02, 2012, 07:14:33 AM »
toe testing
his sudden look and sly smile
says yes

daysleeper


yesterday's storm
all that seemed permanent
toppled

Adelaide


toppled lego
another failed attempt
at world domination

Alan Summers

domination over
the priest removes
his dog collar

John McManus

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Re: All aboard, for the Haiku Train ....
« Reply #89 on: March 02, 2012, 07:17:40 AM »
I like this, but got me thinking what if...

domination over
the priest removes
his dog's collar

Just a thought. :-)

Alan