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Congrats marion, that sounds so cool.  I'm a bit envious,

Andy

alone
the first man on the moon
steps into immortality

Andy

immortaity?
a fruit fly in the glass
with over aged wine

Vida

wine and roses -
this blood-moon awaits
the wolf

Don

wolf whistle
the fox on the corner
turns to look

Andy

leaves
will return in spring
our cat is gone forever

Nu Quang

forever
the time between this second
and the next

Andy

next time –
i'm glad there
is one

lulu

one dozen roses
placed before his photo-
12 years alone

Adelaide

alone
the first man on the moon
steps into immortality

Andy

falling in love
the twists and turns
of autumn leaves

Adelaide

leaves
will return in spring
our cat is gone forever

Nu Quang

forever
the time between this second
and the next

Andy

Yes Jack, I had the same problem.  I finally just typed the address into my browser and was taken to the correct site.

Andy

Vida, wonderful insight.

Andy

Don, glad I could add another facet to your pondering.

Andy

Alan, Pat thank you for your kind words.

Andy

My youngest brother died in 1979, long before I discovered haiku.  I wrote this recently:

summer sky
that cloud looks like
my brother

blue morning
fragrant notes pulling me
inside the cafe

Adelaide

Café DuMonde'
my fallen beignet
some pigeon's prize

daysleeper

prize fighters
two plastic robots
toe to toe

Andy

Happy Thanksgiving.  After the obvious, I am thankful for new found friends at THF.

Andy

If you have a smart phone or I-pod touch and have not done this yet, re-direct to the THF main page and get the haiku app. What a great way to read great haiku on lunch or break, and it's free!

Andy

the word god being eaten by a field of robins      Scott Metz

The visual aspect of a field robins feeding on something is compelling, but to me the phrase 'the word god' is very enigmatic.  At first I read it as 'worm god', until my second reading.  As Vida said, it does have religious undertones.  Is this the word (of) god, the bible?  Jesus himself is referred to as the word in John 1:1.  Is this a reference to him?  In either case I struggle with this because of my own beliefs.  But another interpretation could be that this is the word's god.  What would be god to a word?  A dictionary?  Maybe instead of a bible in the field being eaten by robins it is a dictionary?


say it so it sounds like starling she says      Chris Gordon

I love the alliteration of this one.  Read quickly it is close to being a tongue twister.  Read more slowly it has a rhythmic, melodic quality to it.  It is playful and when I read it I can see her as she leans close and whispers in her lovers ear,  'say it so it sound like starling'.

My vote goes to Chris

Alan, John thanks for the good advice.  Alan, thank you for the links, the deja-ku article is good.  John, I think your reply is a good rule to go by.  Just to let you know, I wasn't seriously considering doing this although the thought did briefly cross my mind.  That just made me wonder how different they should be.  Again, thank you both, I appreciate your guidance.

Andy

I recently posted a haiku with a revision:

still morning
two leaves fall
in unison

still morning
two leaves fall
together

I am wondering how different two haiku should be in order to not be considered under consideration by another publication if submitted to two journals?  How different should they be in order to simultaneously submit them to different publications? 

Andy