All aboard, for the Haiku Train !
A mystery tour with no comment or critique - it's haiku just for fun!
please link first Haiku ( carriage ) by adding a haiku of your own { the next carriage ) your haiku should start with the last word from the previous haiku - warm up here, have fun everyone ! Let's see how far this train can travel! Example -
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..........summer
summer solstice
a train gathers speed
and dandelion snow
Okay, I'll play . . .
Linking verse:
summer solstice
a train gathers speed
and dandelion snow
~Gael
New verse:
snow-capped ledge
the tidewash
of the windswept sea
~cat
Next?!
cat
summer solstice
a train gathers speed
and dandelion snow
~Gael
snow-capped ledge
the tidewash
of the windswept sea
~cat
seaborne
memory of prawn curry
aboard a minesweeper
-Alan
summer solstice
a train gathers speed
and dandelion snow
~Gael
snow-capped ledge
the tidewash
of the windswept sea
~cat
seaborne
memory of prawn curry
aboard a minesweeper
-Alan
minesweeper -
the fishermen haul
a heavy catch
Gael
summer solstice
a train gathers speed
and dandelion snow
~Gael
snow-capped ledge
the tidewash
of the windswept sea
~cat
seaborne
memory of prawn curry
aboard a minesweeper
-Alan
minesweeper -
the fishermen haul
a heavy catch
Gael
catch-
the old dog twitches
in his sleep
Bea
summer solstice
a train gathers speed
and dandelion snow
~Gael
snow-capped ledge
the tidewash
of the windswept sea
~cat
seaborne
memory of prawn curry
aboard a minesweeper
~Alan
minesweeper -
the fishermen haul
a heavy catch
~Gael
catch-
the old dog twitches
in his sleep
~Bea
sleep lab
the more they try to make it
feel like home . . .
~cat
summer solstice
a train gathers speed
and dandelion snow
~Gael
snow-capped ledge
the tidewash
of the windswept sea
~cat
seaborne
memory of prawn curry
aboard a minesweeper
~Alan
minesweeper -
the fishermen haul
a heavy catch
~Gael
catch-
the old dog twitches
in his sleep
~Bea
sleep lab
the more they try to make it
feel like home . . .
~cat
home run
half the bat follows
the ball
~Don
summer solstice
a train gathers speed
and dandelion snow
~Gael
snow-capped ledge
the tidewash
of the windswept sea
~cat
seaborne
memory of prawn curry
aboard a minesweeper
~Alan
minesweeper -
the fishermen haul
a heavy catch
~Gael
catch-
the old dog twitches
in his sleep
~Bea
sleep lab
the more they try to make it
feel like home . . .
~cat
home run
half the bat follows
the ball
~Don
ball four
shouts the Little League ump
parents start fighting
~Al
summer solstice
a train gathers speed
and dandelion snow
~Gael
snow-capped ledge
the tidewash
of the windswept sea
~cat
seaborne
memory of prawn curry
aboard a minesweeper
~Alan
minesweeper -
the fishermen haul
a heavy catch
~Gael
catch-
the old dog twitches
in his sleep
~Bea
sleep lab
the more they try to make it
feel like home . . .
~cat
home run
half the bat follows
the ball
~Don
ball four
shouts the Little League ump
parents start fighting
~Al
fighting the urge
to see him again . . .
this dusty road
~cat
summer solstice
a train gathers speed
and dandelion snow
~Gael
snow-capped ledge
the tidewash
of the windswept sea
~cat
seaborne
memory of prawn curry
aboard a minesweeper
~Alan
minesweeper -
the fishermen haul
a heavy catch
~Gael
catch-
the old dog twitches
in his sleep
~Bea
sleep lab
the more they try to make it
feel like home . . .
~cat
home run
half the bat follows
the ball
~Don
ball four
shouts the Little League ump
parents start fighting
~Al
fighting the urge
to see him again . . .
this dusty road
~cat
road trip
a shanty motel
on the edge of town
~Don
The train seems to be slowing down . . .
summer solstice
a train gathers speed
and dandelion snow
~Gael
snow-capped ledge
the tidewash
of the windswept sea
~cat
seaborne
memory of prawn curry
aboard a minesweeper
~Alan
minesweeper -
the fishermen haul
a heavy catch
~Gael
catch-
the old dog twitches
in his sleep
~Bea
sleep lab
the more they try to make it
feel like home . . .
~cat
home run
half the bat follows
the ball
~Don
ball four
shouts the Little League ump
parents start fighting
~Al
fighting the urge
to see him again . . .
this dusty road
~cat
road trip
a shanty motel
on the edge of town
~Don
town pier
seiners rocking
under a mackerel sky
~cat
Hi Gael,
The haiku train seems locked except for admins and moderators. You didn't press anything you shouldn't have? ;-)
Alan
Thanks to our super hero, Dave, we are now unlocked! I didn't know this feature was even there. I followed his very precise directions to unlock this topic again.
YaY! Thanks! Ok, lets get some haijin to move this train along!!!
summer solstice
a train gathers speed
and dandelion snow
~Gael
snow-capped ledge
the tidewash
of the windswept sea
~cat
seaborne
memory of prawn curry
aboard a minesweeper
~Alan
minesweeper -
the fishermen haul
a heavy catch
~Gael
catch-
the old dog twitches
in his sleep
~Bea
sleep lab
the more they try to make it
feel like home . . .
~cat
home run
half the bat follows
the ball
~Don
ball four
shouts the Little League ump
parents start fighting
~Al
fighting the urge
to see him again . . .
this dusty road
~cat
road trip
a shanty motel
on the edge of town
~Don
town pier
seiners rocking
under a mackerel sky
~cat
Sky TV
a cable is removed
in the big house
–Alan
summer solstice
a train gathers speed
and dandelion snow
~Gael
snow-capped ledge
the tidewash
of the windswept sea
~cat
seaborne
memory of prawn curry
aboard a minesweeper
~Alan
minesweeper -
the fishermen haul
a heavy catch
~Gael
catch-
the old dog twitches
in his sleep
~Bea
sleep lab
the more they try to make it
feel like home . . .
~cat
home run
half the bat follows
the ball
~Don
ball four
shouts the Little League ump
parents start fighting
~Al
fighting the urge
to see him again . . .
this dusty road
~cat
road trip
a shanty motel
on the edge of town
~Don
town pier
seiners rocking
under a mackerel sky
~cat
Sky TV
a cable is removed
in the big house
–Alan
house warming –
the glow of everyone's
cheeks
~Don
perhaps it might be easier as Cat did at the beginning to just put the previous linking verse ? Saving space ;D
house warming –
the glow of everyone's
cheeks
~ Don
cheeks flushed -
a child's sled flies
down the hill
~ Gael
Helo, Gael and other haiku train passengers,
It might be useful to put the previous two. I suggest that because it's what's being done in the renga I'm participating in, and it does give a little bit more of what's gone before, so the additions don't have the same imagery too close together.
cat
house warming –
the glow of everyone's
cheeks
~ Don
cheeks flushed -
a child's sled flies
down the hill
~ Gael
hillwalking...
heather always
one step ahead
~col
cheeks flushed -
a child's sled flies
down the hill
~ Gael
hillwalking...
heather always
one step ahead
~col
ahead of us shines
january's crescent moon
above the tree tops
onecloud
Hello,
Well, I'm glad "tree tops" is two words here instead of one!
hillwalking...
heather always
one step ahead
~col
ahead of us shines
january's crescent moon
above the tree tops
~onecloud
tops hidden in mist . . .
below the mountains,
blossoming plum
~cat
ahead of us shines
january's crescent moon
above the tree tops
~onecloud
tops hidden in mist . . .
below the mountains,
blossoming plum
~cat
plum seeds
a few kids brandish
their slingshots
~Don
tops hidden in mist . . .
below the mountains,
blossoming plum
~cat
plum seeds
a few kids brandish
their slingshots
~Don
twilight party
Elvis brandishes
a Memphis Slingshot
~Alan
plum seeds
a few kids brandish
their slingshots
~Don
twilight party
Elvis brandishes
a Memphis Slingshot
~Alan
slingshot stone flying
to Goliath's left temple
crashing to the ground
onecloud
twilight party
Elvis brandishes
a Memphis Slingshot
~Alan
slingshot stone flying
to Goliath's left temple
crashing to the ground
~onecloud
ground zero
my friend's story
about her friend
~Alan
slingshot stone flying
to Goliath's left temple
crashing to the ground
~onecloud
ground zero
my friend's story
about her friend
~Alan
two friends
visit the graves
of the unknown
~Maggie
Hello,
ground zero
my friend's story
about her friend
~Alan
two friends
visit the graves
of the unknown
~Maggie
unknown scent
in the blossoming meadow
climate change
~cat
two friends
visit the graves
of the unknown
~Maggie
unknown scent
in the blossoming meadow
climate change
~cat
change
the promise of every
politician lie
~Don
;D
unknown scent
in the blossoming meadow
climate change
~cat
change
the promise of every
politician lie
~Don
if it's only a white one
let it lie
no one gets hurt
~Alan
change
the promise of every
politician lie
~Don
if it's only a white one
let it lie
no one gets hurt
~Alan
hurtful words
water off a duck's back
dabble and dive
~ Gael
if it's only a white one
let it lie
no one gets hurt
~Alan
hurtful words
water off a duck's back
dabble and dive
~ Gael
Dive Cafe
a few fat pigeons
on the steps
~Don
hurtful words
water off a duck's back
dabble and dive
~ Gael
Dive Cafe
a few fat pigeons
on the steps
~Don
steps to heaven?
some say three
others twelve
~col
no D in pigeons don!
col :)
Well, unless it's Walter.
But he certainly wasn't fat.
::)
cat
Hello,
Dive Cafe
a few fat pigeons
on the steps
~Don
steps to heaven?
some say three
others twelve
~col
twelve o'clock
and still awake . . .
bitter moon
~cat
"bitter moon" is apparently the December full moon in China -- at least according to this:
http://home.hiwaay.net/~krcool/Astro/moon/moonnames.htm
Chen-ou, where are you?
cat
@Col:
::) :P :o ;D ;)
steps to heaven?
some say three
others twelve
~col
twelve o'clock
and still awake . . .
bitter moon
~cat
moon's halo -
a porthole
into space
~Gael
It would be cool to get this kickstarted again!
steps to heaven?
some say three
others twelve
~col
twelve o'clock
and still awake . . .
bitter moon
~cat
moon's halo -
a porthole
into space
~Gael
space hoppers
in the back of the shed . . .
spring clean
~John
twelve o'clock
and still awake . . .
bitter moon
~cat
moon's halo -
a porthole
into space
~Gael
space hoppers
in the back of the shed . . .
spring clean
~John
clean underwear
a noon breeze weaves
the clothesline
~ Don
moon's halo -
a porthole
into space
~Gael
space hoppers
in the back of the shed . . .
spring clean
~John
clean underwear
a noon breeze weaves
the clothesline
~ Don
clothesline--
fifteen yard penalty
for a personal foul
~Andy
space hoppers
in the back of the shed . . .
spring clean
~John
clean underwear
a noon breeze weaves
the clothesline
~ Don
clothesline--
fifteen yard penalty
for a personal foul
~Andy
foul throw—
seventy-thousand groans
rent the air
~John
clean underwear
a noon breeze weaves
the clothesline
~ Don
clothesline--
fifteen yard penalty
for a personal foul
~Andy
foul throw—
seventy-thousand groans
rent the air
~John
airborne & weightless
finally able
to slam dunk
~Al
clothesline—
fifteen yard penalty
for a personal foul
~Andy
foul throw—
seventy-thousand groans
rent the air
~John
airborne & weightless
finally able
to slam dunk
~Al
dunkin' donuts
an obese pigeon loiters
by the door
~John
foul throw—
seventy-thousand groans
rent the air
~John
airborne & weightless
finally able
to slam dunk
~Al
dunkin' donuts
an obese pigeon loiters
by the door
~John
door to door
under the waxing moon
a pumpkin
~Don
airborne & weightless
finally able
to slam dunk
~Al
dunkin' donuts
an obese pigeon loiters
by the door
~John
door to door
under the waxing moon
a pumpkin
~Don
pumpkins appear
on all the porches
orange October
~Andy
dunkin' donuts
an obese pigeon loiters
by the door
~John
door to door
under the waxing moon
a pumpkin
~Don
pumpkins appear
on all the porches
orange October
~Andy
October birthday
he makes a wish and starts
blowing leaves
~Vida
door to door
under the waxing moon
a pumpkin
~Don
pumpkins appear
on all the porches
orange October
~Andy
October birthday
he makes a wish and starts
blowing leaves
~Vida
leaves blowing
around her bare feet . . .
moonlit taxi rank
~John
pumpkins appear
on all the porches
orange October
~Andy
October birthday
he makes a wish and starts
blowing leaves
~Vida
leaves blowing
around her bare feet . . .
moonlit taxi rank
~John
rank socks . . .
the smell of summer
at the laundromat
~ Don
October birthday
he makes a wish and starts
blowing leaves
~Vida
leaves blowing
around her bare feet . . .
moonlit taxi rank
~John
rank socks . . .
the smell of summer
at the laundromat
~ Don
laundromat window-
one garbage bag falls
from the shopping cart
~ Vida
leaves blowing
around her bare feet . . .
moonlit taxi rank
~John
rank socks . . .
the smell of summer
at the laundromat
~ Don
laundromat window-
one garbage bag falls
from the shopping cart
~ Vida
cart of fruit
alien...
on the city sidewalk
~ Kizen
rank socks . . .
the smell of summer
at the laundromat
~ Don
laundromat window-
one garbage bag falls
from the shopping cart
~ Vida
cart of fruit
alien...
on the city sidewalk
~ Kizen
side walk slide slip the crab waltz boogie step
- Sue
rank socks . . .
the smell of summer
at the laundromat
~ Don
laundromat window-
one garbage bag falls
from the shopping cart
~ Vida
cart of fruit
alien...
on the city sidewalk
~ Kizen
side walk slide slip the crab waltz boogie step
- Sue
step by step
the cat learns how to catch
from the koi pond
- Alan
cart of fruit
alien...
on the city sidewalk
~ Kizen
side walk slide slip the crab waltz boogie step
- Sue
step by step
the cat learns how to catch
from the koi pond
pond clouds
and cattail fluff
white on blue
Hi there,
Could you add all authors' names onto each link including your own?
Glad you added to the train. ;-)
Alan
Quote from: pat sparrow on January 04, 2012, 12:16:51 PM
cart of fruit
alien...
on the city sidewalk
~ Kizen
side walk slide slip the crab waltz boogie step
- Sue
step by step
the cat learns how to catch
from the koi pond
pond clouds
and cattail fluff
white on blue
side walk slide slip the crab waltz boogie step
- Sue
step by step
the cat learns how to catch
from the koi pond
- Alan
pond clouds
and cattail fluff
white on blue
- Pat
blue ribbons
amongst the debris
New Year
- Sue
the New Year
adding fresh vegetables
to yesterday's soup
Adelaide
pond clouds
and cattail fluff
white on blue
- Pat
blue ribbons
amongst the debris
New Year
- Sue
the New Year
adding fresh vegetables
to yesterday's soup
-Adelaide
soup stones?
they sell them now
in bookshops
-Vida
pond clouds
and cattail fluff
white on blue
- Pat
blue ribbons
amongst the debris
New Year
- Sue
the New Year
adding fresh vegetables
to yesterday's soup
-Adelaide
soup stones?
they sell them now
in bookshops
-Vida
used bookshop
immersed in genarations
of old dust
Adelaide
the New Year
adding fresh vegetables
to yesterday's soup
-Adelaide
soup stones?
they sell them now
in bookshops
-Vida
used bookshop
immersed in genarations
of old dust
Adelaide
old dust
we become closer friends
this hot and cold night
Alan
used bookshop
immersed in genarations
of old dust
Adelaide
old dust
we become closer friends
this hot and cold night
Alan
night owl
along the roof tops
the sound of fog
Don
used bookshop
immersed in genarations
of old dust
Adelaide
old dust
we become closer friends
this hot and cold night
Alan
night owl
along the roof tops
the sound of fog
Don
fog horn
marks time amongst
anchored boats
Sue
old dust
we become closer friends
this hot and cold night
Alan
night owl
along the roof tops
the sound of fog
Don
fog horn
marks time amongst
anchored boats
Sue
anchored boats
in the bathtub...
the sailor yawns
Vida
night owl
along the roof tops
the sound of fog
Don
fog horn
marks time amongst
anchored boats
Sue
anchored boats
in the bathtub...
the sailor yawns
Vida
yawning . . .
her date pours the last glass
of mountain red
pat
fog horn
marks time amongst
anchored boats ~ Sue
anchored boats
in the bathtub...
the sailor yawns ~ Vida
yawning . . .
her date pours the last glass
of mountain red ~ pat
red dawn —
his face slapped
by an autumn chill ~ don
a chill in the air
we discuss new wills
in the autumn dusk
Adelaide
anchored boats
in the bathtub...
the sailor yawns ~ Vida
yawning . . .
her date pours the last glass
of mountain red ~ pat
red dawn —
his face slapped
by an autumn chill ~ don
a chill in the air
we discuss new wills
in the autumn dusk
Adelaide
autumn dusk
a faint sound scent
of fox
Alan
yawning . . .
her date pours the last glass
of mountain red ~ pat
red dawn —
his face slapped
by an autumn chill ~ don
a chill in the air
we discuss new wills
in the autumn dusk
Adelaide
autumn dusk
a faint sound scent
of fox
Alan
fox tracks
only the crunch of snow
for company
pat
red dawn —
his face slapped
by an autumn chill ~ don
a chill in the air
we discuss new wills
in the autumn dusk
Adelaide
autumn dusk
a faint sound scent
of fox
Alan
fox tracks
only the crunch of snow
for company
pat
company lunch
my boss measures
his sandwich
John
autumn dusk
a faint sound scent
of fox
Alan
fox tracks
only the crunch of snow
for company
pat
company lunch
my boss measures
his sandwich
John
sandwiched between
a Kindle and the Times
on the underground
Sue
fox tracks
only the crunch of snow
for company
pat
company lunch
my boss measures
his sandwich
John
sandwiched between
a Kindle and the Times
on the underground
Sue
Underground
the first note probes
my Balkan bones
Vida
company lunch
my boss measures
his sandwich
John
sandwiched between
a Kindle and the Times
on the underground
Sue
Underground
the first note probes
my Balkan bones
Vida
bone marrow
the wag of ancestral tongues
war to war to war
pat
company lunch
my boss measures
his sandwich
John
sandwiched between
a Kindle and the Times
on the underground
Sue
Underground
the first note probes
my Balkan bones
Vida
bone marrow
the wag of ancestral tongues
war to war to war
pat
the game of War
we slap the cards down hard
following thunder
Adelaide
Quote from: Adelaide on January 17, 2012, 05:22:24 PM
company lunch
my boss measures
his sandwich
John
sandwiched between
a Kindle and the Times
on the underground
Sue
Underground
the first note probes
my Balkan bones
Vida
bone marrow
the wag of ancestral tongues
war to war to war
pat
the game of War
we slap the cards down hard
following thunder
Adelaide
thunder muffles
old hanging chimes
soft snoring
Matthew
bone marrow
the wag of ancestral tongues
war to war to war
pat
the game of War
we slap the cards down hard
following thunder
Adelaide
thunder muffles
old hanging chimes
soft snoring
Matthew
snoring dragon...
a down feather floats up
and down with the smoke
Vida
smoke rings
wobble then dissipate
lost signals
daysleeper
the game of War
we slap the cards down hard
following thunder
Adelaide
thunder muffles
old hanging chimes
soft snoring
Matthew
snoring dragon...
a down feather floats up
and down with the smoke
Vida
smoke rings
wobble then dissipate
lost signals
daysleeper
signals
the tiny door in my head
opens to sky blue
pat
I deleted this link because it was not done correctly. (See Don's post following this)
Adelaide
Hello folks,
Please keep in mind that the "last" word of the prior poem is the first word of the next. That's how the little train works. So, Adelaide's poem should begin with "blue" instead of "open". I hope this helps keep us on track.
Thanks for playing!
all the best,
Don
Sorry Don. I didn't know that it had to be the last word. I thought it was any word in the last line. I guess my other contributions were not correct, either.
I'll try another one:
blue morning
fragrant notes pulling me
inside the cafe
Adelaide
No worry ... ;D Nice poem by the way!!!
blue morning
fragrant notes pulling me
inside the cafe
Adelaide
Café DuMonde'
my fallen beignet
some pigeon's prize
daysleeper
very nice poem! :D
blue morning
fragrant notes pulling me
inside the cafe
Adelaide
Café DuMonde'
my fallen beignet
some pigeon's prize
daysleeper
prize fighters
two plastic robots
toe to toe
Andy
blue morning
fragrant notes pulling me
inside the cafe
Adelaide
Café DuMonde'
my fallen beignet
some pigeon's prize
daysleeper
prize fighters
two plastic robots
toe to toe
Andy
toe testing
his sudden look and sly smile
says yes
daysleeper
toe testing
his sudden look and sly smile
says yes
daysleeper
What happened to the posts that came after this one? There was mine and one or two others.
Adelaide
toe testing
his sudden look and sly smile
says yes
daysleeper
From what I've read on another post, it seems that some data has been deleted. so I'll post my link to the train again.
yesterday's storm
all that seemed permanent
toppled
Adelaide
Looks like the haiku train is stalled. Anyone out there ready to start it up again?
Adelaide
toe testing
his sudden look and sly smile
says yes
daysleeper
yesterday's storm
all that seemed permanent
toppled
Adelaide
toppled lego
another failed attempt
at world domination
Alan Summers
toe testing
his sudden look and sly smile
says yes
daysleeper
yesterday's storm
all that seemed permanent
toppled
Adelaide
toppled lego
another failed attempt
at world domination
Alan Summers
domination over
the priest removes
his dog collar
John McManus
I like this, but got me thinking what if...
domination over
the priest removes
his dog's collar
Just a thought. :-)
Alan
Perhaps Alan, the possible implication of a bitch certainly would fit!
warmest,
John
yesterday's storm
all that seemed permanent
toppled
Adelaide
toppled lego
another failed attempt
at world domination
Alan Summers
domination over
the priest removes
his dog collar
John McManus
collar -
the spring fever
of lipstick
Don
toppled lego
another failed attempt
at world domination
Alan Summers
domination over
the priest removes
his dog collar
John McManus
collar -
the spring fever
of lipstick
Don
lipstick
at the murder scene
plum blossom
Sue
domination over
the priest removes
his dog collar
John McManus
collar -
the spring fever
of lipstick
Don
lipstick
at the murder scene
plum blossom
Sue
plum blossoms
the soft fragrance
of his aftershave
Adelaide
collar -
the spring fever
of lipstick
Don
lipstick
at the murder scene
plum blossom
Sue
plum blossoms
the soft fragrance
of his aftershave
Adelaide
aftershave
cheapened by overuse:
morning ritual
Matthew
collar -
the spring fever
of lipstick
Don
lipstick
at the murder scene
plum blossom
Sue
plum blossoms
the soft fragrance
of his aftershave
Adelaide
aftershave
cheapened by overuse:
morning ritual
Matthew
ritual flower
the student delivers
symbolic devotion
marty-
plum blossoms
the soft fragrance
of his aftershave
Adelaide
aftershave
cheapened by overuse:
morning ritual
Matthew
ritual flower
the student delivers
symbolic devotion
marty
devotion
the carpenter's calluses
at confession
Alan
aftershave
cheapened by overuse:
morning ritual
Matthew
ritual flower
the student delivers
symbolic devotion
marty
devotion
the carpenter's calluses
at confession
Alan
confession moon—
how many secrets
does a seashell hold?
John
ritual flower
the student delivers
symbolic devotion
marty
devotion
the carpenter's calluses
at confession
Alan
confession moon—
how many secrets
does a seashell hold?
John
hold of the ship
full of elephant tusks
Ivory coast
marty
devotion
the carpenter's calluses
at confession
Alan
confession moon—
how many secrets
does a seashell hold?
John
hold of the ship
full of elephant tusks
Ivory coast
marty
roller coaster
the screeching voice
of an icy wind
Adelaide
confession moon—
how many secrets
does a seashell hold?
John
hold of the ship
full of elephant tusks
Ivory coast
marty
roller coaster
the screeching voice
of an icy wind
Adelaide
wind blown hair
my favorite photo
of her and her horse
marty
hold of the ship
full of elephant tusks
Ivory coast
marty
roller coaster
the screeching voice
of an icy wind
Adelaide
wind blown hair
my favorite photo
of her and her horse
marty
horses exercise
round and round the paddock-
neither first nor last
Adelaide
roller coaster
the screeching voice
of an icy wind
Adelaide
wind blown hair
my favorite photo
of her and her horse
marty
horses exercise
round and round the paddock-
neither first nor last
Adelaide
last minute deals...
I buy a ticket
for Ascension Thursday
Vida
roller coaster
the screeching voice
of an icy wind
Adelaide
wind blown hair
my favorite photo
of her and her horse
marty
horses exercise
round and round the paddock-
neither first nor last
Adelaide
last minute deals...
I buy a ticket
for Ascension Thursday
Vida
Sunday prayers --
stain glass-sun lights up
empty pews
Snow Leopard
Dear
"Snow Leopard,"Sorry, but all the verses, for this particular exercise, spring out from the
last word, so you'll need to start your first line with
Thursday.
Look forward to your revised or new verse. :-)
Alan
Quote from: Snow Leopard on April 27, 2012, 01:01:24 AM
roller coaster
the screeching voice
of an icy wind
Adelaide
wind blown hair
my favorite photo
of her and her horse
marty
horses exercise
round and round the paddock-
neither first nor last
Adelaide
last minute deals...
I buy a ticket
for Ascension Thursday
Vida
Sunday prayers --
stain glass-sun lights up
empty pews
Snow Leopard
Alan,
My mistake too. I thought the next person could use both words "Ascension Thursday." It's a bit of a stretch to start only with Thursday :)) (at least for me). Sorry!
I'll change my verse. Here,
roller coaster
the screeching voice
of an icy wind
Adelaide
wind blown hair
my favorite photo
of her and her horse
marty
horses exercise
round and round the paddock-
neither first nor last
Adelaide
last minute deals...
I buy a ticket
for Ascension Day
Vida
My apologies, Alan. I misunderstood the rules of this Haiku Train. I wrongly assumed that Thursday was a cue for a weekday reference not specifically Thursday itself :-[
Vida - very thoughtful of you to change your final line to day. :)
I will try again.
roller coaster
the screeching voice
of an icy wind
Adelaide
wind blown hair
my favorite photo
of her and her horse
marty
horses exercise
round and round the paddock-
neither first nor last
Adelaide
last minute deals...
I buy a ticket
for Ascension Day
Vida
day
lingers into the night -
red glow in the moon
Snow Leopard
wind blown hair
my favorite photo
of her and her horse
marty
horses exercise
round and round the paddock-
neither first nor last
Adelaide
last minute deals...
I buy a ticket
for Ascension Day
Vida
day
lingers into the night -
red glow in the moon
Snow Leopard
moon landing
she takes the first step
and calls home
Adelaide
home
inaccessible in Cholon . . .
I need a spaceship
Nu Quang
day
lingers into the night -
red glow in the moon
Snow Leopard
moon landing
she takes the first step
and calls home
Adelaide
home
inaccessible in Cholon . . .
I need a spaceship
Nu Quang
___________________________
spaceship blues . . .
the rising sun
is falling
Don
day
lingers into the night -
red glow in the moon
Snow Leopard
moon landing
she takes the first step
and calls home
Adelaide
home
inaccessible in Cholon . . .
I need a spaceship
Nu Quang
___________________________
spaceship blues . . .
the rising sun
is falling
Don
falling in love
the twists and turns
of autumn leaves
Adelaide
falling in love
the twists and turns
of autumn leaves
Adelaide
leaves
will return in spring
our cat is gone forever
Nu Quang
I have a question regarding haiku posted on this train. Are they considered published?
Adelaide
Hi Adelaide,
They are not edited, or selected by an editor, but they are visible to unregistered viewers. Some magazine editors may not choose to accept them as they can be seen by people.
There are editors who don't have issues with haiku that can be seen by people before publication.
Alan
Quote from: Adelaide on July 25, 2012, 05:19:05 PM
I have a question regarding haiku posted on this train. Are they considered published?
Adelaide
Thank, Alan, for your quick reply.
Adelaide
falling in love
the twists and turns
of autumn leaves
Adelaide
leaves
will return in spring
our cat is gone forever
Nu Quang
forever
the time between this second
and the next
Andy
next time –
i'm glad there
is one
lulu
falling in love
the twists and turns
of autumn leaves
Adelaide
leaves
will return in spring
our cat is gone forever
Nu Quang
forever
the time between this second
and the next
Andy
next time –
i'm glad there
is one
lulu
one dozen roses
placed before his photo-
12 years alone
Adelaide
leaves
will return in spring
our cat is gone forever
Nu Quang
forever
the time between this second
and the next
Andy
next time –
i'm glad there
is one
lulu
one dozen roses
placed before his photo-
12 years alone
Adelaide
alone
the first man on the moon
steps into immortality
Andy
next time –
i'm glad there
is one
lulu
one dozen roses
placed before his photo-
12 years alone
Adelaide
alone
the first man on the moon
steps into immortality
Andy
immortality?
a fruit fly in the glass
with over aged wine
Vida
one dozen roses
placed before his photo-
12 years alone
Adelaide
alone
the first man on the moon
steps into immortality
Andy
immortality?
a fruit fly in the glass
with over aged wine
Vida
wine and roses –
this blood-moon awaits
the wolf
Don
alone
the first man on the moon
steps into immortality
Andy
immortaity?
a fruit fly in the glass
with over aged wine
Vida
wine and roses -
this blood-moon awaits
the wolf
Don
wolf whistle
the fox on the corner
turns to look
Andy
Vida
wine and roses -
this blood-moon awaits
the wolf
Don
wolf whistle
the fox on the corner
turns to look
Andy
looking back at me
the accusing eye
of the shot deer
Adelaide
wine and roses -
this blood-moon awaits
the wolf
Don
wolf whistle
the fox on the corner
turns to look
Andy
looking back at me
the accusing eye
of the shot deer
Adelaide
deer tracks
under the window...
I sign the prenup
Vida
wolf whistle
the fox on the corner
turns to look
Andy
looking back at me
the accusing eye
of the shot deer
Adelaide
deer tracks
under the window...
I sign the prenup
Vida
prenup –
the hummingbird guards
her nest
Don
wolf whistle
the fox on the corner
turns to look
Andy
looking back at me
the accusing eye
of the shot deer
Adelaide
deer tracks
under the window...
I sign the prenup
Vida
prenup –
the hummingbird guards
her nest
Don
nest in a pine tree
abandoned half-way complete--
so many promises
Adelaide
deer tracks
under the window...
I sign the prenup
Vida
prenup –
the hummingbird guards
her nest
Don
nest in a pine tree
abandoned half-way complete--
so many promises
Adelaide
the promises of God...
she adjusts the IV drip
and turns a page
Vida
deer tracks
under the window...
I sign the prenup
Vida
prenup –
the hummingbird guards
her nest
Don
nest in a pine tree
abandoned half-way complete--
so many promises
Adelaide
the promises of God...
she adjusts the IV drip
and turns a page
Vida
paper cut
I kiss the finger holding
The Wasp Factory
i.m. Iain Banks
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Wasp_Factory
Alan Summers
nest in a pine tree
abandoned half-way complete--
so many promises
Adelaide
the promises of God...
she adjusts the IV drip
and turns a page
Vida
paper cut
I kiss the finger holding
The Wasp Factory
i.m. Iain Banks
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Wasp_Factory
Alan Summers
factory floor
a spider and a machine
join forces
John McManus
forces or fate
either way
it is written
.
paper cut
I kiss the finger holding
The Wasp Factory
i.m. Iain Banks
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Wasp_Factory
Alan Summers
factory floor
a spider and a machine
join forces
John McManus
forces or fate
either way
it is written
devora
...ten times
a butterfly finds
the big O
Alan Summers
.
factory floor
a spider and a machine
join forces
John McManus
forces or fate
either way
it is written
devora
...ten times
a butterfly finds
the big O
Alan Summers
"O Captain!
My Captain!" he whispers
-- dropped lollypop
forces or fate
either way
it is written
devora
...ten times ("written", the ending word is missing as the beginning word here, :), don )
a butterfly finds
the big O
Alan Summers
"O Captain!
My Captain!" he whispers
-- dropped lollypop
lollypop -
the unique sound
of sugar
...ten times ("written", the ending word is missing as the beginning word here, :), don )
a butterfly finds
the big O
Alan Summers
Alan's side note: actually the ... is written. ;)
"O Captain!
My Captain!" he whispers
-- dropped lollypop
Tracy
lollypop -
the unique sound
of sugar
Don Baird
sugar she says
I think a tougher word
exists in her mind
Alan Summers
in her mind
it is winter still
-- cottonwood flurry
Apologies Don..
lolly pop -
the unique sound
of sugar
Don Baird
sugar she says
I think a tougher word
exists in her mind
Alan Summers
in her mind
it is winter still
- cottonwood flurry
Tracy
flurry of fingers
the argument
takes off
Nicole Andrews
Please continue the journey format of including four poems in each post: three prior and the new addition. This makes it much easier to follow the sequence with a new poem (without hunting down the prior posts on prior pages) :)
Thank you.
Tracy and Nicole. Please revise your posts to include the three prior poems - four total including yours. Thank you.
Don
sugar she says
I think a tougher word
exists in her mind
Alan Summers
in her mind
it is winter still
- cottonwood flurry
Tracy
flurry of fingers
the argument
takes off
Nicole Andrews
off or on
the switch sparks
bad start
marty