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Thanks!  Sadly, my small world on Facebook after posting the link still wants the jelly donut laden middle age spread of a 5-7-5.   Can't seem to think outside that box.  But I tried...

I  would have liked to have seen this! 
Only rabbit ears where I am.

Quote from: Alan Summers on May 07, 2015, 10:35:42 AM
Hi Betty,

Quote from: Betty Shropshire on May 07, 2015, 10:10:20 AM
Hi Alan,

I'm not sure.  I created a monoku in the beginner section about 'mantle rock' and did not specify that it was also a certified national historic site on the Trail Of Tears.  I did submit it to a publication along with other monokus...one was accepted (hooray!!) but not that one.  And now I am wondering if a heading or author's note might have leant that one more credence or generated more depth??
Given the international community, maybe these headings are a necessity.  Personally, I like trying to figure out the intent and enjoy having to do research when faced with a 'huh?'

Respectfully,
Betty

I certainly agree that a reader nowadays ought to know more general knowledge, and anything outside that is easily remedied by a few seconds of looking it up on the internet.

You could always make it into a short prose and haiku piece by making the note at the head of the haiku into a title.  Or enclose a footnote that can be published at the discretion of the editor.

Perhaps it could be gathered into an extended prose piece with a haiku, so it becomes a haibun maybe?

Do you have a photograph too, so you can combine the short prose text, and haiku, into a shahai?

warm regards,

Alan

p.s.

Thanks for being the brave one to start the discussion going, and I hope others have questions, and examples too. :)

You're welcome!

No photograph.  But possibly a haibun could arise as my original intent had to do more with the rocks in the earth's mantle and their special quality of producing water, ie.  "sweating out" but it took on a different  life.
Seems that I  am more destined to write haibun as a result of trying to clarify a particular haiku.   
Anyway, I look forward to hearing what others have to say.   My haiku background is terribly limited and I am eager to keep egg off my face!

Best regards,
Betty 

Hi Alan,

I'm not sure.  I created a monoku in the beginner section about 'mantle rock' and did not specify that it was also a certified national historic site on the Trail Of Tears.  I did submit it to a publication along with other monokus...one was accepted (hooray!!) but not that one.  And now I am wondering if a heading or author's note might have leant that one more credence or generated more depth??
Given the international community, maybe these headings are a necessity.  Personally, I like trying to figure out the intent and enjoy having to do research when faced with a 'huh?'

Respectfully,
Betty 

Coming in late.  Since this game is still open, I wanted to cast my vote for Patrick Sweeney's alchemical verse.  Melding the chemical ball and stick coloration of nitrogen (sky blue) in a protein molecule with an image of a mythical white horse...perhaps a hill cut stick figure outline of a horse that can be seen from the sky....shows us his positive life force....is pure alchemy for me.   I love it.