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A single line of haiku

Started by AlanSummers, March 30, 2019, 08:13:09 PM

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AlanSummers

At Call of the Page we are considering a special online haiku workshop focusing on one line haiku (also known as monoku) later this year, if this interests you, please don't hesitate to contact Karen at: admin@callofthepage.org


Travelling the single line of haiku
http://area17.blogspot.com/2016/12/travelling-single-line-of-haiku-one.html




eye of the song a blackbird touching the void


Alan Summers
Winner, The British Haiku Society Awards 2018
Haiku Section judge: Scott Mason



Judge's commentary by Scott Mason:
"A Rubik's ku of perception and intuition held together with synaesthesia, the winning one-liner beguiles and haunts me. What and where is the "eye" of a blackbird's song? How does that eye "touch" the void? What void are we talking about here anyway – some nexus of negative color (blackness), sound (silence) and capability? ... the focus of Emerson's "transparent eyeball" turned inward? These questions and others draw me into a state of dreamlike reverie, impelled by a creature in equal parts totem and flesh. (The last "literary" bird to transport me like this was a thrush, in Burnt Norton.)"

Emerson's "transparent eyeball"
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Transparent_eyeball

Burnt Norton and the thrush
http://www.english.illinois.edu/Maps/poets/a_f/eliot/norton.htm

Burnt Norton (the first poem of T. S. Eliot's Four Quartets.):
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Burnt_Norton


"Stunning.  Wallace Stevens does come to mind--only you did it with one line. It's beautiful to read out loud and haunting." —Jo Balistreri USA

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Alan Summers,
founder, Call of the Page
https://www.callofthepage.org

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