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Differentiate monoku, monostich and duostich

Started by Lorraine Pester, February 13, 2021, 04:11:28 PM

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Lorraine Pester


I have looked extensively for a way to tell these three forms apart. I located Area 17's brief showing of Alan's newest books that have these in them. But I'm unable to find any kind of discussion article.

Link(s) or a conversation about it please?

Thank you.

Lorraine
My entire soul is a cry, and all my work is a commentary on that cry.   Nikos Kazantzakis

AlanSummers

re:
Re: Differentiate monoku, monostich and duostich

I would not call any of them 'forms'.

monoku tends to be a one line haiku (basically haiku as a monostich pronounced monoSTICK)
monostich is just a single line verse: https://briefpoems.wordpress.com/tag/monostich/
duostich is a two line verse, or just a verse that is two lines!

One line haiku are traditional in Japanese writing, but only in the last decade or so outside Japan.

Here's a monostich blog:
https://monostich.blogspot.com

"monoku": https://area17.blogspot.com/2016/12/travelling-single-line-of-haiku-one.html

There are a lot more duostich haiku being done but often it's obvious that the third line is 'tucked' into the second/last line.

A few from me:

scattered leaves on a pond
goldfish surfacing

Alan Summers
Publication credit: Albatross, The Constanza Haiku Society, Romania
Vol. III No.1 Spring-Summer/No.2 Autumn-Winter 1994



vee of a gumtree
four egrets black against the sky

Alan Summers
Award credit:  Commended, New Zealand Poetry Society International Poetry Competition 1994
Publication credits: the old moon and so on  The New Zealand Poetry Society Inc. (1994);  Scope feature, FAWQ, Australia May 94; Azami #20 (1994) Micropress yate, july 95; Azami #27
Collection: sundog haiku journal: an australian year   sunfast press 1997 reprinted 1998



disembodied voices, darkness, light
              express train jolts

Alan Summers
Publications credit: Point Judith Light (1994 & 1995)



into the evening a tractor harvests
                            willywagtail song

Alan Summers
Publication credit: Azami Special Edition (Japan, 1998)



Os Sacrum
this pear on Plato's diaphragm

Alan Summers
Publication credits: Bones - a journal for contemporary haiku Issue 0.1 2012 reissued 2013
Collection: Does Fish-God Know (Yet To Be Named Free Press 2012)



Kafka's insect
. . . I share half‐lives I didn't want


Alan Summers
Publication credit: Does Fish-God Know (YTBN Press 2012)


six-year-olds who work out past┓
└tense forms of imaginary verb

Alan Summers
Publication Credit: c.2.2. Anthology of short-verse ed. Brendan Slater & Alan Summers
(Yet To Be Named Free Press 2013)


girl in an owl

a human gun for yellow

Alan Summers

ublication Credit:
c.2.2. Anthology of short-verse ed. Brendan Slater & Alan Summers
(Yet To Be Named Free Press 2013)


the shadows that don't belong
daffodil trail

Alan Summers
Publication Credit: Yanty's Butterfly 2016 Haiku Nook Anthology
Lots of 1-line, 2-line, 3-line, and 4-line haiku by all authors!
https://jsalzer.wixsite.com/yantysbutterfly/buy


night clouds
the pull of the sound-fox

straight falling snow
the small talk in prison

Alan Summers
hedgerow, a journal of small poems #111 ed. Caroline Skanne (2017)

So just let you decide yourself whether to write a poem or haiku in a 1-2-3 or 4-line format!

warm regards
Alan

Quote from: Lorraine Pester on February 13, 2021, 04:11:28 PM

I have looked extensively for a way to tell these three forms apart. I located Area 17's brief showing of Alan's newest books that have these in them. But I'm unable to find any kind of discussion article.

Link(s) or a conversation about it please?

Thank you.

Lorraine
Alan Summers,
founder, Call of the Page
https://www.callofthepage.org

Lorraine Pester

Quote from: Lorraine Pester on February 13, 2021, 04:11:28 PM

I have looked extensively for a way to tell these three forms apart. I located Area 17's brief showing of Alan's newest books that have these in them. But I'm unable to find any kind of discussion article.

Link(s) or a conversation about it please?

Thank you.

Lorraine

Thank you so much for your time Alan. This was the explanation and examples I've been looking for  🙃

Back to the drawing board with the experimental tanbun.

Lorraine
My entire soul is a cry, and all my work is a commentary on that cry.   Nikos Kazantzakis

flowerfox

Kafka's insect
... I share half-lives I didn't want

Alan Summers
Does Fish-God Know

This time around, I did a search for the the story. A sad little tale, with an ending I didn't expect.
Knowing a little of Alan's past, through open and honest conversations, during workshops, I find the second line is something to ponder over.

Thanks for the links.

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