a darkness so deep
I am surrounded
by gold beetles
Paul Pfleuger, Jr.
through eye holes
of a paper mask
I watch the gate closing
Fay Aoyagi
Both of them, I love. The second one I can identify with and it is one I'd want to read again and again. I think it could be read in different ways.
With Paul's haiku, however, I keep trying to search for answers. First I am wondering why are they gold? If I have to have beetles surround me one day I want them to be gold! ;-) I could read a lot into this one. And still never be sure. So I will for now vote for Paul's.
I am surrounded
by gold beetles
Paul Pfleuger, Jr.
through eye holes
of a paper mask
I watch the gate closing
Fay Aoyagi
Both of them, I love. The second one I can identify with and it is one I'd want to read again and again. I think it could be read in different ways.
With Paul's haiku, however, I keep trying to search for answers. First I am wondering why are they gold? If I have to have beetles surround me one day I want them to be gold! ;-) I could read a lot into this one. And still never be sure. So I will for now vote for Paul's.